Revelation

[size=1][color=#8B008B][B]Raiha[/B] and [B]Gavin[/B]; [B]Zen[/B] and Erica. That's a nice mix, if I should say so myself. Granted, I'm pretty sure I'd want to kill Mike a few times, just to get it out of my system. But you know, I do feel for the two. I mean, they're a tragic couple destined to be at each others' throats for the rest of their lives. But anyways, so now we've got [B]White[/B] and [B]Retribution[/B] back, huh? I guess they went and did a Jesus- died and resurrected three very long days after. It just makes me wonder if they'll notice Zen in the booth and start a fight. I mean, it really does make me wonder. Speaking of Jesus, are you going to have Joe and Annie come back to life too? Or are we done with the entire resurrections?[/size][/color]

[size=1][color=#8B008B]Well go figure; who would've thought you'd be back? Oh right, welcome back by the way. I've got to say, this is definitely one of your great works. And, is it just me or are the stories in the Anthology beginning to go back to assassins and hitmen all over again? Well, in any case, I wonder how he's going to get out of being Toby.[/size][/color]

[size=1][color=#8B008B]The man stood in the doorway where the light barely touched. I saw him pat the shoulder of one of the interrogators who left the room. He stepped into the room and let the door close behind him, its hinges creaking. He walked towards me and I sat there, wide-eyed and teeth clenched tight. He came closer and closer until he sat on the edge of the table in front of me. My eyes trailed his body from the tip of his shoes to the crown of his head. He was no different from when I last saw him; yet there was something different about him. I averted my eyes slowly from him and looked forward. I steadied my breathing as I contrasted the man beside and the man I knew long ago. This man wore a beautiful white suit with diamond cufflinks and black tie; the man I knew in my past wore the opposite: black suit with onyx cufflinks and white tie. Yet he was still devilishly handsome as he always was. It always amazed me how oddly handsome he looked with his muss black hair and soft Japanese features. Yet in that moment, it wasn’t his good looks that made my blood boil or my muscles tighten. I wasn’t quite sure if it was the shock or the disbelief that I felt but there was something not quite right with him. Here stood the man that I knew a good portion of my life, the man that I thought I had killed with my own hands. I looked up at him and said, [B]“You’re late, Kwai.”[/B] He chuckled and replied, [B]“I was caught in traffic, Erica.”[/B] I let out a scoff and balled my hands into a fist, cracking them as I did. Neither of us spoke after that. The only sound that could be heard was the creaking of the swinging lamp and Kwai’s shuffling feet. I watched him kneel down onto the ground then watched him bend over my wrists. When he stood back up, the fetters that restrained me were released and thrown on the table. He stood with arms folded as he watched me stand and stretch my legs. [B]“You look well, Erica.”[/B] I could tell he was trying to make small-talk. It was his signature: make the enemy comfortable yet nervous and then pounce on him unsuspectingly. [B]“And the scar on your hand seems to have healed pretty well.”[/B] [B]“Yes, it has healed pretty well.”[/B] I subconsciously rubbed my thumb against the risen scar on my wrist. I then remembered the scar I’d given Kwai. [B]“And the scar under your jaw seems to have healed over.”[/B] Kwai chuckled. [B]“You still remember that? Your memory’s sharp.” “You have no idea, dear brother.”[/B] The tone in my voice was filled with anger and acid. [B]“And speaking of memory, I killed you. How is it that you’re still alive?” “You never actually killed me, Erica.”[/B] The door opened again before I could speak. I turned to see what Kwai was looking at. In the doorway stood one of the most- if not the most- dangerous woman I would ever meet in my life. [B]“Raiha.”[/B] Yeah, a bit late- three years late- but I still got the second part in. Now, hopefully I'll get the third bit in. Anywho, here's to the history of Erica. Cheers.[/size][/color]

[quote name='Gavin'][SIZE="1"]Yes dear. *Wonders off-hand how many people just made whipping sounds*[/SIZE][/QUOTE] [size=1][color=#8B008B]*Makes whipping noise* Oh how well-trained [B]Raiha[/B] has you. I kid![/size][/color] [quote name='Gavin'][SIZE="1"]The narration gives a slick feel to the action in the way it's understated which I liked a lot, it's sort of vivid without being vivid if you know what I mean.[/SIZE][/QUOTE] [size=1][color=#8B008B]Oddly enough, I actually get what you mean. The imagery and details are subtle yet visible. Every line in this is vivid and has a lot going on but with very few words.[/size][/color]

