Allamorph

[quote name='Aberinkula][COLOR="DarkSlateGray"][size=1]And btw, just cause I'm 14 doesn't mean I'm small. Physically yes :p but otherwise, not that tiny. I"ll be 18 in 3 years gosh darn it![/size'][/COLOR][/quote] [FONT=Arial]Give or take the next few months 'til you hit fifteen....genius. :p Back to Queen![/FONT]

[FONT=Arial]Even if you got bored browsing songstowearpantsto, you must listen to at least this one. Read the request first. [URL="http://www.songstowearpantsto.com/songs/the-touchtone-genius/"][COLOR="Blue"]The Touchtone Genius[/COLOR][/URL] My only lament is that he hasn't posted Mavis Beacon Teaches Spanish. [strike]Or the Polka Loca.[/strike] Nevermind! He [URL="http://www.songstowearpantsto.com/songs/polka-loca/"][COLOR="Blue"]did[/COLOR][/URL]!!![/FONT]

[quote name='Clurr][FONT="Arial"']EDIT - I couldn't stand more than three seconds of the Most Wanted. It reminded me of sitting in the allergist's office listening to their hella annoying jazz.[/FONT][/quote] [FONT=Arial]I give one "lol" to musak. You know you can download the track free, right, [COLOR=DarkRed]Aber[/COLOR]? [B]Edit:[/B] I think I'll start calling you Ricky. Richard doesn't work, and Rick is too close to an idiot. Plus, you're still tiny. :p[/FONT]

[quote name='chibi-master']Now, how would we do that if we're all scattered across the country, silly? And I believe one of OB's members is currently in Norway, was it?:animestun Oh, well, go family!:animesmil[/quote] [FONT=Arial][COLOR="DarkRed"]Vicky[/COLOR] and [COLOR="DarkRed"]Gavin[/COLOR] (and others?) are in Britain, [COLOR="DarkRed"]Andrew[/COLOR] is in Wales, [COLOR="DarkRed"]Sandy[/COLOR]'s Finnish, [COLOR="DarkRed"]Boo[/COLOR] is Norwegian(?), a third of the moderators are in Utah?at least, it feels like a third..... And [COLOR="DarkRed"]James[/COLOR] is an Aussie. Which is totally cool. Don't ask where I am. Tennessee is my cover.[/FONT]

[quote name='Aberinkula][COLOR="DarkSlateGray"][size=1]I've been tought by other women how to be a gent, so, nyeh :p[/size'][/COLOR][/quote] [FONT=Arial]Still waitin' to see that in action. What? I'm a skeptic.[/FONT]

[FONT=Arial]Been listening to a rather eclectic mix of songs by an artist who takes composition requests. Check him out [URL="http://www.songstowearpantsto.com/"][COLOR="Blue"]here[/COLOR][/URL]. One in particular came to mind, that Prem would love, done in the style of The Mars Volta: [URL="http://www.songstowearpantsto.com/songs/i-am-the-mars-volta-and-i-am-space-ghost/"][COLOR="Blue"]listen[/COLOR][/URL].[/FONT]

Speaking of which:

[FONT=Arial]I was thinking more like what had to happen a little [I]before[/I] that.....[/FONT]

[quote name='Desbreko][color=#4B0082']I thought it was common knowledge that James and Adam are the parents.[/color][/quote] [FONT=Arial]That's, like, really gross.[/FONT]

[quote name='Aceburner']Can't be any worse than Sonic '06.[/quote] [FONT=Arial]You factoring in the Emo angle? Emo Sonic. Eaugh.[/FONT]

[quote name='Aceburner']I'm assuming you mean you don't want to be married to James, because I'm almost sure that you already knew you wore considered the mother figure of the place.:p[/quote] [FONT=Arial]Check her adoption list.[/FONT]

[CENTER][URL=http://fc07.deviantart.com/fs30/f/2008/107/3/1/__Hero__s_sword___by_Meltina.jpg][IMG]http://tn3-2.deviantart.com/fs30/300W/f/2008/107/3/1/__Hero__s_sword___by_Meltina.jpg[/IMG][/URL][/CENTER] [FONT=Arial]Food for thought....[/FONT]

