Writing my poem "You and Me"

[chibi_kunoichi]

this poem is..well, was to tyler for valentines day but i came up with it around 4 days later so i never gave it to him, plus he didnt like me the way i liked him sooo... i was too nervous to give it to him even a year later so, this is it.

My heart melts
When I look at you.
It's how I feel,
But what can I do?

Your face so penetrating;
Your eyes so blue;
I love you 'cause you're sweet,
And 'cause you're the right height too.

Your smile so kind,
That, you can't deny.
My mind goes blank
When you pass me by.

If you don't like me,
How can that be?
We're the perfect match
Just you and me.

please dont take my poem without telling me cuz when i wrote this i woke up at around 2 am and all this just came to mind when i was thinking about him and thats how i used to feel.

you can find it at [url]http://www.poetry.com/Publications/display.asp?ID=P4164861&BN=999&PN=1[/url] but dont trust poetry.com, its all a scam. i cant get my poem off cuz i forgot my username and password:S

[p3rfuk3ed]

woah good poem, i really like it,
=)

[DKsAngel]

i like it, I think its a great poem.

[Spikey]

[SIZE=1]I like it. Just the pnctuation.[/size]

[chibi_kunoichi]

punctuation? u mean like spelling? i dont think there's any spelling errors. i know that the b in But isn't supposed to be capitalized but it looks more formal that way and the 'cause is slang for because (duh) and it sounds better than because. and i think that

Your smile so kind,
That, you can't deny.

should probably be

Your smile so kind;
That, you can't deny.

because the "that" is seperated from the kind and you so there's a pause before and after "that" u know like " your smile so kind, THAT, you can't deny" like he can't deny that his smile is kind. but thanks for the critique, i have a friend that loves to critique stuff so thanks for it:P anybody else wanna critique?