darkfreak0304 Posted December 3, 2002 Share Posted December 3, 2002 Faithful Fighting bullets flyacross terror stricken air as chrilren of the same so called god murder and maim their brothers within a strife with no cause. Blasphemy, to atrocity, new scapegoats they formulate man made fires burn without reason killing those they should be holding keeping warm throughout their life. All in all their soulds darken, not knowing for what they fight crying out in their torement, searching for the bloody truth. Soldiers scream, falling to the bloody ground, "I am forsaken for killing, in this war which lies create." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vegeta rocker Posted December 4, 2002 Share Posted December 4, 2002 hmmmmmmm interesting no doubt. It gives a point and lays it right out on the table face up. If you want crit than lets see..... Spelling is the only thing that really screams out at me. I like it, at the risk of starting a debate, More people have been killed in the name of God than anything else. BTW Your sig question.....the dark blue night with the stars out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spikey Posted December 5, 2002 Share Posted December 5, 2002 Very intreging. But, you just need some grammer, and puctiuation corrections, and it will be great. Nice job. I love the meaning that it gives. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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