Writing My love...

[The One]

[color=darkred]Well, it's been a long time since I've written a poem. I'd like to shift the blame by saying I haven't had the time, but I've just been avoiding the paper and pencil. I suppose I'm a little afraid of how my emotions come out on paper, or of my emotions coming out at all. I prefer to keep them bottled up, I won't get hurt that way.

Anyway, this is a poem I wrote for Valentines day, for a particular girl that I've liked for a long time now, and I just can't bring myself to tell her, though I think she alredy knows. She asked me to send her a valentine's card, she likes getting them apparently, and I said that I would. Not only that I said I would write a poem. Me and my big mouth.

This is my effort at putting my feelings into something that resembles a poem:

[i]You will never know how much I care
My feelings I shall never bare
To you nor to anyone else
They are mine to keep, myself.

Word cannot describe my love
My feelings stay caged, unlike doves
For life is so much more complex
Than any language can reflect.[/i]

Assonance(sp?) in parts, some of you might know what it means, some might not.[/color]

[vegeta rocker]

The repetition of identical or similar vowel sounds, especially in stressed syllables, with changes in the intervening consonants......yeah.....thats asonance from the dictionary.....for me its.....lines that rhyme.

Well i like it, its simple short and to the point. That doesn't always work out for poetry but it works fine for yours.

[Mitch]

[color=red] It's pretty good. Short, sweet, succint. It stays with me like a ghost, and grows from the short end of the entirety of the poem into something more. It flows pretty well with the rhyming and all, and the shortness doesn't hurt it as in most cases it would. Good job. [i]More...more..more..[/i][/color]