Poetic Prophet

aight you know, phuck this, i wasnt talking about this post inperticular. this board is wack, i was looking for a new place to get a wide variety of crit, obviouisly yall muh****as dont know what that shyt is, since i havent recieved any since i posted. but, phuck all yall.

first of all, im new so i didnt know that. and secondly, umm i posted this **** a few days after the first.

this piece actually has a title, the only problem is, i forgot it. this poem is kinda old, so its not likely the board i previously posted on is still around. but peep anyway. Images in my subconscious are like dreams when wide awake. Ethereal circumstances occurring in a surreal state. My head struggling to reach the surface, my legs strenuously kicking beneath. My larynx incapable of producing sounds, to bring someone to my relief. During this situation or rather, tribulation that would cause a god grief. The hands of time move with greater haste as my breath knows only a steady decrease. This insufficient oxygen results in constriction within my thorax. Strains in my cortex as I attempt to incript my final thoughts in a poetical format. Im confined beneath the surface, the weight of my burdens attempt to make me submit. I attempt to accelerate, only to decelerate at that very same instant. Pulled to deeper fathoms, the auroras that were once in reach begin to fade. The surrounding substances become darker and colder, as the pressure compresses my frame. My death is apparent, my soul on the verge of becoming lost, twenty thousand leagues under the Atlantic?s surface. Until the visions are interrupted by hands desperately retrieving my physical from the frenetic current.

if i made any grammatical and/or any flow errors as you said i did, how about pointing them out, you know. i want crit, not just replies telling me its good, i want to know what needs to be changed in order to get a whole rack of people to reply to this sh*t. peace

why is it that when someone says complex everyone else says 'big words'. i didnt say i was more complex then anyone here, and i dont think my knowing big words means im complex. what i mean by, if anyone here is complex enough for me, is by understanding this for what it means about my love for poetry and my ability to write and see things others cant. thats my definition of being complex. one

ok i guess i need work, i have yet to master the fighting in that game. im too used to games like the other final fantasies and xenogears. i mean it took me a long time to figure out the battle system in chrono cross. but yo ill work on this game. thanx for the help. one

cmon i cant even get replies here! stop sleeping UPPIN one

ive only seen one episod, so i dont know the song, but i thought the poem was good. i guess i cant really grasp the concept since i never saw that episod or heard the song. one

anybody here write hip hop lyrics or freestyle? im looking for some new competition, anybody here wanna battle? even if you dont wanna battle at least show me some of your songs/verses. One

in order to post here, does mine have to be like depressing, or the same mood you guys are feeling? if so here goes... something from a while ago, i guess it goes along with yours? maybe nt though, oh well. one why does my soul cry and yet my eyes don?t bleed tears? why is my heart afraid of everything and yet my mind knows no fears? why do i push people away and yet i crave attention more and more every second? why do my lungs fill with air and yet i always feel breathless? why do my eyes see and yet my emotions are blinded? why do i think constantly and yet im still so simple minded? why do i hear peoples' pleas for help and yet mine are never heard? why do i hate the thought of love and yet love is the thing for which i most yearn? why do i reach out my hand to others and yet no one reaches back? why do i know so much pain and yet the ability to heal i lack? why do i call out to god and yet god doesn?t reply? why do i continue living and yet inside i want to die? .....why?

anyone in here gotten past like the 4th or 5th fight in final fantasy tactics? i cant beat those stupid wizards or mages or whatever they are called. someone please help. One

hmmm, newcomer to this type of board, well i post on lyrical/freestyle boards, but never posted anything on a anime board. well lets see if you guys are complex enough for me, open up your 3rd 3y3 :freak: . I halt my speech to absorb my surroundings, Withdrawing inspiration and knowledge compounding Together those things one may consider insignificant objects, Looking past the exoskeleton, ignoring the conglomerate, Letting those things you neglect permeate into my soul, While neglecting those things the mainstream holds, Developing my syntactics, Manifesting my words into something those accepting simplicity would consider hazardous, Proceeding beyond the fleshy mold of life, Peering, strolling, residing within the marrow, broadening my sight, Overlooking horizons that the ignorant fail to stand upon, Falling in love with the things they cant see beyond The skyline, beyond the vast blue?s periphery, Beyond heaven and hell, beyond what they conceive, Beyond the physical image produced within the cornea, Beyond the joy of every breath and the glory of Existence, and every sunset that concludes another day, The beauty of night and the light the stars emit, like the light to which we pray, See I look beyond the bible, the words of God, and a physical image, Because God isn?t a single being, he is the aura of the world, he is the essence, he is what life is, I look beyond a sole structure, into the foundation, Look beyond those definitions of life you perceive, its more than a creation, Its a work of art exposed to all, old and young, boys and girls, I see it because, I am universal, therefore, I look beyond the simplicity of the world.