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Cool, we're on the same page concerning the Batman Beyond series. I loved the idea, the new gagets were great, and I liked some of the new villains. However, I wasn't at all impressed with the show overall. I'm glad someone is filling in the gaps the WB left hanging open (even if it is a fanfic). I'm glad you stuck with the original opening, and added the reactions from other heroes. But what was Barbra's reaction? I was kinda hoping to see that. And you might want to break up the dialog into more paragraphs, a couple times I got confused who was speaking. Other than that, its a decent story, and the mood is dark as promised (good job).

Yep, I love fanfiction. Haven't written any, but it isn't from lack of ideas, I just don't have enough spare time to devote to writing them. Anyways, you asked about fanfics people have read and think others should read them too? I can think of two, right here on the OB Anthology. "Bearers of the Shards" and the companion story "Lord of the West" (still in progress), both by Yamisui. Also, the thread that Dragonboym2 is working on is entitled "What I been working on." Just thought you might want to know, gaarasgirl90.

Ask and ye shall recieve... The other titles? "Anime Leap," and "Manga Mayhem." I wasn't sure whether your story would be based on the anime shows or the manga. I actually like your title better, "Scene Switchers." As for the space/time rips, those sound cool. You could play around with those a bit, concerning the consequences of allowing the rip to continue. A horde of demons could come spilling out, maybe the anime worlds would start bleeding into each other, or even cause the fabric of space in the world to tear to shreds! But you'll need to explain how Kevin closes the rips. Hmmm... :idea: Hey, what if he uses the rips to move from one anime world to another. He would end up at the new destination, and seal the space/time rip at the same time! If you think that might work, go with it.

I don't have much of an oppinion on the first three plot ideas. I haven't seen more than two nonconsecutive episodes of the series you mention, so my oppinion wouldn't be of much help to you. Now the last story idea has got me hooked. I have a couple of ideas for Kevin's purpose. He could be trying to find his way home after getting warped into an anime world by accident, which would be a tribute to the original [I]Sliders[/I] and [I]Quantum Leap[/I]. Another option would be Kevin attempting to stop some bad guy/gal from wreaking utter havoc on the storylines of all the major anime series. I have a few ideas for the title, but the only good one is "Switching Stories," and even that doesn't sound all that inspiring to me. Good luck on all of your stories, and I hope I have helped you a bit with the last idea. Please post the as of yet unnamed fourth story on the OB someday.

[COLOR=DarkSlateBlue]I'm still working on my sign-up, and I do have two questions. 1. Will you be using the Chapter System? 2. Will the students be allowed to use weapons like the bo, sia, or nunchucks? I know for a fact that the bo (a.k.a. quarterstaff) was originally an oar for boats, and the sia and nunchucks were farming tools. These three weapons were developed in Okinawa to be used against the Japanese and Chinese after weapons were banned (they couldn't ban their farming tools and oars).[/COLOR]

ULX, I got the creeps just reading some of these. Nice work! Though I doubt I'll actually sign up for this, here's a little something I thought up. A new monster. [B]Shockers[/B] - Fort Sang was not restricted to executing prisoners in unusual ways. The infamous Fort was one of the first to install an electric chair. Now, the souls of those who sat in it are back. Dressed in tattered prison garb, the Shockers are half-rotted corpses with wires filling in where the body decayed. The hands have wires running from under the sleeves to the fingertips. Their touch will electricute anyone, and though the voltage and current are not enough to kill outright, it will paralze the victim until they do die. Hope people sign up for this, it's good. Oh, feel free to edit the Shockers as much as you like (or don't include them at all).

Starting before we know what House we'll be sorted into is a good idea; that way we might get to know people before inter-House competition interferes. Also, when does this story occur? During Voldermort's time, directly after it, after Harry Potter leaves? I'll definitely consider joining if this makes it to the Inn.

My *gasp* God. That *cough* was *wheeze* long! [I][B]But it was freaking great!!!!![/B][/I] In fact, the length is just a testament to the richness of the story. I can't really judge the characters, having only seen a few episodes of the anime and the first movie, as well as the first few mangas, but as far as I've seen, the characters are dead on. The story is... *looks through thesarus, then throws it aside in disgust* okay, I couldn't come up with a word with the proper intensity, but the story is awesome (damn weak word!). The opening with the demon dripping blood had me on the edge of my seat. The plot twists kept making the story more interesting to the point I glued myself to the computer (not really, we ran out of glue *sob*). The comedy had me laughing so hard I cried (Inuyasha on caffeine was priceless!). And and and and and *breathes into paper bag*. *visibly calmer* There is one discrepency that leaped out at me. Yaburenumaru takes on his demon form during the day, but Shippo says that the demon struck at night. All in all, I loved it. Not "liked," [I]loved[/I]. So, when is the companion story "Lord of the West" going to be posted? *hops around room in anticipation*

