Writing A Banquet of Marionettes

[Makai Kite]

When she walked through the dark corridors
Of her very heart and soul,
Her eyes met with a gruesome sight--
Lifeless figures suspended by strings
That glittered like so many silver spiderwebs,
And a sorceress with raven hair and piercing red eyes.
As soon as the girl saw this sorceress,
She started for the door.
But the sorceress released strings from her hand
And trapped the girl in her web.
And so the girl became a marionette,
And the famished sorceress devoured her soon after,
So that she could never tell the world of the sight her eyes had met.

Responses, C&C, etc? Puh-LEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASEEEE?

[Silent Death]

To be honest I didn't really understand it all to well at first. But it's a nice little story though. All and all, it was nicely done.

[Makai Kite]

It wasn't supposed to make sense. I just felt like writing. In stories like that, I almost never name the characters, except for in the title (which is not the case here). I personally think it could have been better, but that's just me. I'm the perfectionist extraordinaire (TM)! Well, personally I think my writing style is improving and making it seem like I am even more disturbed than I truly am. Oh, and I like your sig lines. I've been debating whether to get those shirts myself. But you should know that it is:

Can't sleep, clowns will eat me...
over and over (about 5 times)

[Mina]

It was abit hard to understand, but I like it. Gives off an awesome feeling.

[Silent Death]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Kaiba's Angel [/i]
[B]Oh, and I like your sig lines. I've been debating whether to get those shirts myself. But you should know that it is:

Can't sleep, clowns will eat me...
over and over (about 5 times) [/B][/QUOTE]


I got them just to see how people would react to it. There one good one that says "How do you keep an idiot busy?... the answer's on the back" and the back of the shirt says the same thing. It kept my college professor busy for a couple minutes before he got it.

[Makai Kite]

I'm thinking of adding this to my sig...

"I've gone to find myself. If I come back before I return, please keep me here."

and

"I live in my own little world, but it's OK... they know me here."

My teachers loved the shirt that said this.