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Silpheed, you're from Kansas? Which part specifically, if you don't mind me asking? [I]np: Skillet - Rebirthing[/I]

Thank you for your kind words as well. I do have some more work, just been fine tuning it as much as possible, then I'll post it on the thread. No worries on the printing off bit, it's actually made me a bit proud. Each one of the poems had come to me from a distinct memory, The Blueprint is of my own father obviously, or they came from a strong feeling. I understand your dedication to the service, and thank you for it. These are merely my thoughts on the subject itself.

Thank you for the post. If you're needing some help, just PM me and I will help as much as possible. Did you have any criticism of anything?

I figured I would just make a singular thread for all of my most recent poetry. Hope that's okay. Any criticism is welcome and encouraged, and I hope you enjoy the poems. [I][B]The Blueprint[/B][/I] Standing on top of the world Lights flashing, cars moving People bustling from place to place without a care Never stopping, always moving I can finally see my life for what it is To the left of me lies my past Covered windows, children crying Being abused, both mentally and physically Yet I still see hope and determination Strength to rise above what they're expected to become To become a better person, a better man, a better father In front of me lies an outline, a blueprint of things to come A path yet to be blazed, with two distinct possiblilties I can see the break in it, with two separate directions One leading back towards the left, to become what is expected of me And one to the right, towards bright lights emanating change And to the right is a path covered by brightness Sight seen, yet sight unseen There will be a change here, a leap from the pain This path leads towards the ultimate reward To the final fulfillment of a boyhood dream I began to walk down that path today Towards change, and a new beginning Finally, fully, accepting that I could escape my past By taking a leap of faith By embracing my future [B][I]A life lived between seconds[/I][/B] A race against an undefeatable foe Powerful beyond measure Yet devoid of any real strength Back and forward Past, Present, Future Fighting without weapons Yet empowered with the strongest weapon Each second an attack A minute a battle lost An hour holds both devastation And the gift of life This night the clock strikes twelve You've fought time itself And your only weapon? Your faith [B][I]Untitled[/I][/B] I can't be like the others Not another soldier to fall in line So I struggle, kick, flail Anything to bring choice back, liberate So I fight back, retaliate Maybe one day, someday, an epiphany will come Societys heart will begin to beat again, like a drum Pulses thrum, chords strum Choice returns, society burns People regain control, forge their own path Instead of waiting to behold the weapons of the war When the realest weapon, the deadliest weapon, is hidden in an Oval Room [B][I]More Than Time[/I][/B] Decorated baskets Colors, all sorts Each thread interweaving That much I am sure Compromised promises Where did you go? The day that you chose not to show... Beautiful pink poppies Reaching for air The colors, they entice me See two in your hair Suddenly you're missing Gone with no trace The memories I have of your face... Singing gray sorrows And wasting the day Intangible memories Have nothing to say Immature kisses From me to you Into the air you flew... Laying together In a field full of gold Calmly we engage in laughter Happy, our affection we show Beautiful skies Shine down and we see Memories of love so serene... Connected and bounded A pact, held with trust Divided, we're conquered Love becomes lust A bird flies upon me Singing mysterious song Wondering where have you gone... Thank you to those who take the time to read these, and hopefully respond, it's very appreciated.