Writing Tribute Thread

[vegeta rocker]

This is one of infinite sadness. It goes to all the people who treat me like the dirt i am.

Crushing Wave of Sorrow

i dive into my
sadness
and slowly sink
towards the inner
darkness

the ripples of
lonliness begin
to subside above me
and

shatter the surface
into a kaliedescope
of my torn
thoughts

ascending into the
ocean
brooding images
of rain drenched eyes

choke the watery
grave of countless
hearts

lamenting over
stolen memories

serves only
to squeeze free
the last drops
of my soul

swimming alone
and purging
my lungs of useless air

sends a wave
of forgotten
dreams and
stolen thoughts

in a whirlpool
that sends a
cascading wave
of sorrow

over the earth
in what looks
like teardrops

[KittyLynn]

That is the best poem I have ever read. I mean it. It is so beautiful, I'm sorry you were heart.

Sometimes the most painful things, inspire the most beautiful.

[Boo]

thats very deep and touching. I could not rate this with any rating for that is the only thing I can say about it.
You cannot rate a poem like this, for its from the heart. It cant be good or bad.

[vegeta rocker]

Well, thanks. I tried to go with the whole water thing as you might have guesses. And your're right, the most painful things inspire the most beautiful. It's a price you have to pay.

[Mitch]

[color=red] As always, you show a nice talent. your poetry's enjambment (stopping in between lines onto another) really makes it feel like the poem is quite alive as it moves along. I like that, it makes it have a flow of its own and makes it seem sort of wandering and thought-moving and provoking.

Also, you used lots of prepositions to begin new lines, which gave it a narrative, and, yet again, a moving feeling. Some substance.

So I think this is now one my my favorite works of yours, and I hope to see more.[/color]

[vegeta rocker]

Stay


Please stay near me
and protect me from
the cruel hell that
awaits

promise never to
leave my side
even for an istant

all i want
is to be safe
from evil

your mere
prescence allows
me to sleep

forgetting a pain
that never seems to
seek out a new soul

so please just
for a second

stay here
and protect me
from myself