neoakira70 Posted November 7, 2002 Share Posted November 7, 2002 hi there i need help u all might think this is corny BUT i wanna write a poem for this girl i like, buts its harder than i originally thought this is what i got so far: You're as beautiful as the sky is blue, You infect my heart like a flu, My feelings for you are true, I wanna know if you feel the same too? Please help Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Devidramon Posted November 7, 2002 Share Posted November 7, 2002 I don't know how the 'flu' part would go over, I guess it depends on her. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest boogeta Posted November 16, 2002 Share Posted November 16, 2002 I have the same problem but that poem is prety good Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Boo Posted November 16, 2002 Share Posted November 16, 2002 "flu" indeed doesnt really fit that right to me.... You're as beautiful as the sky is blue, Everything I can think of is you, My feelings for you are true, But yet I dont know if you feel the same way too... ^my version... Not really good but thats how I wouldve dont it :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Death Posted November 17, 2002 Share Posted November 17, 2002 The poem is pretty good.:) This is how I would've revised it. I cannot help but admire you from afar You?re rare and beautiful like a shooting star You?re as beautiful as the sky is blue Your smile brightens my day Your beauty takes my breath away My mind is set on you My feelings for you are true I can?t help but think of you And I wonder if you feel the same way too Hope it helps :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neoakira70 Posted November 17, 2002 Author Share Posted November 17, 2002 thanks for all your help everyone, i'm sure she'll like it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neoakira70 Posted November 23, 2002 Author Share Posted November 23, 2002 results of the poem i well read her the poem and she just laughed at me, and then she tells me she has a bf and doesn't really like that b*tch oh well thanx 4 your help anyway Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mitch Posted November 24, 2002 Share Posted November 24, 2002 [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by neoakira70 [/i] [B]hi there i need help u all might think this is corny BUT i wanna write a poem for this girl i like, buts its harder than i originally thought this is what i got so far: You're as beautiful as the sky is blue, You infect my heart like a flu, My feelings for you are true, I wanna know if you feel the same too? Please help [/B][/QUOTE] [color=red] Well, even though you already read it, I'll give a shot.. [i]The sky glows true, and that is as you infectious climb it is so true that I would climb into thine sky fret out thy hearted regions even if I shall come back with not that I wanted to fact I would still have my heart held to you keeping thought of all turn to blue[/i][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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