jupitersun Posted December 24, 2002 Share Posted December 24, 2002 ~*~LOVE~*~ Love is so confusing, Mixed emotions anger deception jealousy. Lost in your own world, Away from reality. The tenderness in his touch, The passion in his kiss. Makes your heart fall fool, Fall fool to lies untold. Your Feel Lost in a pit of confusion, Can't tell the truth from lies, can't tell true freinds from traitors. You are town between them, Wanting to Trust one but wanting to beleive the other. Suddenly your world crashes down around you, and it may never be the same, All because you loved him to the dpths of your heart...... What to you think I'm open to any criticism... ~*~ANGEL~*~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vegitto4 Posted December 25, 2002 Share Posted December 25, 2002 I would have ended it with " All because you loved..." Instead of the rest. I liked it. A little more sturcture to make it look better, and you have a damn good poem. Well done. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Boo Posted December 25, 2002 Share Posted December 25, 2002 Im not really into love poems, but it is quite good. I agree with Vegitto about the ending. But overall a very nice poem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sky Moonflow Posted December 28, 2002 Share Posted December 28, 2002 I say tis poem is true and is excellent. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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