Booboo Posted February 15, 2003 Share Posted February 15, 2003 Like The Ocean ---------------- Like the mist, wispers of lonelyness brush my face, Like the wave, we had some rough and bumpy times, Like the seagull flying away, your ignorance of love drove me away, Like the salty water, the love we had was unwanted, Like the the waves crashing against the rocks, you held others in your arms, Like the ocean, you made our love cold and blue. Yet like the shark, your too blind to see. ------------------ Well I hope you enjoyed it, tell me what you think of it. Bounce Out. :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vegeta rocker Posted February 18, 2003 Share Posted February 18, 2003 you really should add more to it theres nothing inherently wrong with it but it would give more to comment on like blind like the shark elaborate, blind in what way? The way of emotion....and so on Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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