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Sing Me to Sleep


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Sing Me To Sleep


Sing me to sleep
like you used to
before
I learned that words
could hurt me
before
flinching became a
reaction to a hug
before
the stars were raped
by astrological maps
before
it took labor for a tree
to grow in a forest
before
you leave
sing me to sleep

This is a diffrent way for me to write, I don't usually focus on these kinds of emotions so tell me if it sucks.
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[color=crimson][size=1] Oh...my...goodness! That...that was awesome! I don't think I've ever read a poem that was that well and simply written. I really liked the title; it reeled me in from the beginning. I like how you laid everything on the table, and did it simply, and not making it fancy with big words. [b]Very[/b] good job! Winks![/color][/size]
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[color=red] It seemed so thought roving, I loved that. I liked how you just threw it all in our face, and made us decipher what it all meant. That I think is one of your better poems, VR. I'd stick with this type of style, and see how it grows. It may just be your thing.[/color]
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