wiccansamurai

People here don't really like obscene banners... I mean, I've seen worse at MT forums, but here it just seems out of place, and probably not a good idea. As far as critique goes, the border could of been better. There's other things, but I won't go into detail. *Sneeze* Damn flu.

Hey, maybe I'll try! As for a prize, how about bragging rights? I'd love to put it into my siggy that I won a contest. Hmm, this post is incredibly short.

I don't think they do. Er, I was reading the reviews in the second one and they commented on one of the entrants unique use of toning. So I figure all toning has to be done by the creator. I can't do cross hatching worth nuts.

I only know who Karl Marx is because I read Animal Farm... ^.^;; But I think he had a good idea, and Snow- er, I mean that one guy (I forgot his name >

Yes, I did post this earlier, but no one responded so I deleted it and now I'm posting it again. I want [I]some[/I] critique on this. Please? (Now I sound like I'm begging) The Neighborhood Houses pass by the dirty car window, and the girl begins to wonder Why do the houses stand so? The front of the neighborhood is strong and clean Unlived in but nice to be seen. New and white, their owners proud This part of the neighborhood just isn?t very loud. The car moves on to the back. Houses gritty but they do not lack They have owners Been there a while No longer caring about architecture and style Sure, they?re old but they are still Good for shelter, They keep out any chill The girl sits and stares Her lips curve Its no longer masked. Age is nicer to observe

Eeep! You don't know.... how to crosshatch? Umm, well, all it is is shading by having crossed lines. Buy some how to draw manga books, they give some pretty good techniques. The tone sheets on the web sites I found from the links were only about five dollars, so its not bad. But that's another thing you shuld buy a "How to Draw Manga" book for, because tone sheets can be tricky.

Either use a computer or buy some comic tone sheets. Or crosshatch, but I have yet to see a winner that crosshatches. If you're going to use the computer, you better have a good printer, otherwise all the work goes to waste. My suggestion is not to make the comic page onto only one piece of computer paper, print it out in sections. That way, it can still be big. Then tape it together and photocopy it. To buy screeen tnes, look at tokyopops web site. They have some links to stores that sell it. Crosshatching is tricking, and I wouldn't suggest to do it if you can't draw straight lines spontaneosly all that well. You'd need some good pens, varying sizes to crosshatch. I'm entering too. That's why I have it all thought out.

Left to right, because they want it to be "American manga" not completely authentic Japanese manga. Since I'm quessing you're using your computer for the tone, I'd say use smaller dots, but vary the space between them. But I absolutely love your style! Man, I have no chance in this comic... *Sits in a dark corner*

I guess its pretty pitiful that I'm fifteen and still have never been kissed... :( But it's mostly my fault. Anyway, is kissing all that great, really?

[QUOTE]Yeay... my bro was the one who typed these up, blame him for those grammer mistakes...[/QUOTE] Prrof read, my dear, proof read! [QUOTE]I still can't belive you don't find it funny.....[/QUOTE] Don't worry about it, i'm just a skeptic of bad writing styles. I wouldn't mind if it was written like screenplay, though.

It is really, really sketchy. Invest in good pens and some india ink! And I agree about the speech bubbles. I don't think they re-do the font. I was reading the reviews for the first one, and they commented on how unique for manga the font was in one of them. Also, they need some work as far as the style goes. It's not really appealing to the eye. Using chibi characters for the whole thing (or part) can look great, if you do it right. Good luck in the contest. I'm going to try to make the deadline, too.

I couldn't figure out what to do with the text.... Well, here's a banner I did for a request. The text... well, its easy to read and stuff, but it looks a bit blocky at points. The background is the color Annie wanted it to be. The picture itself is a bit odd, as far as the woman's face goes.

Maki was sleeping soundly in a bed when loud voices and a slamming door woke her. She sat up drowzily and looked around. It seemed the voices were coming from outside. She slowly got off the bed and slipped on some sandles. Opening the door, she stood in the doorway and spoke. Her voice was quiet, but not really shy. "Is there something I may be of help with?" The girls all turned and stared at her. -------------------------- OOC: This is the best I could think of.

Name: Maki Haguya Age: 16 Home Country: Japan Appearance: Maki has straight, shoulder length black hair streaked with bright red. Her skin is on the darkish side and her eyes are, oddly, blue. She wears baggy black pants and a plain, tight red t-shirt. She's also kind of short. Demeanor: She's quiet and barely talks, but people can normally tell that she's not dumb. Despite not talking, she does tend to always be around someone, never alone. What You're Bringing: Some practical items. A compass, reference books, change of clothing, matches. She carries all this in a messenger-style book bag. Purpose of traveling to the North: She just wants to end all of the pointless fighting. Other: Little is known about her past.

