Writing Beginning of Undying Truth Ch. 1

[PiccolosGirl]

Sorry it may be a little long but tell me what you think if you read it all. I'm a beginner in writing, I think, If I started last year does that qualify as a beginner?

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My name is Jolt, Jolt Lightning. I grew up in a small town, full of potheads, and gangs. The police never bother to clean up this filth; they know its just going to come back.
I live in an old run down apartment building right across the street from the local drug dealer. My mom always goes there about five times a day; she always brings back a new boyfriend and has it with him. Then five minutes later she?s got a new one. I never stay home, I?m always out in new places with my friends, Rad Keriso and Nekki Budd. Rad had dark red hair that came to his shoulders. He always dressed in spandex and blue shaded sunglasses.
Nekki always had her hair up, mostly in a pony tail with her little bangs hanging down from behind her ears. She always wore a see through over shirt and a black sports bra underneath. Her pants always went over her shoes and you could see her underwear. Sometimes she wore shorts that went over her knees that was only when she had to run.
My dad is in jail. I never visit him much. The only place worse smelling than the smell of the jail is when you go into a bar and stick your head in their garbage can full of dead rats and condoms.
My older brother is a different story. He told me he would stay by my side until I moved away, but all of a sudden he just left. He said he needed to find himself somewhere. Find a new life and start over. I never really understood him very much, but then I was only seven years old. Now I?m eleven years into the future, in a place where I suffer my own brother?s mistakes. I now live in the shadows of my heart with the truth hanging over me.
I?m in my room listing to my mom in the room next to me. I was looking out my window and I saw Rad and Nekki pass by. I ran downstairs and out the door to meet them. ?So, what you guys wanna get into?? I asked.
?We?re thinking about skipping town and just going to find our own ship and become space pirates.? Rad replied sarcastically.
?Sounds good.? I replied.
?You know I was joking right??
?Yeah, but there is nothing else to do so why not??
?Yeah, Jolt go get some clothes and food from your house and of course some money, and we can all go out and find our ship!? Nekki exclaimed.
?I?ll get some stuff from my house too.? Rad said and ran off down the street. Nekki went to her house also to get some things.
I went inside and snuck in mom?s room and stole her money and her boyfriends and I grabbed what was left of mine. I got some of my good clothes and just some worn out ones and rummaged for a backpack. I went downstairs and got a few things from the cabinets.
Outside Rad and Nekki were running to the bar across the street in order to pick pocket all the people.
I waited and they came out successfully with 5 wallets full of fifty dollar bills.
?What did you come up with?? Rad asked me.
?About a hundred and thirty bucks. What about you Nekki??
?About two hundred and then count all the wallets... A lot!?
?Now let?s go find our ship!? I exclaimed and ran off down the street.
That?s how it all started. I am now inside our very own XXG-20 space ship.
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So what do ya guys think?

[Makai Kite]

Looks good so far.