Writing Gundam U.C.: Pheniox from the Ashes

[Tigervx]

[SIZE=1][COLOR=teal] I got bored, alright?
It is the year U.C. 84, the Delaz fleet rebellion was stomped out, but a new battle already arises.
?Space, will we ever see it all?? Captain Hanim said to himself aboard the Pegasus class ship Alabastor. He peered out of the window of the bridge to see the earth?s 27th orbital fleet. His fleet was at least 30 Salamis class cruisers, 10 Magellan class battleships, and another 10 Pegasus ships. Also, the 54th earth orbital fleet flanked them, making a total of nearly 110 ships. A Public class ship zoomed by the bridge, welding something on. ?What are they doing?? Hanim asked in curiosity. ?They?re welding on extra armor sir, just incase we are ambushed, it?s not like we?re carrying your average supplies? responded an ensign in the comm seat. True, for they were carrying reconstructions of the three most destructive machines ever created. They were transferring the Big Zam, Apsaras mobile armors, and GP02A Gundam Physalis. They were being sent to the newly formed Titans group to help them. They all had enough destructive power to level any Zeon resistance, which is what they were reconstructed for. Even though the Zeon Delaz fleet had been defeated, there were many other Zeon fleets out there. Suddenly, an ensign at the sensors station shouted, ?Sir! The Public class ships are leaving the sector!? Hanim was puzzled ?Why would they leave the sector?? ?Alright, launch the Gm scout team A!?

?They?re launching a scout team, confirmed three GMs heading this way. Should we begin?? asked a pilot of the lead Public class. ?Not yet, we have to wait until the order comes? said the pilot. ?They?re opening a channel!? A GM pilot popped up on the monitor. ?Attention Public class ships please explain your actions against the route to A Baoa Qu, please turn back.? ?Never! ZEON SHALL RISE AGAIN!?

Hanim was shocked at what the pilot just said, ?Scout team! Get out of there!? But it was too late, two Zakus swooped in from out of nowhere. One fired out a bazooka and blasted the command GM into bits, while the other rushed the second GM and smashed the cockpit open with his heat hawk. The last Gm attempted to open fire, but another missile impacted on the chest, designating and exploding the suit. Suddenly, huge explosions erupted from ever end of the ships. Outside the window, the same thing was happening. Hanim cursed wildly, ?WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON!?? The ensign screamed, ?The Public classes must have been Zeon! They must have planted explo-? A explosion exploded right next to the bridge, starting a chain reaction destroying the entire bridge section of the ship.


Edit: Sigh, I give up. I would have kept going if people actually LOOKED at my thread. But I'm not cut out to be a writer i guess. Someone just close the thread.









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[Hittokiri Zero]

hey man my adivce dont post gundam fanfics here i wrote up 2 and got minimal feedback. -_-'. Everyone here seems to go for those silly digimon fanfics =X.

Anyway, it's a good start but you should decide now whetehr your gonna focus on the characters or the battles, from what i've seen you should focus more on the battles cuz i havent seen much character development as of yet =P.

[Tigervx]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Hittokiri Zero [/i]
[B]hey man my adivce dont post gundam fanfics here i wrote up 2 and got minimal feedback. -_-'. Everyone here seems to go for those silly digimon fanfics =X.

Anyway, it's a good start but you should decide now whetehr your gonna focus on the characters or the battles, from what i've seen you should focus more on the battles cuz i havent seen much character development as of yet =P. [/B][/QUOTE]

[SIZE=1][COLOR=teal] Ya, I was going to in the next chapter, but there is minimal feedback :p. Not many gundam fans on the Otaku :(. But anyways, I do just see a buncha digimon fanfics around here. Eh, oh well. Maybe when people see the light of gundam! *Runs away from rotten fruit bombardment from digimon fans.*
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