Vicky

[quote name='Allamorph' date='02 December 2010 - 08:13 PM' timestamp='1291320804' post='702326'] [font="Calibri"]I always feel this horrible sense of loss whenever I see pictures of [color="DarkRed"]Vicky[/color] and remember she's lesbian. She also reminds me of someone in that hoodie image, but I can't think of who. [b]Edit:[/b] HOLY CRAP I JUST REALISED AMANDA TAPPING [/font] [/quote] Amanda Tapping? You Stargate geek (but I'm not insulted lol). But I guarantee you won't think that after these 'most recent' pictures. [B]1 - Drunk with cupcake?[/b] [img]http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-ash2/hs493.ash2/76626_465859501171_583511171_5855989_1943708_n.jpg[/img] [B]2 - Drunk dancing...[/b] [img]http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-snc4/hs1177.snc4/154956_465861016171_583511171_5856031_3156154_n.jpg[/img] [B]3 - Drunk before we all had to get carried home by Lancaster students XD[/B] [img]http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-snc4/hs1213.snc4/156502_465861811171_583511171_5856053_6920829_n.jpg[/img] I'm probably the only person not afraid to take/post/tag terrible pictures of myself =D.

Going to my girlfriend's mum and dads in Morecambe. Near the seaside. Then back to Manchester for a few days. Waaaaheey Christmas.

I'm making my way through the Anthology for people who don't have any comments =D I liked parts of this but I wasn't too sure. The things is I'm more versed in poetry and accustomed to poetry - and of course the 'lyric' form of poetry, but it obviously differs from lyrics today. I can only comment and critic on what I know. Firstly the structure hitched me. Normally short lines emphasis a particular meaning and are there for a particular reason - you use a lot of short lines, three or four words, but they're not emphasizing any phrase that stands out in your lyrics. I can see for the last stanza or verse you've split the lines to make them rhyme, but then it gives the impression your rhyme is forced - this shouldn't be the case. The last rhyming couplets are chunky and obvious - 'burden' and 'fallen' are almost a little cliched. You could probably try and combine the shorter lines and create a better effect with the grammar and punctuation rather than opting for short three word lines - this is pretty debatable though, because the punctuation means your lyrics are more effective read than heard out loud. Your third stanza is perhaps the best out of this. The language is good ndthe metaphors are quite creative - this stands out as being the most original in the piece. The rest, unfortunately, echoes cliches, themes and feelings that have been written before. I would definitely stick to the sort of... errm... mentality (?) of the third stanza. It's definitely a notch above the shorter lines. Hope that helps at least =).

(No replies? Why is this forum dead D=) I thought I'd just give a bit of feedback but it's only my opinion. Your use of language is again impeccable. There's some lovely phrasing here and you managed to keep me interested and read every word - even the greatest writers have a habit of writing blocks of descriptions and I normally skip those. You've certainly done well at compressing such a good idea into 1000 words. There are a few phrases that stand out, though, such as: "His father had come up behind him and was peering over Clausâ??s head. [i]The man was very tall and gangly.[/i] " Even though I'm a fan of concise descriptions and not long masterful poetic winding ones this sentence didn't fit in. It just felt like it was thrown in at the last minute and maybe needs a bit of work - but that's my opinion, maybe you like it there. The only other negative thing I can say is Claus. At the beginning I thought he was older, at least a older teenager, but towards the end he sounded like a very young child. I'm not sure his exact age and what you intended for him but it's portrayed differently at the beginning and the end - the Claus I read at the end, for instance, asking his father if Emma could come home, is not one I imagined being burnt or being smashed in the face. That was the only thing I didn't like; I couldn't pinpoint how old he was. However, I'm sure that differs from reader to reader but that's just me. Overall very nicely written and I thoroughly enjoyed it =).

We don't get snow in this part of England. We get rain, rain, rain, overcast clouds then rain, rain, rain, night-time rain and, of course in Summer, rain. Sometimes we get snow - but it's more likely bigger rain with a hint of fluff.

....I went [i]out[/i] (with my Facebook friends).

[quote name='chibi-master' date='22 November 2010 - 12:07 PM' timestamp='1290427676' post='702032'] WHAT. THE. HELL. I have an English paper to turn in today, but something has happened to my pictures, music and documents. Every time I try to open something, I get an error message saying something about a corrupted file! [color="#8B0000"][size="7"][font="Impact"][i][b]GAH!!![/b][/i][/font][/size][/color] [/quote] I have a Creative Writing assignment due in tomorrow morning. Only 4,000 words plus a 1,200 essay commentary. I haven't started it =).

