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[QUOTE=JJ][Font=Arial]Yeah, Tical...to be quite honest, you have no real grasp on how to write an OB parody. First off, your intro paragraph reads as if a valley girl from California was reading it. I'm sorry, but very few people find that funny, much less entertaining. Your sentance structure seems a bit off as well. This being one example. A better way to say it would be, "With over 50 members in attendance today, it was one of the largest turnouts in years." Another thing that got me was your sudden change to a first person narrative in the very end. You really can't do that. It may be that you did it not noticing, but that's one of the things you've got to look out for. All in all, you write as if you were talking, which you really can't do. It's OK to a certain extent when characters are speaking, but doing it as a description is really unattractive. I'll keep watching this story, only to see if things get better. The whole mysterious banner was really so Otaku Hollow, but here's to seeing you pull off something good.[/font][/QUOTE] Well I dont blame you for not liking it. I had nothing better to do, and I needed to blow some time. I wrote it in like 10 minutes... not really expecting much >_> Anywho the switch is because the marrator was speaking, if you didn't notice.

Not homosexual, but I hate the guy TPBM is secretly working for the government >_>

CHEESECAKE Charlie's Horse Eats Enormous Stirfried Eels 'Cause Alex Kills Em' STUPIDITY

Pure brilliance dudez. I love how Retri does his whole little conversation with Joko and stuff. The quote Athena mentioned was great, as well as the Emo kid jokes XD I love the ban bullets. Kick ass.

[center][IMG]http://i21.photobucket.com/albums/b269/MetalSonic700/teonaobf.jpg[/IMG][/center] [color=darkslateblue]Chapter 1:[/color] It was a dark and stormy night. Not a rainy storm, but you know those one?s where it?s like all cloudy and there?s lightening but the rain never shows up? Then you?re, like, disappointed cause you already brought in the bikes and stuff? Anyway, it was one of those. A fierce bolt of electricity cracked down on the local power generator and the lights went out all across Otaku Town. Members caught in mid-post were infuriated and others were scared. Everyone began migrating to the Suggestions and Feedback building with their complaints and questions [B]?Everything is going to be fine. There seems to be some sort of virus.? [/B] James said, talking through a microphone onstage to the large group of members. Today had been one of the largest turnouts in years, and over 50 members were gathered today. Questions from newer members bombarded the stage. [B]?What?s going to happen?? ?What is the cause of this?? ?What?re you going to do??[/B] The older members remained silent, holding in their faith of the system. Otaku Town had seen far worse than a meager thunderstorm. In the back of the auditorium stood Tical against the wall. No one important on his buddy list was here today, so he decided to hang back, finding no place for himself amongst the newbies or the vets. Knowing that the moderators were investigating the problem as he thought, he wasn?t very concerned. Just from looking at the Who?s Online list and looking around, he could see that not everyone had even left the threads. He wondered if he should?ve stayed with his post, but he was only midway through the third sentence anyway. --Meanwhile-- [B]?Everything?s fine in Adventure Square,?[/B] Arcadia radioed to her fellow mods, a bit tired after searching every thread in the area for problems. [B]?Nothing in the Lounge either,? [/B] replied Indifference. [B]?Oh my god I?ve found something!?[/B] Desbreko cried over his radio. [B]?Where are you?? ?I?m on my way!?[/B] [B]?Oh, no don?t worry I?m just messing with you XD? [/B] he replied. [B]?I don?t think we should take this so seriously. It looks like there?s been no real effects except for the power outage.?[/B] [B]?This is strange. Maybe the virus hasn?t taken full effect yet,? [/B] Arcadia radioed in return. [B]?Relax, it?s probably just some kid thinking he can screw with us. He?s going down.? [/B] But Desbreko couldn?t have been more wrong. Suddenly he was hit with an enormous blast! Not like the kind that wipes out a whole lot of stuff, but you know like the torso-sized ones. Maybe? I dunno? 3 feet in diameter. Desbreko was sent barreling down the street. He held to a gushing wound on his stomach with one hand, the other grasping tightly to his blue modrod. [B]?Des?! Des can you hear me?!? [/B] One of the other mods cried over the radio. But it was too late. The last thing Desbreko saw was a strange glowing modrod with red-and-white stripes as it was held above the wielder?s head. In a flash of light, Desbreko was banned. -- Back at the Suggestions and Feedback building -- Rain began to poor down heavily outside, and several members could be heard complaining that they left their bicycles out. [B]?Didn?t you think to bring them in when you saw lightening??[/B] Tical asked one of the members. [B]?But the narrator said it would be one of those weird rainless storms!?[/B] He then turned to me, along with several other members. I backed away slowly and then broke into a sprint. [B]?I?ll get you for this, jackass! You?re paying for my bike!? [/B] The angry member cornered me at the door. It was raining so I didn?t know what to do. Thinking quickly, I ended chapter 1. EDIT: I forgot the rating!!! its t-LV!!! Also, WTH happened to my graphic O_o

[QUOTE=White][color=#555555][FONT=Tahoma] Just because it's a story doesn't mean the chapters have to be long. Oh well. I won't be writing many more chapters. Nobody seems to really enjoy them, and if nobody likes them then what's the point of continuing? So, I expect there will be about 5 chapters in total. Oh and Tical, I'd like it if you didn't act like a hypocrit when posting about my story. :) I thought you said it was unmemorable? :nono:[/FONT][/COLOR][/QUOTE] >_> for a minute, yes, it was fun to say. What I mean by unmemorable is that you're not really breakin out the great quotes or great scenes. For instance, with the western-style story starring you and D_W, I can remember all the scenes and alot of the jokes cuz they stood out among other jokes. I'm not really saying your story iis [I]bad[/I] just mundane. Just kick it up a knotch, throw in some zest.