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Hack Helba [/i] [B]Well I would just like to say again that my number 1 resolution is... [b]Dont cheat on girlfriends with your ex's.[/b] I have to get out of doing that all the time. [/B][/QUOTE] I know a guy who does that. He's an ***. ;) Well, anyway.... My resolutions: Get better grades. (Must beat... my twin... must beat.... my twin!) Lose some weight. I'm 140 lb. This is a resolution I'll never keep, though. Make a web comic. Find someone at school better at drawing anime than me. Beat the above person. Get a boyfriend. (Zach=:love: :blush: ) Umm, make up more resolutions. That's, my list. :p

I went to hobby lobby to try to find one with my sister's employee's discount, but they didn't have any. I have to dig up her old anatomy book she says doesn't exist... I still have a long way to go, but thankfully this s a lot better than I have done. If only I could get someone to pose for me.... ^.^

Very insightful, Mitch! I can't really think of anything to critique. It was well written, deep, and really made me think! Umm, sorry this post was so short.

Well, really like it now. There are so many names that I know and respect. On the other hand, some of the new people here really scare me, lol. Of course, I'm pretty new here. Er, relatively. But I love most of the old and some of the new people here so much, I can't say I don't like it now. And I was never here when it was small.

These are the characters to a web comic I'm making. There's the main character, Emi. She's the only one with a name right now. She's too skinny, too. Serves me right for not using reference ;) But I love the school uniform I designed. [URL]http://www.deviantart.com/view/4441891/[/URL] This is the antogonist. His arms look funny.... Yet again, shame on me for the lack of photo refernce. [URL]http://www.deviantart.com/view/4441907/[/URL] This is one of Emi's friends. [URL]http://www.deviantart.com/view/4441927/[/URL] And this is another one of her friends. He's not shaded at all and this is a really rough sketch of him. I can't decide on wether or not he should have glasses. What do you think? [URL]http://www.deviantart.com/view/4441948/[/URL] Tell me what you think about them. I know that the anatomy is mostly off.

[QUOTE]Boreing?! Its halarious!! Have you ever read a comedy? Of couse its all dialouge, but this isnt just a comedy ether, there is alot of action if you would read it. I guess now wouold be a good time to put up the next episode though so i'll go ahead and do that...Episode #2; Invincible Monk[/QUOTE] It wasn't all that funny. Of course I've read comedy. Look at bandit joeykuba (sp?) if you want a good example of comedy. Meh, if it wasn't borng, I wouldn't of had to [I]force[/I] myself to read it. There is [I]a lot[/I] of action? Hardly. And I can't tell the action from the dialogue in this second part, but at least its in full sentences. [QUOTE]Shura: I remember him? he was the one who killed my mother. My dad came too late to help her and he got away with it. My mother was a woman. Woman can?t fight. Woman are weak. They need men to protect them, but men can?t be relied on. He would have got me too, if I wasn?t hiding in the closet. [/QUOTE] I'm not going to start on the sexism in that paragraph, for I am hoping this is part of the "humor" You tried to instill in this. But, lets look at grammar. This would have worked. Shura: I remember him? He was the one who killed my mother. My dad came too late to help her and he got away with it. My mother was a woman. Women can?t fight. Women are weak. They need men to protect them, but men can?t be relied on. He would have got me too, if I wasn?t hiding in the closet. And IMO, this would have been even better. :laugh: Shura: I remember him? He was the one who killed my father. My mom came too late to help him and he got away with it. My father was a man. Men can?t fight. Men are weak. They need women to protect them, but men can?t be relied on. He would have got me too, if I wasn?t hiding in the closet. Sorry, j/k.

Eh, the ryhme were sometimes predictable. And the poem was incredibly cliche, try to set your poetry apart from the dozens of poems exactly like that one. And, I have to say it again, AABB format makes it so boring and dead!

Er, sixxy, as long as its not double posting, its fine. This was pretty good. It was really funny. Although, better grammar would have helped a bit in understandng it.

Well, its better than a lot of the stuff I see here. My only problems are the fact it could be a bit f prose if the lines weren't seperated. It doesn't have much rythme. Don't worry, sonicdivision is banned now :D

Going back in time to see my favorite character's stories scares me, too. I mean, if a book like that came out, I'd have to buy it. There'd be no resisting! But I have a bad feeling that one of the books about them may be like Lady Knight. I will never go back and reread that book, though I've read both PotS and The Lioness books at least ten times through. Lady Knight just really disappointed me.

You're right about the background thing. I like the colors, too. I did my best to match them with the colors on the cover of the manga. Here's my other one. Its from an anime my little brother got me for Christmas called "Someday's Dreamers". It was pretty good. (Though watching the dubbed version confused me a little. But that's off subject.) The main character (The one in the banner) likes dolphins, so I tried to give it a watery feel. I played with the text a lot, too. Eeek, I hope the upload works this time...