Haha, my conversation with CleverBot. Spoiler if you don't like small little offensive stuff but nothing bad really =/. User: Hi. Cleverbot: How are you today? User: Not bad, yourself? Cleverbot: I am doing well, thank you! User: Okay lol are you gay? Cleverbot: Tos df. User: What? Cleverbot: Yes, I do it. [spoiler]User: You do it? From behind or on your knees? Cleverbot: Yes Master! I kneel before You. User: Oh you filthy rent boy![/spoiler] Cleverbot: In a world we must defend.

I can't comment on Thanksgiving, but I can on the bad foods. Pretty much the majority of the Western World is lazy as. Many people will defensively say "No I'm not!" but yes, you probably are, just not as lazy as the near-death-fat-peoples. Bad food is quick and easy. But it's worse than that now, isn't it? A few years ago they banned 'bad food' in school canteens here in England. No chips and burgers - heathly (and gorgeous) food. You know what happened? The kid's parents turned up at lunchtime and fed their kids hamburgers through the school gates, claiming the new rules were starving their kids .etc. Easy food is culture. You don't have time to go and cook a meal when you're in the middle of a Town Centre on the way to an important meeting having been up since 6am and too busy to catch breakfast - that's understandable. But laziness has eventually turned into culture - thanks to the advertisements of the bigger companies as well - and little kids know how to say 'McDonalds' before 'Cereal'. McDonalds even puts the f-ing [i]calories[/i] and contents on the side of their boxes now - and people still eat that crap when they see "1000000million grams of salt and cow poo!". You can't really blame people for that, though, unless it's totally out of control. I'm not one for family dinners or even Christmas dinners (I'm not one for Christmas really). I probably sit down once a month at the table with my girlfriend and prefer to spend £5 on KFC at Uni than save about £30 a week by taking sandwhiches. That's life.

[quote name='Allamorph' date='19 November 2010 - 09:53 PM' timestamp='1290203584' post='701960'] [FONT=Calibri]Payback, honey; you [i]knew[/i] it was coming. =D[/FONT] [/quote] You know full well you triple checked that bad boy post before hitting 'Add Reply'. I'm a first take sort of person. But I'll give you that one if you correctly guess the silly reference (clue: I'm still doing my [i]poetry[/i] essay) Grammar ist ein Meister aus Duetschland!

[quote name='CaNz' date='19 November 2010 - 04:01 PM' timestamp='1290182473' post='701957'] ppssssshhh as much as I like having clean clothes, I hate doing laundry. I know this for a fact because once again i am down to the very last clean shirt I own. The odd part is that laundry is so simple to do, yet it takes an ultimatum before i even consider it. dang it... i still have to do that laundry... [/quote] I don't understand why people hate laundry.... I was, and still am, the nicest smelling person in my group. Even if I can't wash a jacket or pair of jeans because they'll fall a part and are kept together by studs etc. I still scrub the muck off and spray 'em with smelly stuff. I pretend I'm looking at the floor and scratching my head in public just so I can smell my armpits, in case I stink. I hate being smelly, but I don't mind smelly friends, just as long as everyone is aware I DON'T STINK. It's not about the cleaning, it's about the stink. I may be contradicting myself and my beliefs but I will not stink or have stains. In fact I'm going to go and wash my khaki military coat again. It's only just been washed but it just doesn't have that [i]orange[/i] smell I like from the washing powder.

Haha I'll give you that one, but we don't want to start a thing now do we =p. It was all taken out of context... I can't believe no one got the 'chance of a life' reference. I need to stop quoting obscurities.

[quote name='Allamorph' date='18 November 2010 - 04:07 AM' timestamp='1290053251' post='701917'] [FONT=Calibri]Wait. You're [i]apologising?[/i][/FONT] [/quote] [quote name='CaNz' date='18 November 2010 - 06:38 AM' timestamp='1290062322' post='701920'] I probably would too. I wonder what skeletons you would pull out if it was me.... scary! [/quote] Nope, that's how it should be. Well, it's all about prespective, really ;D.

