nichire Posted March 10, 2003 Share Posted March 10, 2003 This is a song I wrote around x-mas time for a boy who treats me like a little sister It's kinda death metel Pretty boy walks rite thu the naive girl that he once knew boy if you could only see all the **** you do to me she sees a smiles on his lips she traces it iwth her finger tips now she crys herself to sleep pray that boy her soul to keep hold me down and chain my arms bite my neck harder than before I'll protect you from harm slit my writs and shut the door I just wanna be alone with you Control me, beat me, mistreat me you own me for eternity I just wanna **** around with you our blood mixed together creating perfect cemistry now she sits there all alone and she wonders when you're coming home boy if you only knew all the **** she does for you hold me down and chain my arms bite my neck harder than before I'll protect you from harm slit my writs and shut the door I just wanna be alone with you Control me, beat me, mistreat me you own me for eternity I just wanna **** around with you our blood mixed together creating perfect cemistry CRY! she begins to weep... DIE! just make sure you cut me deep I just wanna be alone with you Control me, beat me, mistreat me you own me for eternity I just wanna **** around with you our blood mixed together creating perfect cemistry hold me down and chain my arms bite my neck harder than before I'll protect you from harm slit my writs and shut the door I just wanna be alone with you Control me, beat me, mistreat me you own me for eternity I just wanna **** around with you our blood mixed together creating perfect cemistry our blood mixed together creating perfect cemistry yes i know there's speeling mistakes....... ~nichi Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
zerocrisis Posted March 14, 2003 Share Posted March 14, 2003 i love this poem but i hope its not real cuz then i would be sad i dont like when girls are sad Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nichire Posted March 14, 2003 Author Share Posted March 14, 2003 more or less it's true, a lot is used in metaphor that only i understand... well kinda... this was written in dec so, my opinions have changed since then but who it was written about still means that much to me, even tho he will never know btw, i really like the poem! it would make for so good lyrics! *needs a band....and a bass...* Keep up the writing! ~nichi Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lady Asphyxia Posted March 15, 2003 Share Posted March 15, 2003 [size=1][color=darkred]One word comes to mind; masochistic. Okay, yes, there is probably a lot of metaphor there, for instance in the cutting, but it sounds [at least, the impression I get] like you're begging him to hurt you. Look after the spelling, [that's what spell-check is for], and try to use punctuation. Otheriwse, keep up the writing.[/size][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nichire Posted March 16, 2003 Author Share Posted March 16, 2003 i really should start to use some puntuation... agreed But I really can't spell, and some spelling i just prefer it that way. The song is a bit of s&m tho isn't it?... but what's wrong with that! lol ~nichi Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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