Yuki woke to the sound of birds, sat up and streached to work the kinks out of his back and shoulders. [I]Damn, I hate sleeping on the ground. But that's what I get for playing tag with that swallow spirit and losing track of time[/I], he thought. He glanced at the sun, took his bearings, then started to run. As he built up speed, his human form flowed into that of his snow leopard form. He bounded into the air, sailed over the forest he had rested in, and hit the ground laughing. [I]Woo-hoo, yeah! I[/I] live [I]for this![/I] he crowed to himself. Just then, he noticed he was headed straight for a lake. But instead of a spectacular splashdown, he simply froze a section of the water just before he touched down, and leapt off again. The water thawed almost as fast as it froze. ****** A while later, Yuki came to rest in front of Yubaba's bathhouse. He relinquished his natural form for that of a 14 year-old human boy, about average height and build, dressed in a white training kimono, with light blue eyes. He also had short-cropped hair the same color as his snow leopard's fur, as well as rounded feline ears, a long, thick tail, and cat-like paws for feet. He walked across the bridge, and muttered to himself, "I wonder what Kohaku is doing now?"

Futuristic fantasy? *drool* Where do I sign? Heh, sorry it took so long to spot this thread, but I don't frequent the Underground... um, frequently. Looks like a cool idea, I could definitely see myself signing onto this story if you move it to the Inn. So, you need help with the details? Okay, I can help a bit. I'll ask a few questions, and either force you to think about them, or just get you really mad at me. How large is the [I]Bane Blade[/I] (and consequently her crew)? (I'd lean towards a smaller fighting ship, like the [I]Defiant[/I] from [U]Deep Space Nine[/U].) How does it travel the mind-boggling distances between stars in a relatively short period of time? (Does it exceed the speed of light [warp drive], travel through a different dimetion [hyperspace], fold space like a piece of paper [wormhole], etc?) Does the [I]Bane Blade[/I] only fight the Pact members, or are there clashes with ESUG or USC ships (if they, say, demand the [I]Bane Blade[/I] identify herself)? What races will be serving on the ship? On other ships (including the pirates)? I'll add anything that pops into my head. If you need any more help, just ask. (It might help me help you if you specify where you need help.)

Interesting introduction. You've evidently put a lot of thought into this RPG already. I gather this will be rated M, based on the graphic awakening and aftermath ("bones scattered unceremoniously about the dank alley with three bloodied skulls to match." Not sure why I liked that particular quote, but it appealed to me). Titles? I did some thinking, and came up with a few (not sure if any are already taken). "Carnal Sins" (is it "carnal" or "cardinal", can't remember offhand), "Seven Deadly Sins", "The War of Sin", "Embodiment of Sin", and "Atheism's Fall". If this gets to Adventure Inn, I might sign up for the Chapel, if I'm not too busy. I agree with PiroMunkie, either you need to control the Sins yourself, or find a reliable staff to play them. I can just imagine what kind of havoc someone (like me) could wreak on this RPG playing a Sin. Cheers, and good luck!

[COLOR=DarkRed]*So where do you live, Reaf?* Diaga asked. "The Fum Plains. Next to the forests of course," Reaf replied absently. *Of course? What do you mean by that?* the dragon asked, apparently puzzled. "Oh, you don't know? We Cathsheens live in what humans would call 'treehouses.' Climbing is not a difficulty for us, because of our claws on our hands and feet, but elves and humans often find it most bothersome. So we provide ladders for them." Suddenly he chuckled. "But, we don't always remember to put the ladders on the ground!" he explained. Diaga found this very amusing, and the pair laughed for a few minutes together, as the entire group sped towards the Windbreakers. "By the way, Diaga. How much longer will this ride take? I don't want to sound rude, but the metalic sheen to your scales is not just an illusion." *It should take most of the day. If we're lucky, we'll reach Windbreaker before dusk. By the way, what was that growling?* "That was my stomach telling me it's empty. Are we stopping for lunch, or are we supposed to eat up here?"[/COLOR]

Interesting, a new side to Winnie's character comes out. Or maybe it's an expansion on her dislike of being labled an outsider? I know saying it is just repeating what a dozen people have said before, but I'll say it anyways. You're doing a good job of keeping the character's personalities separate. It might not be a humorous chapter, but it's a good idea to intersperse humorous with serious chapters. Give the audience a chance to catch their breaths.