[quote name='Allamorph' date='18 November 2010 - 12:02 AM' timestamp='1290038562' post='701909'] [FONT=Calibri]I'm pretty sure I'd shoot T.S. Eliot in the face regardless. Zombie[color=red]s[/color] are zombies, great contributions to mankind's intellectual and creative history or not.[/FONT] [/quote] Now don't be like that. He lives in his work I suppose - I just wish he'd critically biatch-slap some contemporary poets in the face with a critical essay or two. (Sorry about the red by the way - chance of a lifetime?)

Nooooo. The contemporary poet. Extremely contemporary, I was exposed to him all through High School. He's in the 'his face makes me sick' group with Justin Bieber. I know I should have more respect for poets, but seriously. You just don't find the quality these days a lot of the time, do you 'Morph? And T.S. Eliot is dead. He needs to come back and show 'em what's it truly meant to be like. Right right?

[quote name='The Professor' date='17 November 2010 - 09:10 PM' timestamp='1290028252' post='701899'] [font="Comic Sans MS"]Would you guys quit making fun of my bro Justin? He's totally cool, we're gonna go on a Taco Bell run later.[/font] [/quote] Sounds like you two have a pretty tight relationship. I can only think of Justin's next hit. "Acey Acey ooooooooooooh, thought you'd always be mine." BROMANCE, mhmmm. >___> (Sorry, I'm avoiding my poetry essay. Seamus Heaney simply [i]does not[/i] and [i]cannot[/i] be compared to Eliot or Dylan Thomas. Seamus is just not with it, really, is he?)

[quote name='CaNz' date='17 November 2010 - 06:04 PM' timestamp='1290017059' post='701896'] haha, i think you should stick to girls too Vicky! [/quote] He's pretty much [i]a girl[/i] anyway. Everyone wants to cuddle him... I just want to punch him into puberty before I forget what normal male singing sounds like.

Justin Bieber's face makes me feel a bit sick. I'm so sorry but it really just does... can't be helped.

[quote name='The Professor' date='13 November 2010 - 09:07 PM' timestamp='1289682420' post='701817'] [font="Comic Sans MS"]Cannibal.[/font] [/quote] All our little family enjoy a Chinese treat now and again. The dogs in particular have a taste for ankles - that's why they call them 'ankle biters'.

I'm hungry too. But I've been paid and ordered a Chinese. CRISPY MOTHAFUAKIN DUUACK ANYONE?! You know it's righteous.

[quote name='Lady Shy' date='07 November 2010 - 10:56 PM' timestamp='1289170564' post='701585'] Ladytron is ace. [/quote] Backed. I can't remember the first time I heard Ladytron but I'm sure it had something to do with Depeche Mode. On that note my current song is: [media]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MLhRc0feRew&feature=fvst[/media]

"I'm Dutch and I study... errm... stuff...." It was quite entertaining, though my internet connection didn't help me out. That being said I don't have anything else to say because I don't really listen to Podcasts. Actually, this is the first one I've heard. PS: Why Mr. Boo, I didn't know you had such a sexy voice. I'd like to see Korey try your accent ;p.

[quote name='Lady Shy' date='06 November 2010 - 04:20 PM' timestamp='1289060457' post='701559'] [IMG]http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v483/steffenme1/Eurosport/05e2120dc4.jpg[/IMG] I'm appalled. [/quote] That's Pikachu's belly button. Don't ruin it.

[quote name='The Professor' date='05 November 2010 - 05:19 AM' timestamp='1288934381' post='701536'] [font="Comic Sans MS"]Someone stole my mother's credit card info and used it to buy two shiny new Samsung Galaxy S smartphones. The weird thing is that said phones arrived at our address. Something tells me the perp isn't exactly the sharpest tack in the henhouse.[/font] [/quote] Haha reminds me of the time little kids used to call up the Henleys Warehouse to buy stuff. They didn't 'know the name on the card' and would hang up, call back obviously with the card and say their mother's name and hang up again when we asked to speak to the cardholder. Then he phoned back a third time and put on a rubbish woman's voice - this time I hung up on him. Oh, and one time our old tenant accidently got his new mobile delivered to his old address (ours). My girlfriend didn't tell me about this, signed for this AMAZING new phone... and wrapped it up in Christmas wrap. I was so pleased with this awesome new phone until the old tenant turned up and asked if someone had delivered the name and model of this beautiful lovely phone. I was not impressed that I had to give it him back....