[QUOTE=Chikara Kokoro]A lot of parts of what you wrote I honestly couldn't understand what you were trying to say. What I could read does seem a bit like every other stereotypical shonen manga out there. Try to add some variation into it because to be perfectly honest, this shows little creativity.
I am not writing this to break your spirit, but to just tell you that there's a long way to go before this will be able to show promise. Try to add something that will make a reader say, "Hey, this is different" and want to read it because it's interesting. Mangas that are based solely on swords and the subsequent fighting, not to mention the "I want to be the best" hero, get weak and hackneyed very quickly.[/QUOTE]
yea, I agree....it sounds familiar to the other shonen manga too. Then again, I hope you do a fantastic job on your manga!