I really liked this movie. Name: Yuki Age: 14 Gender: Male Apperence: Yuki is about average height and weight. His hair, which is cropped short, is white with a pattern of black spots through it, like a snow leopard's, and has light blue eyes. He also has rounded cat-like ears, a long, thick, cat-like tail, and (you guessed it) cat-like paws for feet, all covered with fur the same color as his hair. He can get rid of them, and make his hair light brown, but feels more comfortable with a few cat traits showing. He wears a white training kimono; he prefers to wear something lightweight and loose so his movements are not hampered by his clothing. He is able to transform into an alternate form like Kohaku, and Kaite, but his is a big snow leopard (how many people saw that coming?). He can't fly, but has amazing jumping ability. Short Bio: Yuki is a fun-loving spirit of the mountains. He has been friends with Zaneba for a long time, and thinks of her like family. Since Chihiro's adventures in the spirit world, Yuki has been introduced to Kohaku and No-Face by Zaneba, and has made friends with both. And since he thinks of Zaneba as family, he also gets along with her sister, Yubaba, but just barely. He hasn't met Kaite yet, because he rarely visits the bathhouse. But since he has become friends with Kohaku, he visits the bathhouse more often, so it's only a matter of time.

OK, here's my two cents. I really like it. Why? It's funny, realistic, and the explanation of English grammar vs. Japanese grammar was pretty cool. I'm no linguist, but I could follow it. The last chapter was fine, I have no idea why you thought it sucked. I've read much worse (my own work, too. Nothing on the OB though, so don't bother looking). Oh, yeah, there is a perfectly reasonable explanation for why I haven't said anything up to this point; I haven't been reading it. The title looked wierd to me, but when I saw that the story had become three pages in length, I thought I'd read it anyway. From now on, I will read EVERY story with a wierd-sounding title.

[COLOR=DarkRed]Reaf stared at the ground in facination as it zoomed past. [I]We must be going extremely fast, since we're so high up yet we see the land pass below us in leaps and bounds[/I], he thought. He looked at the golden dragon on which he was seated. All the metallic dragons were beautiful, yet he felt mysteriously attracted to this one in particular, which was why he had approached her. He suddenly thought of something else, and leaned forward to yell towards the dragon over the wind, "Hey, what's your name?" The dragon turned her head slightly to the side so he could see her calm blue eye, and said *Which one do you want?* Reaf wondered what she meant before realizing she meant the symbiote's name or the dragon's name. "The symbiote's name. I have a feeling that I'll absolutely butcher the dragon's name trying to pronounce it," he responded. *You're probably right on that count,* the dragon responded with a dragonish laugh. *My name is Diaga.* "Diaga. Pretty name. I'm Reaf."[/COLOR]

[COLOR=DarkRed]Kamui explained his grand plan to the Cathsheen and the Elf. Reaf and Kyohen both found it disappointingly simple. Kyohen and Kamui would boost (throw) Reaf onto the ogre's back, and while Reaf distracted it, they would bring it to the ground. There, the whole group would help decapitate it. But since simple plans tend to have fewer snags, they agreed to it. All three rushed behind the huge ogre, who was having trouble, since he had tangled himself in the rope. Reaf half-hoped the stupid thing would trip before he had to clamber all over it, but it remained on its feet. The Human and Elf took their positions, linked hands to form a sort of launch pad, Reaf jumped on their hands, and between the forces of the two throwing him upwards and his second jump, Reaf landed on the ogre's upper back. Reaf scaled the ogre's back like an overly energetic monkey, stood on its shoulder, and when the ogre turned to look, he drove his spear into its eye. As it was "undead", it had little effect, but distracted the ogre long enough for Kamui and Kyohen to wrap another rope around its legs, pulling as it stepped, causing the ogre to fall flat on its face. Reaf jumped at the last second, landed in a roll to absorb most of the impact, then turned back towards the ogre to help decapitate it. The only reason they killed the puppet before it got to its feet, or the healing process reversed, was Jarod's mystical swords easily cut through the rock-like skin of the ogre. In other words, he did most of the decapitating.[/COLOR]

[COLOR=DarkRed]Reaf watched in facination as the ogre was forcibly healed by Kierra. Not only was skin covering it, mucsles were growing and attaching to the bones and vital organs were expanding like balloons in the chest cavity. "Jarod, you're a genius," Reaf said. Jarod seemed a bit taken aback by the unexpected compliment from Reaf. But only for a moment. "It was obvious. Besides, we haven't won yet." As if to underscore his observation, the ogre thrashed around blindly, held in place by the roped staff, which had been covered by new skin. The rope held, as did the tree, but Reaf wasn't about to place odds that both would hold long. Besides, they still needed to kill it. Fortunately, Kamui had a plan. Zaion seemed to be busy, so Reaf hurried the the human's side when he called for the fastest group member.[/COLOR]

