Writing Just a poem

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I see her in the corner,
as small as she can be,
But when i want to hug her ,
she turns away from me,
her eyes are so cold and glassy,
and show no pain, or fear,
untill her eyes close,
and shed a single tear,
I take her by the hand,
and look into her eyes,
i hold her close to me,
and listen to her crys,
she whispers in my ear,
then slowly walks away,
how can i tell you?
She tried suicide today......

Plz leave me ur comments

[Phantom]

It reminds me of a phase my angel went through, and is still coping from. I remember being that person to hold her, and from the likes of the poem that is written above...It brings a frieghteningly vivid jolt of remembrance back in a rather hypnotic flash... Me no like the flash, but understand the words every single line that it splays...

[Sui Generis]

I think its great, and as it does remind me of times gone. Which makes it all the more better because it shows much feeling has been put in it. Again great poem...

[Kain]

Pretty good Bracelet.I haven't had any phase like that but I still think it's good.

[Boo]

very good.
I have not more to say about it than that.....

[Mitch]

[color=red] Very melancholy and reminicent. It also flows pretty well, but could better flow. It's wonderful though. I hope to see more of your work.[/color]