[size=1][color=#8B008B]How crazy love can make us. Even to the point of sticking two poisoned needles into the man you love. Then again, that could only be [B]Raiha[/B] and her love for poisons. Or perhaps it's [B]Gavin[/B]'s immortality that makes her want to kill him, then save him. Who knows? But you know, I wonder who else will pop up in this story. I really do wonder. Well, let's get cracking, [B]Mike[/B]. Get those fight scenes in and whatnot. =P[/size][/color]

[quote name='Raiha'][COLOR="DarkOrchid"][FONT="Times New Roman"]And the number of cat hairs I could count or rather couldn?t count on his jeans told me I should probably separate the two around bed time.[/FONT][/COLOR][/QUOTE] [size=1][color=#8B008B]My kid and your kid; let the hormones start flying. I wonder what [B]Ikillion[/B] would say to that; considering Crystia is one of two daughters he has. I wonder how I'd react. And speaking of me, are Vicky and I ever coming back or did we get swallowed up by a black hole of some kind? Just curious, is all.[/size][/color]

[size=1][color=#8B008B]So the prodigal son returns? For how long this time, I wonder? Kidding. But really, in all seriousness, I'm glad to see this back. The idleness of [B]The Hit[/B]'s been far too long and, to be honest, we need more action in the Anthology. And agreeing with [B]Gavin[/B], I can't wait to read your legendary fight scenes.[/size][/color]

[quote name='indifference'][COLOR="Indigo"]Oh so wrong in so many ways Rev. The mark of a good writer is that you can [I]write.[/I] Not that you can only write certain things. There's no such thing as being incapable of imagining things. [I]Especially [/I]when there's already a ton of materials online that one can use as a reference to help one get the details for a visual for a request like this. So really the only thing stopping Raiha from doing this is herself and no one else. And it's not a reflection or has anything to do with her current writing abilities so there's no need to defend that. If it's something that doesn't interest her, [I]and I can see why because writing in a fashion you are not familiar with is a thousand times harder than sticking to what you know,[/I] then hey, it doesn't interest you. But don't attempt to make it out as if she's not capable, because she is. And so what if it sucks a bit? That's what a place like this is all about, posting for feedback, not sitting there and looking pretty from the get go.[/COLOR][/QUOTE] [size=1][color=#8B008B]I do digress. It?s true that how you?re able to overcome obstacles as a writer is what makes you a good writer; however, saying she was incapable was my mistake. I suppose I meant to say that she can refuse to write about mechas because, well, she does not have a preferential like towards them. Like I said before, saying she was incapable was my mistake. I agree that she?s fully capable of doing such but it really is her preference and decision as to whether she wants to write something about mechas or psychopaths or fluffy little rabid vampire bunnies or not. And I?m not trying to make her out to be this pedestal-sitting-oldie, rather I?m just trying to take it from her point of view. You?re right, this is a place to receive Constructive Criticism and should not be a place where certain members get special treatment; but we all have to remember that we?re at [B]Raiha[/B]?s discretion. True enough, there are things that could help better her as a writer, but you can?t force someone to change nor can you teach an old dog new trick- no offense in the ?old dog? term, [B]Raiha[/B]. But anyways, I?m not here to debate about writing capabilities and whatnot. I'm sure everyone's getting tired of that; let's just enjoy ourselves in reading the gruesome deaths of another member.[/size][/color]

[quote name='Allamorph'][FONT=Arial]Exactly. In other words, you only want requests where you can further exercise what you [I]already know how to do[/I]. (^_^)[/QUOTE][/FONT] [size=1][color=#8B008B]Well, actually, the way [i]I[/i] see it is that it's not exercising what she "already knows how to do," rather she's exercising what she's able to see herself writing. There are some things people can imagine in their minds and some things people can't; Raiha's case is that mechas aren't included in her imagination.[/size][/color] [quote name='Allamorph'][FONT=Arial]You need more practice in your weak areas. It'll make your strong ones stronger.[/QUOTE][/FONT] [size=1][color=#8B008B]As far as "practice" goes, it's not a matter of weak or strong areas. I find that it is a matter of how [B]Raiha[/B] can portray a certain imagery through usage of rhetorics, detail, and such. Anyways, so onto what I'm REALLY going to talk about: my request. I'll edit this and give you detailed what's what. =][/size][/color]