[COLOR=DarkRed]The animated skeleton glowed brighter as Arturios poured more power into it. It rose to its full (and impressive) height, raised its bone sword, and swung at Zaion. She dodged, and Shero used the distraction to wedge her sword blade into the knee socket, trying to dislocate it. The ogre skeleton turned and reached for her with a glowing hand. Suddenly, an earsplitting CRACK exploded through the air. The skeleton's ulna cracked and a lead ball dropped to the ground. Reaf had run forward and gotten as close as he could to do that much damage. Unfortunately, it had little effect on the skeletal ogre, beyond a second's hesitation, in which Shero moved out of the psion-controled skeleton's reach. Then the ogre skeleton struck again, this time aiming at Reaf, who had gotten within its striking range. He dodged its overhand strike with the rapier, but failed to dodge its sweeping blow. Fortunately, he was caught by the flat of the bone blade, otherwise he would have been cut in half at the waist. He landed almost at the feet of Arturios. Reaf looked at the old psion, and asked, "I don't suppose knocking you out cold is the answer to this little puzzle you've given us?" His glare was answer enough.[/COLOR]

[COLOR=DarkRed]"Not only will it be good practice for the group, it'll also be good for the 'attackers.' We may have to fight a group of enemies singly or in pairs in the future," Reaf pointed out. "Hang on. First, we'll need a referee to keep track of the proceedings, tally any casualties, that sort of thing," said Kyohen. "Arturios, would you mind taking on this responsibility?" [I]Well, he is the obvious choice,[/I] Reaf thought. [I]Besides, Arturios said himself that he might leave the party at Windbreaker. We'll need to get used to getting along without him.[/I][/COLOR]

Just so everyone knows, I took the Wargs directly from [U]The Lord of the Rings[/U]. If this isn't a good idea, let me know and I'll remove it.

[COLOR=DarkRed]"I agree with Kamui's assessment, as far as it goes," Reaf stated as he set down an armload of firewood. He glanced at the sleeping dragon he had earlier assumed was an enemy, and smiled to himself. Although the dragon/symbiote had undoubtedly saved their lives, he had also made it nearly impossible to find firewood. Reaf turned back to the group. "We face a united enemy with overwhelming force on its side. If we are disunited, then we stand no chance at all. It's very much like fighting the Wargs," he finished meditatively, refering to the intelligent, wolf-like pack hunters that were known to attack isolated settlements.[/COLOR]

[COLOR=DarkRed]Reaf glanced back for a moment as they continued to run. He could no longer see or hear the ogres, but he doubted that they would give up the chase so easily. Just then, Reaf noticed the baby dragon heading straight for them from the sky. Reaf had not noticed the winged being in the distance, he was more concerned with keeping an eye on the pursuing ogres. The Imogi was still a ways away, but it was closing the distance awfully fast. [I]Even if the dragon isn't in the service of Baaloth, it is still a danger to us[/I], Reaf thought. [I]It will either eat us itself, or lead the Shadow-Kai straight to us! And since it's winged, it will be able to follow us no matter where we run.[/I] "Arturios, shouldn't we make a run for the forest? The Imogi will not be able to follow us through the thick trees, and will lose sight of us, too."[/COLOR]

First of all, sorry I haven't posted in a long time. My family went to Maine (spitting distance from the Canadian border) to visit some friends we haven't seen in a long time. As luck would have it, they didn't have an internet connection :cussing:. If I'd known beforehand, I would've given notice. Thanks ThatOneOddDude for including my character (Reaf) in the battle against the ogre. Taking over the watch was a nice touch, too. If anyone wants to include my character's reason for missing most of the battle, he is a very heavy sleeper, and only woke up when something (or someone) was thrown on top of him by the ogre. I'll post as soon as I can.

Hi, O-Ushi, I signed up for your RPG a little while back. I hope it's acceptable. If I need to tone the power down, make my character even more out of his ****ing mind than he already is, or anything else, let me know. Also, since Vicky's character thinks he's God, and my character thinks he's Satan, should we have a long-standing emnity or something? I only just thought of that, didn't even realize it when I made my sign-up. I think the idea is totally cool (otherwise, I wouldn't have signed up, now would I?). I especially like the rule of no uber-powers for almost-sane people.