A Gavin of laxitives? Interesting, Most Interesting. Y'know... I'm sorry to say that I pretty much don't like your story. Namely because it's not that funny, and it's not that origional. Plus your chapters are too short... they take like 1 minute to read and are un-memorable. I'll keep reading though, in case it gets better.

KALOPSIA Kill All Little Onimous Parasites, 'Specially Inkro Allen and now... IKSOSE

TCFAOQTCZ Think, Captain! Firing Ancient Oranges Questionably Thrashes Consistant Zest! here's one GAIBSFVOFFTTEOM

Dude, this story is frikkin awesome! I've never seen Pulp Fiction (but I'll be damned if I didn't want to) but I still loved your story. I love the way threads are buildings and the search engine is a car and stuff like that. Damn, these dudes REALLY don't like other boards, though for the most part I don't blame them. I gotta say, the best line had to be 'Onix gave two shits. Probably one shit too many' Utter brilliance.

[QUOTE=nezzyjean]two omlets sizzle inside the cooking stove. JDSOGJ[/QUOTE] Jude Daw's Soggy Orange Gym Jersey TOTCTVTBTG

Holy Enzymes That's Your Uncle There! TOSITCS

I know the intended effect was fangirls but... I love Johnny Depp!!! Hes my favorite actor and he kicks ***. Especially in Pirates, which I trust you will be going to see on Friday *looks at D_W inquisitingly* Anywho, I can't get enough Slackers in Slacks! You are awesome D_W!

I friggin hate PM censoring. If I'm talking to a friend -- which is what the PM system is most commonly used for and by lots of people very frequently -- wouldn't censor myself. Thats just stupid.

The way I see it, this actually could be a threat. But that's only because word of mouth has told me North Korea really hates the US. And there was that flash video '**** USA'. That was actually really funny XD Anywho, I'm not worried. Korea could bomb us... war could break out... I won't pay it much attention following the commonplace mentality that it doesn't effect me. Of course I could end up dead. But that wouldn't bother me.

Anyone remember the episode of Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles (the new, crappy series) where Donatello goes in the basement and finds that Casey dude? And Casey had this crystal on his pencil that makes his drawings come to life. That would be friggin awesome. Anything you need, just draw it and you got it! And drawing hentai would be a lot more fun, ay perverts? ;) XD

[quote name='Charles']You know, you're all right. lol[/quote] :animesmil I'm honored Anywho, I wanted to bring about this: The United States prolly could save most of the world. Here, let me qupte song lyrics instead... yes it serves to prove that I have no mind of my own and only follow the words of others, but the words are true. [Quote=System Of A Down - Boom]4,000 hungry children Leave us per hour from starvation While billions are spent on bombs Creating death shower [/Quote] You may say that there's nothing we can do, but hold the gravity of this statement in your hands and tell me you can't think of something!!!

I've gone 6 months without friends before... 2 months without internet... and 8 months without cable... even 4 months without video games... to sum it up, I've seen hell. But the one thing I couldn't live without... my brother. I hate having to deal with him, but I don't know what I'd do if he was gone. I've been in a state of perpetual sadness before, but without him Id vegetabilize.

Im glad the hobbits goot into the fireworks though, those things were badass! Nice comic DW!

You came to the right place with your question. Al people have a hole they want to fill, as I'm sure you've heard. They don't know what to fill it with and so when someone tells them what they need to fill it they jump on the opportunity. Hence how advertising controls your soul. There are things we think we want but dont. What do we want? I have no ****ing clue. I have come to accept that life is impossible to figure out. So just do whatever the hell you want... that's all you can do. Stop asking questions and just do something. Stop caring so much. I chose to fall in love... Im happy with that.

No! There will never be utopia! Only endless centuries of suffering! HAHAHAHAHA!!! No, but seriously. Why even ask. It'll never happen. Racism will end when one race exists on earth. Poverty will end when the poor die out. War will end when one power rises above the rest. And when these have all happened, the leftovers will kill each other.

Thanks to the story Princess (and several other threads in the lounge) I was depressed all night last night! That poor little girl! T-T

Maybe you should just go back and stop GWAR from coming to Earth XD Anywho... I don't know what I'd change exactly... everything i've ever known contriutes to what I am. Maybe I'd make it so I could've somehow ended up moving to Indianna somewhere along the way >_>

I'm very sorry, I want to apologize for making this thread. I was just really depressed after reading all those sad threads. I don't [I]really[/I] want everyone to die... also, Charles... at least I know what it means now :animesmil

Constantly here on OB we discuss the problems of the world, annunciating our opinions and sharing our experiences. So my question is... what can be done to solve the world's problems? What is your ideal visage of the world? I won't give an example... because all I can see to help is the eradication of all existance.