[size=1][color=#8B008B]I think out of all the ones written so far, this is my favourite. It's probably biased because [B]Alice In Wonderland[/B] is one of my favourite movies; nevertheless, it was a fantastic read. It reminded of my [B]American McGee's Alice[/B]: gruesome, deathly, yet still filled with so much curious magic. And boys should know never to defy a queen; you never know how merciless she might be.[/size][/color]

[quote name='Allamorph'][FONT=Arial]Before I post again, I'd like to know: who exactly is active besides [COLOR="DarkRed"]Andrew[/COLOR] and [COLOR="DarkRed"]Raiha[/COLOR]? Is [COLOR="DarkRed"]Rev[/COLOR] still stuck pulling the load on her end?[/FONT][/QUOTE] [size=1][color=#8B008B]To answer both questions, I've just been waiting for one of the boys to post. I've tried lighting fires under their butts yet they don't seem to budge; however, I've managed to get at least two of them to commit to writing a post. After [B]Felix Freeman[/B] posts, I'll get my group to the next day, which is the day of the parade, I believe.[/size][/color]

[quote name='Gavin'][SIZE="1"]I am slightly worried about what's going to happen to us now we can't be all free and irresponsible, dare I say it, we could become boring.[/SIZE][/QUOTE] [size=1][color=#8B008B]No! Not that! Anything but that! We can't be...*gulps* BORING! Although, I doubt any of us will turn boring, what with a house filled with teenage ferals and saiyans? I'm sure enough one of them will cause some damage to the Universe somehow. I, too, am glad this is continuing. I can't wait for the carnage and chaos to kick in.[/size][/color]

[quote name='wolf of sorrow']On someone else's note, I thought Breaking Dawn is coming out on August 2, not June 2. And the cover release is on May 31.[/QUOTE] [size=1][color=#8B008B]^_^;; Pardon my mistake; [B]Breaking Dawn[/B] DOES come out on August 2 and the special edition of [B]Eclipse[/B], which includes excerpts from [B]Breaking Dawn[/B] comes out on May 31. Also, as I've said before, Stephenie Meyer's website is a great place to go to for detailed information on the movie, her books, etc. So check it out. =][/size][/color]

[size=1][color=#8B008B]As everyone relaxed into their seats, Juliet’s eyes dashed from the boy to her son. A faint glimmer of joy flashed in her eyes. There was something about what she saw that reminded her of a time long lost. Within that moment, she couldn’t help but smile. Though it was short and quick, she had no doubt that her son would have caught it. Even so, she was still pleased at what she saw and hoped nothing would come to interrupt it. When Juliet prepared to tell her story, something stirred in the back of her mind. She had remembered that she had heard a voice a few moments after they’d entered the library. In less than a second, Juliet’s eyes no longer held a friendly glint, but rather a cold glare. She inhaled deeply and closed her eyes. The shadows beneath her feet began to shake and shimmer as Juliet tried to regain regular breathing. It seemed like hours before she finally felt her son’s hand on her shoulder. His eyes were filled with worry but her cold glare told him otherwise, as did the direction they were in. Nam looked behind him and found yet another teenage boy. He sighed as he stood to his feet, crossing his arms. [B]“So who are you and how’d you get in?”[/B] Before the other boy could say anything, Nam added agitated, [B]“And don’t make me repeat myself.”[/B] Everyone looked at the other boy; Juliet with ice, her son with fire, and the sitting boy with curiosity. The new intruder didn’t seem to be off-set by their staring eyes. He merely stood tall and, with what seemed like confidence, answered Nam’s question. [B]“Name’s Felix. I sort of woke up here.” “What the hell do you mean you sort of woke up here?”[/B] Nam raised a brow. Something seemed out of place with the boy named Felix. [B]“Look kid, I think it’s best that you leave.”[/B] Nam walked up to Felix and reached to grab him by the shoulder to lead him out. Out of reflex, Felix grabbed Nam’s wrist with intense strength. If Nam had not been Juliet’s son, the pain that throbbed in his wrist would have made him wince. Instead, Nam smirked at Felix. The boy looked at Nam with confused and cautious eyes. Unbeknownst to Felix, Nam had found a lingering black line that would cause his imminent destruction. With his free hand, Nam reached for the line but was abruptly stopped by his mother’s voice. [B]“Let the boy go, son. I’m sure he’s just as confused as the other.”[/B] Juliet smiled a fake smile towards Felix and turned to the other boy that was sitting. [B]“Come, I’ve much to tell you both.”[/B][/size][/color]

