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[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Hataki Vash [/i] [B]A: Basketball, I think Q: What is White Wolf [/B][/QUOTE] [size=1]White Wolf is a company that creates rpgs like Vampire: The Masquerade and Hunter: The Rechoning. They actually call their stuff "Storytelling games," but they don't seem very different anything else that I have played. I'm not going to ask a question until HV confirms that I am right. -Shy[/size]

[size=1]Hm. I really like it. I haven't read anything of yours since that old Ghost World blog of yours, which I also enjoyed. [b]"Maybe I should use my superiority to better the world."[/b] I love that line. You need to post more often. -Shy[/size]

[size=1]Thanks a lot for going over this. I will definitely put some of these suggestions into my writing.[/size] :whoops: [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Mnemolth [/i] [B]Okay, remember, you asked for it so deck yourself out in your heavest armor. ;) The first line is very important. It should capture the imagination and peak the interest of the reader. Your first line was good, but the use of te word 'lurking' was inappropriate, and this kinda colours the rest of the piece. One does not 'lurk' in plain view. Another verb would be better. You can try "weaving" or "pacing" or even "bouncing" if you want a slightly humourous take. For example, you might use "Mr. Williams begins [b]pacing[/b] through the rows of desks, stopping now and then to pass out graded assignments". "This fills me with a sense of relief" should be enhanced by a metaphor or simile. This is an important part of the piece so a little more description would not go astray, something akin to "This fills me with a sense of relief, my fix of ordinariness for the day". Also "Full of frustration I open and slide in the two papers". Open what? And "slide" doesn't really convey a sense of frustration does it? You might say something like, "Full of frustration I snap open my folder and toss in the two papers."[/quote][/b] [size=1]I meant to say "Full of frustration I open my [b]backpack[/b] and slide in two papers. Sometimes I skip words when I write. I tend to think a lot faster than my 40 wpm typing speed. ^_^[/size] [quote][b]But its still a good piece. Its just that I could have been better. Also you should know I'm probably not the easiest of markers. :)[/quote][/b] [size=1]It helps me out a lot when people like you, Sara and HC critique my writing. Obviously, you are three of the most talented writers on OB, so I'm learning from the masters.[/size] [quote][b]What you did well was capturing that teenage sense of inadequacy and universal disorientation, that uneasy uncertain twilight of childhood. [/B][/QUOTE] [size=1]Oh yeah, of nothing else I can safely say that I am a master of inadequacy.[color=white][i]Oh Shy.[/color][/i] I guess this is based off of some personal experience I have had in my own Government class. I think everyone feels like the world is against them at one point or another, so hopefully I'm not completely alienating myself by writing this. -Shy[/size]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Mnemolth [/i] [B]How like a wayward child, at once insightful and idiotic. :D B PS: A more detailed critique may be forthcoming if required, but I get the feeling you understand what I mean. ;) [/B][/QUOTE] [size=1]I'm good at the idiotic stuff... not too sure about the other one, though. And how could I pass up the chance to get a formal critique from [strike]Manmoth[/strike] you? I would appreciate it. -Shy[/size]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Heaven's Cloud [/i] [B][color=indigo]Although I rarely comment on member's writings, I thought I would drop a comment in this thread. Although this is far from the best writing that you have posted on the Otaku (or on your Angry Student Blog), I think this essay could definatly blossom with a little fine tuning. Well, I'm a fan, so keep writing and I shall keep reading.[/color] [/B][/QUOTE] [size=1]I'm honored that you actually read my writing, heh. Judging from the responses I normally get from my writing, it only seemed like two or three people ever looked at my stuff. But yeah, I know this is far from my best writing. I'm not even sure what the purpose of this entire thing is. Random writing is good, heh. Thanks for replying.[/size] [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Sara [/i] [B][size=1]That's...really good. Heh. [color=white]There are a few punctuation errors, and a couple places where you left words out.[/color] I like the second paragraph. It..heh. It really reminds me of you, I guess. *smiles, faintly embarrassed* Some of the things you've written me, and snippets of conversation, and other things. [i]We are all equal when it comes to receiving papers in Government class.[/i] Interesting point.[/size] [/B][/QUOTE] [size=1]Well, I exaggerated certain aspects of my Government class, but I belive that I'm entitled to a Poetic License, or something. [color=white]I didn't realize you posted in white text until I wuoted your post. Yeah, I noticed some errors too. I hate looking over my own writing, though.[/color] I kind of just rambled on in my paragraphs until I realized how it was going to tie back around in the end. I'm not sure if it is a very good ending or not. I could easily write more before and after it. Maybe I'll clean it up and actually turn it into something of value, who knows? -Shy[/size]

