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[size=1][color=indigo][font=arial][quote name='Tical Blue']Okay.... I get the extreme impression that your copying me, to the point that you're practically ripping me off. I mean... a kingdom at peace, a neighboring kingdom, said kingdom being trashy with prositutes and the like... I feel like I'm reading my story except this time it's being drawn in crayon by a 3rd grader.[/quote] Believe it or not, those story elements aren't unique to your own smut-fest. True story. Dude, I'm not going to say this is a masterpiece. It's got it's high points and it's got a lot of low points, but if you worked on it with the intent of making it the best it could be, it has potential. The main problems I see are there's no reasoning behind anything. You haven't fleshed anything out - for exmaple, why can DC become a dragon, man, what mystical skillz does he have? We do not know this. We are left to assume that he is merely a bad motherfucker. Your description needs work too. It's great to see that you tried, but I've never known a wind to blow solemnly. That said, the concept of a princess being banished to the slums is pretty groovy (though you'd have to flesh out [i]why[/i]), and just the name 'Scourge of the Clouds' has me wondering why he's called Scourge of the Clouds [i]and[/i] why they're looking for him, They either badly need them, are stupid, or both. This I would like to know. Anyway, with some elbow grease (maybe use orphans, they have a lot of elbows) you could make this a lot better. You have some interesting ideas here, I think you should just need to sit down and spend time with it to get it as good as you can. Try to keep in mind that, even if you know what's going on in the story, the reader isn't aware of your thinking behind the plot points.[/font][/color][/size]
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[COLOR=Indigo][SIZE=1][FONT=Arial][quote][SIZE=2][b]Alan[/b] Gender: Masculine Usage: English, Scottish Pronounced: AL-an [key] The meaning of this name is not known for certain, though it possibly means either "little rock" or "handsome" in Breton. It was introduced to England by Bretons after the Norman invasion. Famous modern bearers include Alan Shepard, the first American in space and the fifth man to walk on the moon, and Alan Turing, a British mathematician and computer scientist.[/SIZE][/quote] My name is Alan, which seems to imply that I'm a handsome rock. [i]Great[/i].[/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR]
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[COLOR=Indigo][SIZE=1][FONT=Arial][QUOTE=Box Hoy][size=1][b]Emo[/b]: Formed in the late 80's when they really did cry. [..] [b]Screamo[/b]: Combines pop punk and hardcore punk and is easily confused with metalcore at times.[/size][/QUOTE] That's where you're wrong. Screamo is what emo sounded like originally. As more bands [i]toned it down[/i], punters started calling the original sound screamo because it, well, had more screaming, and the new comers to the genre didn't like it. Screamo was kind of used in the same sense as nu metal, basically, even though the definition was wrong.[/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR]
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[size=1][color=indigo][font=arial]I'm about 89 kilos (196 pounds), and I'm trying to lose weight. Having ****** a knee up in a game of Urban Commando when I was 12 (great game), it's kind of hard for me to do heavy cardio (which loses unwanted fat the fastest), but I still seem to manage it. My happiness is tied up deeply with my body image, so as long as I have this gut, I'm not gonna feel good about myself, so I take as many steps as I can to get rid of it. And that's me and weight. lol[/font][/color][/size]
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[COLOR=Indigo][SIZE=1][FONT=Arial]Sadly, gooditude is not a word. During the entirety of the 2500 odd years that the English language has been in development (first by the Greeks, then the Romans, then a plethora of subcontractors who insisted on using faulty materials like 'French'), noone important has stood up, pumped their fist in the sky, and made any proclamation involving gooditude - not even George W Bush! Thus, despite it's awesomosity (already a word, bare with me), gooditude goes undefined in the vast lexicon of the English language. Ladies and gentlemen, that changes today. To me, gooditude is a word symbolyzing the entirety of positive human experience... but doing it with [u]attitude[/u]. A great CD has gooditude, shotguns have gooditude, dammit, even [u]Shinmaru[/u] - yes our Shin! - has gooditude oozing out his pores and other, select orifices. Gooditude is things that aren't just good, but great, that involve a fair amount of attitude to attain that gooditude. "Man, that Shin has some gooditude" is a typical way of using it. But hey, that's just me. [i]How would [b]you[/b] define gooditude?[/i] (Note for the slow: this is the main discussion question in the thread.)[/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR]
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[size=1][color=indigo][font=arial]I'm afraid of snails and slugs. They're dangerous, you know.[/font][/color][/size]
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[size=1][color=indigo][font=arial]I get drunk. It makes things a hell of a lot easier.[/font][/color][/size]
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[size=1][color=indigo][font=arial]I saw it... It was mediocre, but it had it's moments. [spoiler]The ending especially was horrid, though, "Join my secret task force you foursome who have barely known eachother!"[/spoiler]. It's trying to be Shrek but failing, but at least it does so with its tongue firmly planted in-cheek.[/font][/color][/size]
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[size=1][color=indigo][font=arial]They just didn't want to. They'll probably release any pertinent information during their keynote at the Leipzig Game Convention.[/font][/color][/size]