[size=1][color=#8B008B]Poor little [B]Ikillion[/B] should have just stayed faithful. Another excellent installment, and I'm not just saying that because it involved [B]Ikillion[/B] and myself. But this was different; it was more macabre and darker than the others. It really painted a colorful picture, so to speak.[/size][/color]

[size=1][color=#8B008B]The book's called [B]Breaking Dawn[/B] and it's coming out [B]June 2[/B]. They are also making a movie, which is being shot in Oregon and Washington. I believe it comes out this fall? Anyways, if you check Stephenie Meyer's website: [B][URL=http://www.stepheniemeyer.com]stepheniemeyer.com[/URL][/B]; you can see all of the details.[/size][/color]

[quote name='Rachmaninoff']I think the best relationships that are more than just friends, start from being good friends first.[/QUOTE] [size=1][color=#8B008B]I agree with you, though not completely. Sometimes starting from good friends leads to becoming so close that you think of the other as a sibling rather than "more-than-a-friend." As for me, when it comes to relationships in general, if I don't feel comfortable with you on sight, then I won't feel comfortable with you at all. There just has to be that level of comfortability for me to be able to have a relationship with another person. Then after that, everything else just falls into place: honesty, ability to have a decent conversation, so on and so forth.[/size][/color]

[size=1][color=#8B008B]This was an interesting take on the Grim Reaper; instead of making it the stereotypical reaping of souls, you made it into an office day. It really brought another viewpoint for me. As much as I liked the story, there is something that I would like the point out. At the beginning of the story, you started off in past tense but switched it to present at about the second sentence. From then on, you switched from past tense to present tense, though kept most of it present. This is something you want to avoid as it brings about confusion to the readers. It's good to choose a tense and stick with it, rather than jumping back and forth from one tense to the other. Other than that, the story was quite interesting.[/size][/color]

[size=1][color=#8B008B]The new starcrossed lovers: Gavin and Raiha. I actually like the sound of that; in fact, the tragic story you've written really adds to that effect. Granted there wasn't a lot of action in the story, there was great emotion. It featured a lighter atmosphere with a romantic notion. It was definitely grade A stuff, D. And yes, yes, I'm still figuring out my request.[/size][/color]

[quote name='Felix Freeman'][SIZE=1]as for [B][U] my[/B][/U] post, I'm just going to have Marcus drive home, leave a bussiness card at the door of the library and come across a disgruntled Eiyaga... Since it doesnt look like Malkav has been active for awhile.[/SIZE][/QUOTE] [size=1][color=#8B008B]Sorry about your head-cold, as well as leaving you out in the cold in the Harlem Academy. This is what happens when your partner doesn't post. *glares at [B]Ikillion[/B]*. And as far as [B]Malkav[/B] goes, he's informed me that he'll be posting sometime this weekend. Also D'ann, darling, I'm sure enough you can overpower Al' and Andrew. If not you, then who else would put fear into the hearts of those two?[/size][/color]

[size=1][color=#8B008B]I signed up recently and so [URL=http://www.goodreads.com/user/show/933144][B]here's my profile[/B][/URL]. I'm currently reading, or will read when I have the time, [B]Grass For His Pillow[/B] by Lian Hearn. It is the second book of the [B]Tales of the Otori[/B] series. I was introduced to it by a friend and it's quite the interesting book. I'm also reading [B]Vampire Knight[/B] and [B]Kill Me, Kiss Me[/B]. Before that I read all of the [B]Twilight[/B] series by Stephenie Meyer. She rekindled my love for vampires. I've yet to read [B]The Dark Tower[/B] series. I've been hearing a lot of good things about it and yet I still haven't picked it up. I should make a mental note to get it.[/size][/color]

