Writing No feeling....

[Talon]

[color=teal]She tore my heart out, left me to die.
But I got up, as if Nature to defy.
I shook myself off, looked to the air,
And discovered that feeling was no longer there.

Stone cold, then warm, then rocky again,
My heart's emotions no longer will bend.
One thing races through my mind, driving me mad.
"Become the best and strongest so that you'll never be had."

Everyday, I fight a battle, growing strong yet falling weak.
As if missing something I don't even bother to seek.
I shake it off, reach up to the sun,
And grab a part of what belongs to this fallen one.

No more remorse, only cold, hard truth.
I've killed you, foully uncouth.
No more feeling, my heart is dead.
Goodbye world, fight in my stead.[/color]

[Tsukasa/Squall]

I like it here's mine.
Why did you leave me?
Fighting for what saw supposed to be a future for me and you.
Holding back afraid of what might happen.
My breath turns cold.
My sky turns black.
But you don't see me suffer.
You look back then walk out of my life forever.
My breath turns cold.
My sky turns black.
But you don't see me suffer.
You never come back.

[Tasrai]

[SIZE=1][FONT=arial][COLOR=green]Wow! I loved it Etarah, that was awesome!!! You always trap my attention and kept it there until the poem's over, you have strong messages and phrases but gentle and flowing lines with a excellent beat. Keep writing you can go places with your poems.

~Raiye[/SIZE][/COLOR][/FONT]

[vegeta rocker]

I enjoyed it very much. When i read it i think of you lying on the ground just tired and exhausted. Then in a last attempt at getting a grip on the world, grabbing at the air. Not saying you did, but thats how i pictured it.
Very nice. And to Tsukasa/squall i look forward to seeing you start a poem thread of your own.

[Talon]

[color=teal]Actually, VR, proverbially, that's what I did. I was falling into a pit within myself, and I tried with one final effort, tried to get back to what I used to be. I failed, and instead climbed out missing something very important within myself. I do't know what I'm missing, but I know that something is gone....[/color]