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ke thampi

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  1. real one, see face if it real face and eye(s) will glitttttter..........
  2. here our world is really lovable, pray our god is with us do the right things we are blessed very good people around us we have to do our own work that is our way of life smile, enjoy be.....:(
  3. [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by vegeta rocker [/i] [B]Well here are some recent ones, tell me what you think and as always be honest. I'm looking forward to your opinion, DarkOrderKnight. ILLUSION to dream as a child to conquer galaxies lying at the edge of the sand box to soar high above brushing through the clouds while piloting a swing with expert precision to hold the beauty of the crayola green earth in your hand behold Very nice to read such a poem with a vision of our future i want more from u email me [email]kethampi@hotmail.com[/email] to topple from the sand boxes false edge tangle up than fall from the clouds and bleed onto the green grass now growing blood stained petals Forgiveness am i to regret what i do not summon from myself would the fallen holders of wings see fit to discriminate all that they could never be may i bow my head set forth my tears as my shield and spread my wings Revelation on a mediocre day the bittersweet taste of victory is mute on my tongue such a day as this white hot lyrics scream through my imaginings gnash my teeth at onlookers at home in this pitiful filth of what i can only fathom as my hell and yet there is an infantile peace taking form within me perhaps the security of danmnation far surpasses the insecurity of existence [/B][/QUOTE]
  4. [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Lady Asphyxia [/i] [B][color=blue][size=1] I enjoyed the first one. For the second, I've a few suggestions. First of all, beautifully is the correct spelling. Two 'l's. Secondly, where it says "As you wrapped your arms around her, and kisses her on the cheek." It should be kissed, so that you stay in the same tense. Other than that, I thought it was great! As for the third one, I have no opinion of it. I thought it was good, though I'm not a big fan of freeform, seeing as so manythings can go wrong. I believe, however, that you managed them quite well. [/color][/size] [/B][/QUOTE] i want never to correct since lovely words are emotions of a poet he may find more lovely words again and again this is a open world for us never hesitate to write sincerely [email]kethampi@hotmail.com[/email]
  5. why i again with lovely feeling, i missed with ,some of .. thampi [email]kethampi@hotmail.com[/email]
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