[quote name='Lunox'][font="trebuchet ms"]Just to add to the [b]Old Boy[/b] discussion: to me it was another sad but too common case of the Asian film that had hella awesome style but no substance. No modern Asian film I've seen so far has had richness of a good western film. The only ones that do and I can recount are old classics that probably aren't known to the current Asian "extreme" film fans, and only because my parents knew of them and showed them to me.[/font][/QUOTE] [size=1][color=#8B008B]I completely agree. And like you, the ones with great substance and great style are the old classics that my parents showed me as well. Sometimes I think that Koreans should just stick to dramas or romance movies. Sometimes. Anyways, here goes my second list: [indent][B]D-Wars[/B] ? *shakes head* No comment, really. [B]Cinderella Man[/B] ?The movie was filled with emotion but not overly flowing and Russell Crowe is an amazing actor. [B]Phantom of the Opera [2004][/B] ? I?m not much of a fan for musicals but somehow this movie really appealed to me. It presented a blurring line between reality and fantasy within the movie and I think that?s what really caught my attention. It?s filled with all sorts of humor and if you like deranged men who rule opera houses, then I?d say this is the movie for you. [B]Stomp The Yard[/B] ? The movie had its moments but it seemed like just another dance movie. I couldn?t seen anything more than that. [B]Freedom Writers[/B] ? Of all of the movies that I?ve ever seen, there are three movies where I bawled like baby and one of those movies is [B]Freedom Writers[/B]. I was caught up in the emotions and lives of the characters that it felt like it was real. I mean, the movie was based on a true story, but it felt surreal. There?s a magnetic pull from this movie that makes you empathize with the characters and I think that?s what made this movie so real. [B]Dead Silence[/B] ? Ventriloquist dolls, creepy silence, and a ghost that rips out tongues. It has that chilling effect and the cold atmosphere that seems to give you shivers even when you?re under a thick blanket. The movie was pretty decent for the most part but the ending reminded me of [B]The Grudge 2[/B]. [spoiler]Everyone died.[/spoiler] But I've got to admit that the ending was funny in its own strange way.[/indent] And since I?m too lazy to write any more reviews, here?s the rest of the list: [indent][B]Good Luck Chuck[/B] [B]Van Helsing[/B] [B]Norbit[/B] [B]Queen of the Damned[/B] [B]Zorro[/B] [B]Blood and Chocolate[/B] [B]Knocked Up[/B] [B]Mr. and Mrs. Smith[/B] [B]The Punisher[/B] [B]Never Been Kissed[/B] [B]Waitress[/B] [B]Jumper[/B] [B]The Matrix[/B] [B]Serenity[/B] [B]Domino[/B] [B]Bourne Identity[/B] [B]Tristan and Isolde[/B][/indent] [i][B]Movie Count:[/B][/i] 27.[/size][/color]

[quote name='Clurr'][FONT="Arial"]I haven't seen Juno yet, so I can't verify that. Hah.[/FONT][/QUOTE] [size=1][color=#8B008B]Nor have I but I did see her in [B]X-Men[/B]; which she was good in. Though she was a bit young-ish in that one. Still, I think she'd make a good Bella.[/size][/color] [quote name='Clurr'][FONT="Arial"]When I first read the books I just imagined most of the characters as completely made up people, though some as people I know and others as complete strangers.[/FONT][/QUOTE] [size=1][color=#8B008B]That's usually what I do when I read books but for some reason, I couldn't picture anyone in this book. I could see Bella and James but everyone else was just features and not the entire person. I bought [B]New Moon[/B] and [B]Eclipse[/B] since I finished [B]Twilight[/B] like a few days after I bought it, so I'm hoping to visualize the characters this time. Although...Bella is frustrating me even though I'm only on the third chapter.[/size] [size=3][B]AND!!!![/B][/size] [size=1]They're shooting [B]Twilight[/B] in Oregon! It's where I live. I'm so excited. ^_^ On a more serious note, some of the cast for [B]Twilight[/B]'s been set. Though, I'm not sure I agree with some of the choices. I just can't seem to picture them playing the characters. Like the girl who's playing Alice, for example. I just can't seem to see her as Alice.[/size][/color]

[size=1][color=#8B008B]Wow, maybe I should pay attention in here. Alright, so Felix DID post but he wasn't the person that Ikillion and I found in the Harlem Academy library. It was Malkav, who appears to have gone MIA on us. However, I still do intend on finding Felix as soon as Malkav posts. The pieces are falling apart. They're always falling apart.[/size][/color]

[size=1][color=#8B008B]Clearly this is the one of the more darker stories I've read in a while. But for some reason, I can't make heads-or-tails of this story. It just...perplexes me to the highest extent. And I agree with James, subtlety is good. It allows more imagination for the reader and for the writer.[/size][/color]