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[COLOR=Indigo][SIZE=1][FONT=Arial][quote name='Your Mother][SIZE=1']OMG! ALL PIRATES HAVE SUPER-REGENERATIVE POWERS! Can they fly too?[/SIZE][/quote] This just in - YES! Also, try to avoid the flamebait. [i]It makes you look silly[/i].[/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR]
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[size=1][color=indigo][font=arial]"Don't **** where you eat."[/font][/color][/size]
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[size=1][color=indigo][font=arial]Self-loathing just about covers it.[/font][/color][/size]
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Art The Desktop Screenshots/Wallpapers Thread [image heavy]
DeadSeraphim replied to DeadSeraphim's topic in Creative Works
[size=1][color=indigo][font=arial]Do you know the best movie ever? I do [center][URL=http://img99.imageshack.us/my.php?image=picture1qk1.png][IMG]http://img99.imageshack.us/img99/2764/picture1qk1.th.png[/IMG][/URL][/center] Elizabeth town fo life.[/font][/color][/size] -
Quite Possibly The Most Useless Piece Of Legislation, 2006
DeadSeraphim replied to Morpheus's topic in General Discussion
[COLOR=Indigo][SIZE=1][FONT=Arial][COLOR=Indigo][SIZE=1][FONT=Arial][quote name='Retribution][size=1']The fact that you're on MySpace at the library and that you don't have an internet connection at home does not necessarily mean that you need to be either studying or looking for a job. True, if you're an adult without internet at your house and you're at the library accessing recreational sites, you do need to get a job.[/size][/quote] Right. So why should the government pay for them to access MySpace? Why should they tolerate it at all? [quote=Retribution][size=1]Please explain to me how the government is paying for those accessing MySpace versus those who aren't. Would it not cost the same amount if the terminal sat there unused with the internet connection still being enabled? And could not the problem of terminals being used for MySpace be solved at the local as opposed to the Presidential level? If you can explain to me how people accessing MySpace as opposed to not using the computer at all has a higher cost, I will conceed the point.[/size][/quote] Hey man, it's your crazy government. I don't make the rules. But I do know, in Australia, [i]bandwidth costs money[/i], and MySpace and pals suck up a lot more bandwidth than research or job search materials. Libraries and schools already charge an internet connectivity levvy here, AND additionally pay thousands a month cause levvies just don't cover it, since students and losers with nothing better to do piss it up the wall at MySpace and YouTube. Now, I don't know how it works in America, but I can't see it being much different. 10 000 people a day (at least) accessing MySpace across the country through a library can equal tens of thousands of dollars, and libraries and schools don't have an unlimited budget to deal with that ****.[/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR][/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR] -
[center][size=1][color=indigo][font=arial][u]An Ode To Acheron[/u] Acheron, oh Acheron Named after the Rivers of Woe Acheron, oh Acheron Reading his posts make me moan Acheron, oh Acheron Stringent for rules, and cool Acheron, oh Acheron Posts so over-formatted it's cruel Acheron, oh Acheron I'm sure he had something to say Acheron, oh Acheron His over-formatting makes me go away[/font][/color][/size][/center]
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Quite Possibly The Most Useless Piece Of Legislation, 2006
DeadSeraphim replied to Morpheus's topic in General Discussion
[color=indigo][size=1][font=arial]You don't get his point. His point is, if people have to use the internet at a library because they have no other options, why are they on MySpace or downloading porn to begin with? They should be looking for a job, or researching for school because they can't anywhere else, or something, not hooking up with random girls through MySpace. Further more, if people are coming to the library to abuse a high profile connection just because they can't access one at home, or because of parental restrictions, they aren't using the [i]priviledge[/i] of [b]government provided[/b] internet responsibly at all. It's like me wanting to download a 70 meg porno, but waiting till I was at the library because I'm on dialup. It's not fair for people who do need to use library internet, and it's not fair on the government for paying to further my depravity. Basically, libraries and schools are public institutions, and the government has every right to put bans on certain sites and services that make running those services more costly than they should be. It's not a removal of liberty at all, it's the government examining a situation and seeing that the situation isn't ideal at all. Even if this is an absurd use of top-level governmental power, it's still completely understandable and supportable, when you look at it logically. Why should [i]they[/i] pay for [i]you[/i] to surf MySpace?[/font][/size][/color] -
[size=1][color=indigo][font=arial]I'm willing to bet that they ask you back once they get over themselves. Who else will watch their house? Whether you'd want to go back is another thing entirely, though.[/font][/color][/size]
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[size=1][color=indigo][font=arial]#8 Facts and figures, Numbers and records It's all up front for anyone to see Userpages?[/font][/color][/size]
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[COLOR=Indigo][SIZE=1][FONT=Arial]Well, not really. But it might as well be. 2006 was apparently the last mega-show held by the ESA, as most of its [i]key[/i] vendors can't justify the cost of doing e3 in its current form anymore. Thus, it's being remodelled and will be 'evolving into a more intimate event focused on targeted, personalized meetings and activities'. It's becoming less a mega-showcase and more an industry meeting, basically, and visitor numbers will likely be scaled right down to the low hundreds. [url=http://www.gamespot.com/news/6154935.html]Source[/url] Discuss.[/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR]
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Make your own motivation poster! (56k warning! Image heavy!)