[size=1]I'm not exactly sure what I was thinking when I wrote this. I just wanted to write something more descriptive than what I'm used to doing in the newspaper. If nothing else, I consider this a writing exercise that I gave myself. Comment and critique, please.[/size] Mr. Williams begins lurking through the rows of desks to pass out graded assignments. He has gone by me several times already without giving handing me anything. I begin to worry if he lost some of my work, or if he forgot to do whatever it is that he is handing to us. Suddenly he approaches me from behind. He drops two papers on my desk and walks away. I examine the papers closely; both have been graded with a vague checkmark, symbolic of my satisfactory work. This fills me with a sense of relief. Now if someone asks I can show them the papers and explain that I got a paper and was not left out. They will show me their papers and there will be an instant connection between us. We have something to talk about: we could compare our papers, or talk about the experience of getting them back. It doesn?t matter who they are or how much better they are than me because we are both equal when it comes to receiving papers in Government class. There is something that we have in common now, and I can no longer complain about how different I am than everyone else in the room. Everyone who gets their papers back is the same. Like the dark-haired man who sits next to me. Well, he isn?t old enough to be considered a man, but it seems more appropriate to call him a man than to call him a child. At least, it suits me better to think ?What a man!? when he walks into the classroom. He will take off his dark sunglasses that he wore in the hallway and reveal his beautiful blue eyes to me, to everyone. Sometimes I wonder if he wears contact lenses, because the contrast between his blue eyes and tan skin is almost unnatural. I figure he must spend a lot of time at the beach, and put no more thought into it because I am too distracted by the rest of his body. He moves his arm to grab a pencil and his biceps slightly bulge through his spotless white shirt. It is as if his clothing was designed to perfectly compliment his upper body. Perfect. This is the complete opposite of my shirts. They hang at my neck and drape downwards like a circus tent. For a moment I am envious of him, for a moment I want to be him. He is everything I want ? or more correctly, he is everything that I ?m not, everything that I can never be. Mr. Williams walks to the dark-haired man?s desk and drops three papers on top of it. ?Good work Mr. Partridge.? They share a glance, and the bell rings. Mr. Partridge puts on his dark sunglasses and leaves the room while I look at my papers with embarrassment. They weren?t ?Good work,? they weren?t even worth mentioning. Full of frustration I open and slide in the two papers. I hate them. [size=1]-Shy[/size]

[size=1]Your Cat obsession has reached a new level, Charles. Sadly I do not have very much cAttitude, but I more than make up for it with duck tAttitude and boskAttitude. Good work. -Shy[/size]

[size=1]Your opinion is valid, we *should* be able to have these sorts of discussions. The main problem (Even though I realize that this would not be considered a problem for some here) is that these evolution discussions have a bad habit of turning into religious debates. Just like in real life, the most controversial subjects cannot be discussed in an intelligent manner without someone getting offended. There are many intelligent members who could handle a mature discussion about evolution, but there are just as many immature ones out there. In order to keep this from being closed immediately, I'm going to move this to Suggestions/Feedback where it would be more appropriate. -Shy[/size]

