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Anarchy (the poem)


Sere Tuscumbia
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I've got a story also, but this is the poem that I wrote for school.

[center][COLOR=skyblue]A[/COLOR][COLOR=royalblue]n[/COLOR][COLOR=blue]a[/COLOR][COLOR=blue]r[/COLOR][COLOR=darkblue]c[/COLOR][COLOR=orange]h[/COLOR][COLOR=orangered]y[/COLOR]

[COLOR=crimson]By the way, I saw you[/COLOR]
[COLOR=red]Comin' 'round the corner.[/COLOR]
[COLOR=firebrick]Day or night, you're[/COLOR]
[COLOR=darkred]Everywhere to me.[/COLOR]
[COLOR=green]Fight or flee[/COLOR]
[COLOR=limegreen]Gee, what an idea.[/COLOR]
[COLOR=seagreen]Hark the herald angels sing?[/COLOR]
[COLOR=deeppink]I just don't get this![/COLOR]
[COLOR=tomato]Just a hint: make someone's day; a little[/COLOR]
[COLOR=coral]Kiss wouldn't hurt.[/COLOR]
[COLOR=purple]Love yourself[/COLOR]
[COLOR=indigo]Make a choir sing.[/COLOR]
[COLOR=burlywood]No? Well, that's alright, I'm[/COLOR]
[COLOR=sandybrown]Open to ideas.[/COLOR]
[COLOR=sienna]Please don't forget to mind your Ps and[/COLOR]
[COLOR=chocolate]Qs.[/COLOR]
[COLOR=teal]Restrictions are what you make 'em[/COLOR]
[COLOR=skyblue]So what? Get a clue.[/COLOR]
[COLOR=royalblue]Talk all you want, I'm not listening[/COLOR]
[COLOR=blue]Understand what I'm saying?[/COLOR]
[COLOR=darkblue]Visionaries are crazy people[/COLOR]
[COLOR=orange]What? I can't hear you![/COLOR]
[COLOR=orangered]X-mas time's a comin', Christmas time's a comin'[/COLOR]
[COLOR=crimson]Yo! Enough with the caroling![/COLOR]
[COLOR=red]Zoom, zoom . . .[/COLOR][/center]

*~*~~``

Complete chaos. R&R, please?

--Mistress Sere Tuscumbia
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I like it...the colorfull dignity of it makes me feel all warm and fuzzy in the way you described a condition that is not concievable to the human being...

Anarchy, which we love to beleive is ideal, well it is but is definately unatainable by such an influctual being such as us...mortal humans... heh.

Chewtoys for the gods above....

However enlightening..It drives me insane... Much like anything else I would take for granted. Thank you for this compelling trip to the limits of our capacity... Enjoyable poetry is what I yearn for...especially when in scrutiny for my Angel.... Good luck with your future undertakings.
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[color=red] I didn't like that it was kind of...[i]unfocused[/i], yeah. But that's the way anarchy is, so I suppose that's the way the poem in turn decided to grow in your mind like. This poem is quite unique, I haven't read anything up to par with it in awhile, so it was a crazy, fast ride for me. But I didn't like those last three lines:
[quote]X-mas time's a comin', Christmas time's a comin'
Yo! Enough with the caroling!
Zoom, zoom . . .[/quote]

It seemed kind of out of nowhere for the context and the whole tone the poem had made up to that point. But, ah well, don't mind me there.

So, all for all, it is a unique poem, weird in places, jumbled all about. But it wasn't too bad. 7.5/10. :)[/color]
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