DeadSeraphim replied to Charles's topic in General Discussion
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Make your own motivation poster! (56k warning! Image heavy!)
DeadSeraphim replied to Charles's topic in General Discussion
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[quote name='Baron Samedi][size=1']Start a new account and no-one need ever know of your embarassing past...[/size][/quote] [size=1][color=indigo][font=arial][i]DAT'S AGAINST DA ROOLZ![/i][/font][/color][/size]
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[color=Indigo][size=1][font=Arial]Okay, so I totally just got all inspired and crap, and had the best idea [i]ever[/i]. No, that's a lie. But the idea I had was pretty awesome anyway, and appealed to me, so I figured it might appeal to other people as well. Basically, pick a song - your favourite song, something off the radio, whatever comes up first in WinAmp, whatever - and write a short piece (think less than 500 words) using it as inspiration (bonus points for using part of the lyrics, too). It's like 55 Fiction with more describing words, except you don't have to think about subject matter! ...much. So without further ado, this is what I figured would make a cool opener. [b]Note:[/b] Since this kind of thread can't really have a definitive rating, try and include it in some kind of title. Oh, a link to lyrics of the song in question would be pretty cool too.[/font][/size][/color] [quote][b]In The Fade - Queens of the Stone Age[/b] [G] [url="http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/queensofthestoneage/inthefade.html"]Lyrics[/url] [size=1]I stared at her. She stared back. Her eyes were like glistening oceans of turquoise in the low light. I forced myself to look away. "Why are you doing it, Dead?" Her voice. Melodic, beautiful... I'd give anything to be able to hear it this time tomorrow. To be able to hold her, be with her... Love her. But I couldn't. It wasn't possible. "I have to." I looked at her again. A single tear ran down her perfect porcelain cheek. "Why do you have to?" I smiled sadly and caressed her face with the back of my hand. "It's for the best babe." She pushed my hand away and rubbed her tears away. Her eyes, so beautiful, were filled with so many questions. So many questions that would forever go unanswered. "What will I do without you?" I looked at the floor. My heart was breaking deep in my chest, but I ignored it. "Live till you die," I said quietly. A loud sob escaped her and she burst into tears. I reached over and held her hand. "Just live till you die."[/size][/quote] [font=Arial][size=1][color=DarkGreen]Have editted the thread to include a covering PG rating. While I understand where you're coming from, Alan dear, a thread [i]must[/i] have a rating in the title. -- Asphy.[/color][/size][/font]
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[QUOTE=Shi no Tenshi]Scrambled eggs in the microwave O_o My boyfriend makes it so I'm not too sure how it's done. All you have to do is mix a few eggs, some milk and a spoon of butter in a microwavable measuring jug (or another tall microwavable containing unit... object... thing) then pop it in for a few minutes till it's done! Invite friends over and make shmores over the hob :3 Perhaps it's best no one takes my culinary advice anyway. I am capable of setting the house alight whilst trying to mix cereal with milk.[/QUOTE] [size=1][color=indigo][font=arial]Dude! That is totally the best hangover cure ever. That, bacon and orange juice was what my mate made us all on Saturday morning. Anyway, I'm quite partial to a chip sandwich, but that's been said. Dang. I have been known to make [i]muffinbar milkshakes[/i] though. Mum thinks it's disgusting, but what does she know. It's basically a chocolate chip muffinbar, three icecubes, milk, icecream and a tablespoon of chocolate powder, then you blend it till the muffinbar is relatively smooth. It has a weird texture [i]going down[/i], but it tastes like heaven. It's not quite chocolate milk, and not quite muffin - but a glorious and happy medium.[/font][/color][/size]