[quote name='taperson][COLOR="DeepSkyBlue"][SIZE="1"]I wouldn't call it cynicism as much as I would call it truth.[/SIZE'][/COLOR][/quote] [FONT=Arial]I wouldn't. I'd [I]notice[/I], because I see you around. Whether or not I'd say anything to anyone is another matter. (^_^)[/FONT]

[FONT=Arial]Depends on the thread. 'Cause, you know, there [I]are[/I] others....[/FONT]

[quote name='Korey][FONT="Franklin Gothic Medium"']Allamorph: Because we didn't get to finish our pokemon battle over PM. I believe the ball is in your court bud :D[/FONT][/quote] [FONT=Arial]What the....! [SIZE="1"]urg[/SIZE] ....right. Fix that typo in your sig and I might consider it. :p[/FONT]

[quote name='instantnoodle13']...and that people don't hate me for all eternity.[/quote] [FONT=Arial]Nice way to focus on the negative there, pal. :p I recommend you bop around, make some comments, crack some jokes, and just generally have fun. And listen to some Queen while you're at it. Nothin' like rock by [I]real musicians[/I] to get your spirits goin'.[/FONT]

[quote name='Sabrina][FONT="Tahoma"']... though since Sir Allamorph recommended it to her, does that mean he gets the blame? o_O[/FONT][/quote] [FONT=Arial]I strike again. :smirk: Between the two albums, my hands-down favorite chart is Floodlights, from their first album, Hybrid Awaken. Wall Of Sound is a much more cohesive album; I think Lunar was experimenting around with their first one, and kinda settled down for WOS, which makes it the better of the two. Incidentally, Cryptic Light (also on HA) was the inspiration for [URL="http://www.otakuboards.com/showpost.php?p=778560&postcount=90"][COLOR="Blue"]this[/COLOR][/URL] post, way back when. If you listen while reading, it makes more sense.[/FONT]

[QUOTE=Aberinkula][COLOR="DarkSlateGray"][SIZE="1"]Quite the contrary my dear Indi. Each stanza has four lines, and two of them rhyme with each other. .......... And he said for quatrain's the lines have to rhyme in those 4 patterns. So I'm only going by what I've learned from him.[/SIZE][/COLOR][/QUOTE] [FONT=Arial]True, but then he should also have impressed meter and rhythm upon you. :animesmil Besides, that was irrelevant for this contest. Read [COLOR="DarkRed"]Sabrina[/COLOR]'s rules again: [quote name='Sabrina'][FONT="Tahoma"]The idea is that at least one line has to rhyme with another one in each section. So out of four lines, the endings of two have to rhyme, for a total of six lines throughout the poem. The two lines that rhyme in one section do not have to rhyme with the next section unless you want to do that. Also, if you wish for all of them to rhyme throughout the entire poem that's fine too. Sorry if I was not clear on that. [/FONT][/QUOTE] No one was required to hold with traditional Quatrain format. All we had to do was write three stanzas of four lines each, and two lines out of each set of four had to rhyme. Just like how in the Cinquain thread, no one is required to follow traditional Cinquain format, other than five lines with specific ideas for each line. True cinquains actually limit the amount of total syllables you have in each line. Not snarkin' at ya; just make sure you get your facts straight. [B]Edit:[/B] Confound it, [COLOR=Indigo]Indi[/COLOR], we did it again![/FONT]

[quote name='Aberinkula][COLOR="DarkSlateGray"][SIZE="1"][I]'This is life[u][B]:[/B][/u] make no mistake' [/I]seems more correct to me for some reason. But idk, you're the one who's better at writing. :p[/SIZE'][/COLOR][/quote] [FONT=Arial]Yeah, that was [COLOR="DarkRed"]Gavin[/COLOR]'s line. :animesmil[/FONT]

[FONT=Arial]Heh. Dropped the ball earlier, I did. [COLOR="DarkRed"]Aber[/COLOR]: Second stanza, second line:[I]"...the [COLOR="Red"]mountain's[/COLOR] divine beauty...."[/I] Watch yourself, eh? (^_^)[/FONT]

