Writing My First Rhyming Poem

[Booboo]

This Plan


These damn wheels
Are driving me insane
The sound of them spinning
Always the same

You ripped my heart out
And left me here to die
With all your running around
And all your lies

You always knew the right things to say
You always made me belive
It kept me here another day
Another day you would decive

I want to get out
This place is a living Hell
It's like being in Alcatraz
Locked up in a dirty cell

I'm on my way
Out of town
I'm thinking about
Turning around

Thoughts of you
Running through my head
Those 3 little words
I never wished I said

I turn up the radio
To drown you out
But your all I ever think about
There is no dout

Everything I see
Reminds me of you
You control my mind
There's nothing I can do

Making me feel sad
Is you drug
It makes you feel good
And you can never get enough

You always thought I'd never leave
Sometimes I'd feel that way too
But you can wait for me forever
Cuz I'm carrying this plan through.
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Tell me what you guys think about it.

[Tasrai]

[COLOR=green]I think it's good for your first ryming(O.K.,O.K. I can't spell) poem. I personally liked it ^_^! Though it could lose the cuss words :D Yes, I am a goody goody. Anyways write somemore, don't get discouraged you'll get better as you go along, trust me;) [/COLOR]

[Booboo]

Ye the reason I put cuss words in there because the feeling of the peom is supposed to be mad, angry, and sad so thats why there are in it.

[Darkmoon]

I like it. It's pretty good. I did get the impresion that there was anger and sadness of a sort in here.

You got any more poems hidden up your sleeve? If ya do then put 'em up. If ya don't then keep on righting. You'll only just get better ^^

[Booboo]

Yea, I have more poems Darkmoon, 2 of them I post earlier if you wanna go find them in the fourm.