Writing More poxy lyrics...

[Jesus Chicken]

yeah, I think, Thursday night I wrote another song. Not so much about a girl this time, (which is quite an achievement for me)
I don't think this song is as bad as the last one I wrote was, but let's just see what ye thinks.

Ok hare we go... The name hasn;t got a set title yet, bt so far its called:
Lost at Sea(dodgy I know)

A kiss to the page,
all backs to the wall,
trynna see through the haze,
trynna get a clear view of it all,

I wish I knew where I was,
wish I knew where I'd been,
wish you were here with me,
cause I wanna know who I've seen,

(chorus)
yeahhea, jost rockin' out yesterday,
yeahhea, why dont you wanna come to play?
yeahhea, just rockin' out yesterday,
yeahhea, yeahhea
(end chorus)

C'mon and give it up,
let me see the goods,
I know the zip's not stuck,
I can see through this wood,

I know you're right there,
I'm staring into your eyes,
your mess of blue-black hair,
and disenchanted lies

(chorus x2)
(instrumentaly thingy-ma-joo)
(chorus *2)
END

So yeah, any feedback would be cool!

[The Harlequin]

[font=gothic][color=crimson]Wasn't as poxy as the last lot. Actually, it's not that bad. Another verse might have helped though.

Speaking of music and such, we need to tie Dave to a tree.[/font][/color]