[size=1]This is something I wrote for my school paper about Ice Cream. Ice Cream: More Than You Need To Know The foul temptress that is ice cream takes no prisoners. Over the centuries great civilizations have been torn apart by the greed and evil that surrounds the frozen delicacy. There is more history involved with the cool dish than many realize. Did you know that German spies during World War II were paid in Vanilla Fudge? Or that four holy wars have been fought over the area known as ?Chunky Monkey Peak?? Well there is a good reason you don?t know that because none of it is true! In fact, most of the stories surrounding ice cream are rumors and myth that have compiled over the centuries, in this article the truth will be uncovered and the accurate origins of the popular dessert will be revealed. The first recorded instance of ice cream was by the famous explorer Marco Polo. Supposedly the Chinese had been eating a form if ice cream made of goat milk, flour and snow since the Tang Dynasty (618-907 A.D.) Polo took the recipe for the dish to his homeland of Italy. Italian chef Catherine de?Medici somehow learned the secret of this cool treat, and took it with her when she left for France. While in France, Catherine married one of the most prominent chefs in the world, Dimarco, who showed the flavored frost to King Charles I of France. The King became an ice cream fanatic, and he gave Dimarco a lifetime pension in exchange that he would not tell the secret recipe to anyone else. This secret arrangement lasted for years, until King Charles was beheaded by his angry subjects in 1649. Unknown by the King, the secret of Ice Cream had already been leaked across Europe, where the ingredients were eventually changed to the popular delicacy we know and gorge on today. But this story may not be entirely true, or even remotely true. Several noted ice cream historians (yes, there really are ice cream historians) believe that ice cream was not discovered by one sole person, but rather it was made by several different people from all over the world. Obviously, some locations on Earth are warmer than others, but ice cream was able to stay cool in places as remote and hot as the Sahara Desert. Before the invention of the refrigerator people would keep their food and drinks chilly with a mixture of ice and salt. In extremely hot and arid regions people kept things cold by keeping the food and drinks buried underground, which some still do today. The ice was extremely expensive, and in the past only the very rich and powerful could afford to buy it. Over time the recipes to make ice cream have evolved, and so have ways to make the treats. Roman Emperor Nero Caesar forced his slaves to climb to the top of local mountains, so that he could have ice cream to put his favorite fruit toppings on. Fruit has historically been the most popular topping on ice cream, but over the past two centuries chocolate and candy have become the treat that people scream to have put on their ice cream. The ice cream cone was created in 1896, and the waffle cone was invented at the St. Louis World?s Fair in 1904. There is a lot of cold hard cash in the ice cream business, and every year more and more companies try their hand at selling ice cream. Since Irv Robbins opened his first store in 1945 with a meager 24 flavors, much lower than the standard 31 there are today. Robbins? first ice cream store was not known as ?Baskin-Robbins? that name came later when he combined his business with his rival?s (his brother-in-law Burt Baskin) ice cream company to create the world?s first Baskin-Robbins. Today Baskin-Robbins is the largest chain of ice cream stores in the country, with countless locations nationwide. Childhood friends Ben Cohen and Jerry Greenfield opened an ice cream store out of a renovated gas station in 1978. With their innovative flavors such as ?Chunky Monkey? and ?Cherry Garcia? they became one of the most popular ice cream stores, and now sell ?Ben and Jerry? brand treats in grocery stores and supermarkets around the country. Ice Cream is one of the most popular desserts ever created. In the US, it is the king of frozen treats, every year Americans eat approximately 4.5 billion quarts of the stuff a year. On average 5 million people in the US eat ice cream during the course of a day, these figures do not include frozen yogurt or other imposters who are trying to take a piece of the big ice cream cake. The truth is that no matter who invented it or where it came from, ice cream will always be everyone?s favorite frozen dessert. And even though it may not be the product of a government conspiracy, it still tastes good. -Shy[/size]

