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Ok this is a school assignment, we had to make a poem for our English class and I know its not good but bear with me here. Just wanted to know if you think it'd be ok. Like if I would get a decent grade...The requirements were it had to be associated to school, and it had to be exacatly 20 lines long...so here goes nothing...

"Physical Education 101"

The sweat trickling down your back
The whistle blowing in your ear
The kids around you gasping for breath
and some even shedding a simple tear

"Welcome to P.E," the man shouts
"I know you feel like you're about to collapse"
"But don't worry you'll be fine."
"Now go on, twenty more laps"

The seconds tick by slow as an hour,
As you run around the basketball court
Finally you finish your teacherouse journey
Only to find out, there is more of that sort

Fifty push-ups one-hundred cruches!
Slowly you do them, one by one.
Forty-eight, forty-nine
Fifty, you're finally done.

Now its time to pick the teams!
You look around and you're the last one.
Bumps and bruises are the prizes for this game,
And to think some peopls said PE was fun....


Ok I know its not the greatest, did it in about oh 10 minutes...uhm....suggestions...I know its ify
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pretty good

if i wrote a poem about PE

it would be too enappropriet for the boards or school even

Hehe

Not bad...

but thats my poetry champion speaking.... *sigh*

School turned me into a wuss.... teacher thought i was the best for the sort... so she signed me up for the poetry competition thing along with my team mate ... but he dident do much... i got the award mostly by myself...

I try to forget the horror of it all

But oh well

Thats pretty good..

I dotn do powems that ryhme though... to odd for me... i dont feel comfortable doing them....

but this is pretty good for someone who hasent... written poetry much.... as i susspect anyways
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[color=skyblue] Bryuo, I believe thats one of the most truthful poems I've ever heard in my life. I love it. ^_^ My only criticism is that you could work a bit more at getting it more in time... some lines seem too long; some too short. And that you need to use spell check. :bluesweat Just stuff that's simple to correct. ^^;
Aight. I'm done.

*Burns her PE teacher, then walks off* [/color]
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