See, Raiha? See what happens when you try? You got the talent, milady. You got plenty of that. We just gotta get you usin' it. (^_^)

[FONT=Arial]I like the difference in approaches: one watching as the seasons cycle around; and the other looking at them all as one, and yet not as one, removed from time. [COLOR="DarkRed"]Indi[/COLOR]: [I]"...in [COLOR="Red"]its[/COLOR] grasp,/"[/I]. Also, drop the comma before the final [I]"...a hint of ice."[/I] The repetition was a nice feel, but it didn't need the spacer to accentuate it; all that the comma did was disrupt your flow, really. (^_^) The line will catch by itself. [COLOR="DarkRed"]SunfallE[/COLOR]: Your rhyme scheme was interesting. I noticed you went for a solid [I]abab[/I] through the entire poem, and you did really well, variating to one other [I]c[/I] rhyme, and even counting the way the first stanza went [I]abab[/I]'. (read as "[I]b[/I]-prime") Your second stanza, though, was a little odd, with its ... ... [I]cbcc'[/I] ? :p I wouldn't say anything, but the final line of the second stanza is close enough to your [I]c[/I] rhyme that it feels almost intentional. Not really a big concern, just a curiosity. This call is an empathic one for me. I'm much more drawn emotionally to the first one, since it's in my nature to just sit and watch and let time flow by me. [B]indifference[/B][/FONT]

[FONT=Arial][COLOR="DarkRed"]Treble[/COLOR]: Interesting how you varied the meter of each successive stanza. I'd almost be tempted to say it was an accident if you hadn't gotten consistently simpler. Intentional or no, it was a neat effect. One line struck me: [I]"I wish I could just take a dive./"[/I] It's probably just me, but the use of the word "just" allows the feeling to dissipate slightly. Perhaps if you rewrote it [I]"Wishing I could take a dive./"[/I] it would feel more pronounced, and might also fit with its counterpart line [I]"So free and so alive,/"[/I] a little easier. (^_^) Watch for "just" in all your stuff. Not that it's bad to use it, just be careful. [COLOR="DarkRed"]8bit[/COLOR]: Very precise rhythm and meter. Nicely done. I also like the way you used a bit of history, made it personal, and ended in suicide (I'm pretty sure), but still held the ocean as the unifying theme. My one thought is again a single line: [I]"It serves as an aquatic graveyard/"[/I]. Somehow "aquatic" doesn't feel right to me, given the meter; perhaps "watery" might fit better? (I'd even go for "wat'ry", for even more of a 'poetic' feel, but that's just archaic ole' me. :p) Given that, [I]"...serves a watery graveyard/"[/I] sounds kind of odd, so if you took that advice, you might switch "serves" to "stands" or something similar. Graa. Tough call. I'm really drawn to both of them about the same. Hmmph. :p I vote [B]White[/B] and his miniature epic.[/FONT]

[FONT=Arial]One quick note for both of you: you aren't required to pause your thoughts at the end of each line in a stanza. (^_^) Sure, rhythm and meter are there and important (unless you completely abandon them, and that's another subject altogether), but you're still allowed some freedom to express your thoughts as you see them spoken, and let phrases flow across the ends of lines. Very nice, clear imagery, [COLOR="DarkRed"]Rach[/COLOR]. I like the introspection in the second and third stanzas, [COLOR="DarkRed"]Raiha[/COLOR]. It drew my empathy. Ultimately, the topic itself decided the winner for me. The use of the desert as a setting was clever, [COLOR="DarkRed"]Raiha[/COLOR], but you allowed it to fall secondary, whereas [B]Rachmaninoff[/B] wrote to the topic itself; and since you were otherwise equally matched, that had to be the deciding factor.[/FONT]

[quote name='Tetra of sound']As for which one I now visit, it's neither. As it goes for me, if it confuses me or I can't decide, I go somewhere else.[/quote] [FONT=Arial](^_^) I would be more than willing to try and help clear your confusion away, if you ever wish to try again. I like making things work. People, too.[/FONT]