[center][b]The Story:[/b][/center] The gaming world is at war. The game villains of yesterday have long since been defeated, but their legacy continues. Games have continued to get more and more violent, causing a backlash from the older and more innocent characters. The heyday of Pacman and Sonic has passed, giving way to Sephiroth and Solid Snake. These new characters are cruel, violent, and bloodthirsty. Classic gaming characters are tired of the M- Rated slaughter that has spread across the land, and a last-dtich effort is being planned in the Mushroom Kingdom to stop it. This battle will decide the fate of video games for decades to come, and it begins now. [b][center]Characters:[/b][/center] There are two sides to this battle. The Classics, 8-bit defenders of morality and The Next-Gens, high-resolution killers who have invaded the mainstream. However, there is not strong unity within the groups, and many characters have organized their own third-party militias. Not every new character is fighting for the side of evil, and not every classic character wants to help their friend's cause. Many gaming villains are using this war to wipe out their enemies once and for all. Any video game character is available, but the players for the rpg will be decided upon by the quality of their sign-ups, not by previous rpg-ing experience. [center][b]Sign-ups:[/b][/center] [b]Character name:[/b] [b]Reason for choosing character:[/b] [b]My Knowledge of this character:[/b] No limit for the maximum number of players has been set. The rpg will begin in a few days, depending on the activity in this sign-up. [size=1]-Shy[/size]

[size=1].hack//SIGN - "Twilight's Eye" - Episode 13 - May 24, 2003 1. This is for your thoughts AFTER you've seen the episode. Don't post advance spoilers here, or your thoughts about such spoilers. 2. Please rate the episode from 0 to 10. Please put your ratings at the top of the body of your post and in [b]BOLD.[/b] 3. This is for your ratings and general thoughts, comments, and impressions. If you have specific thoughts or comments on specific issues or points, a new thread would be more appropriate. 4. Normal spoiler rules apply: spoiler tags are required for any spoilery statements. Very vague "I liked it" type comments don't need tags. 5. If you're going to mention any spoilers for future episodes, please use spoiler tags correctly. 6. Please try to keep this thread on topic. -Shy[/size]

[size=1]Hm. I don't think I have ever cried because of OB stuff (I don't cry very often) but there are a lot of moments and threads that made me very sad. People are always posting depressing topics, but I don't usually bother to read them unless someone I care about created them. Probably the best example I can think of is when Jenna's (Babygirl) brother passed away. It's not like we are the best of friends or anything, but I could relate to the pain she was going through. It bothered me for quite a while. I don't think that I ever even posted in that thread, since I didn't want to say the generic "I'm so sorry." Anyway, I have posted a couple of depressing threads also. I think just about all of the older (read: more experienced) members have done so at one point or another. This place is such a great community that most want to share the important parts of their lives, even the bad stuff, with everyone else. -Shy[/size]

[size=1]It doesn't matter what they say Opinions change and move and sway It doesn't matter what they do But when it matters most to you The sun will rise as it does set So you will never have to fret These things can happen, things can change Another day is not the end But only the beginning -Shy[/size]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Manic [/i] [B]Like "Mmmm, cookies."[/B][/QUOTE] [size=1]Maybe I just watch too much Buffy, but there's an entire scene where they try to figure out how to pronounce a word. And I have always pronounced Mnemolth "Men-Nel-Mole-Th" -Shy[/size]

[size=1]I went to see this movie a while ago, and I thought that it was pretty good. I really enjoyed how this movie switched around some of the conventions of racial humor. Since I have lived near LA my entire life (where we had riots about race about 10 years ago) I thought that the truth in the humor was really funny. Martin Lawrence is hillarious, but it seems like he always plays police officers in his movies. I'm sure there are a lot of different parts that he could play. Oh well. -Shy[/size]

[quote][i]Posted in the rules[/i] Posting Commercial Advertising: [b]In some cases, members join our forums and simply post one thread to advertise their own site/forums. This form of advertising is strictly prohibited on OtakuBoards.com.[/b] However, we do allow members to use their signatures to advertise their own personal site (or any non-profit, non-commercial site).[/quote] [size=1]Read a little more carefully. Thread closed. PM a moderator if you have a complaint about a closed thread, please do not clutter up the forum with something else we will need to close. -Shy[/size]

[size=1]Being the animation fan that I am, I always get nervous when I hear about animated properties being produced as a live-action movie. The first Flintstones movie was good, and so were Popeye. Tomb Rider and Mortal Kombat. It really just depends on what the live-action film producers plan to do with the property. With Scooby Doo and Daredevil they obviously just wanted to make some quick cash, but Spider-Man is a good example of something that has been adapted into live-action extremely well. We shouldn't be worried if Peter Jackson is in running it, because he has a lot of experience with this sort of thing. In addition to the LOTR trilogy, he is currently working on a remake of King Kong. If anyone knows how to make an EVA film work, it's this guy. And nobody said that they were planning on adapting the [i]entire[/i] series into one film. My guess is that they will probably focus on the first six episodes of the series, and then explore the rest of it if there are sequels. The opening six episodes of Eva are very self-contained, and they would work very well in a movie. These episodes are all about Shinji getting used to the world of Tokyo 3, and adjusting to his life as an Eva pilot. technology is so advanced now that I wouldn't be surprised if the Eva battles are even more fantastic than they are in the series. Right now I am very curious about who might play these characters. -Shy[/size]

[size=1]...Mimi... *becomes nostalgic* My favorite is the one in the top right corner, with the crown. That picture seems to most closely resemble the Mimi that I know and love. All of them are cute, though. My rating: 600/N Cubits. :whoops: -Shy[/size]

[size=1]I'm going to close this thread since there is a much more in-depth one about the same subject in Anime Lounge (as Semjaza pointed out.) -Shy[/size]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Chaos [/i] [B]Two scenarios... 1) If Ken's powers weren't realized... [b]If you could have any super power, what would it be?[/b] "Pyrotelekinesis." Not a real word, but it serves my puspose; the ability to create, control, and command fire/light/heat/etc. I'm such a pyro, so this is a natural choice for me.[/B][/QUOTE] [size=1]The actual word is [b]Pyrokensisis[/b]. I just wanted to point that out... heh. -Shy[/size]

[size=1]I like it, even though it is a little hard to see. I would suggest that you try to focus on one main thing in your avatar images, rather than cluttering it up with an exciting background or something. It is really hard to do something very detaled with 80x80 pixels. -Shy[/size]

[size=1]Thanks for thinking that my writing it "not too bad at all." Heh, that's the best compliment I have ever gotten from you about my writing, I think. And the column is satire, not my actual opinion on the subject. :whoops: -Shy[/size]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Mitch [/i] [B][size=1][font=rockwell]I could cover so many things on this story. It's so deep.[/size][/font] [/B][/QUOTE] [size=1]Modesty is dead. Hm. It's an interesting story, Mitch, but using the name's Virginia and Charles really bothered me. Every time their name is mentioned I think of Charles and Ginny from OB, which makes things very strange. Have you ever written a story about puppies and sunshine? That might be a nice change of pace for you, and I wouldn't mind if you named the puppies Charles and Virginia. Heh. A small complaint I have is that you start nearly every sentence with "I." Yes, this is written in the first-person perespective, but you always have to be careful about how you structure your sentences. Good work, though. -Shy[/size]

[size=1]If it was not made in Japan then it is not an anime. Thread moved to Music/Movies/TV (Sorry Manic) -Shy[/size]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by GinnyLyn [/i] [B]As I pointed out in my original post, this was NOT MEANT TO SOUND SPITEFUL, and yet you still took it that way. I was not downing homosexuals, I was trying to tap into the mind of people. I know that some groups benefit in self-confidence from having supporters. I also know from personal experience that I tend to seek out others in my curiousity, which is why I brought up the second question. I'd appreciate if you apologized, Shy, or at least recognize that you misunderstood part of my posts.[/B][/QUOTE] [size=1]I'm sorry for offending you, but I feel like I interpreted your original statement correctly. Nobody includes the :smirk: smiley without being at least a [i]little[/i] condescending. I don't think that you were tyring to offend the original person who posted that, but I do feel like you were making an assumption without much information to back it up. -Shy[/size]