Writing 2 New Poems

[Biida]

[color=skyblue][b][u]Rain[/b][/u]

Tiny droplets, falling freely.
From the sky, into my life.
Cascading all about my open arms.
Decorating my cheeks, my eyelashes, my smile,
With tiny pearls of beauty.

Walking along in the green spring grass,
Those tiny drops still falling.
I smile,
The water caressing me.

The sound of each droplet,
Hitting its mark,
It's music to my ears.

The sensation of each one
Pressing against my flesh,
A cool feeling of relief and pleasure.

Thunder,
The sound of a father's booming, loving laughter.

Lightning, The figures of children
Dancing in the sky.

The wind,
A mother's loving whisper,
As she coos her baby to sleep.

Tiny droplets, falling freely.
From the sky, into my life.
Cascading all about my open arms.
Decorating my soul, my heart,
My smile.

~~~

[b][u]A Lamentation of Time and Loss[/u][/b]

Yet this I call to mind,
As the walls collapse around me.
In the joys of times past,
In the joys of times lost.
Where were you?

On, he who holds my heart,
When the fires and the roses fell,
When my children died and the black cloud of death covered the land.
Where were you?

Oh, he who holds my heart,
Where were you when the flowers bloomed,
And the land prospered,
And the harvests came a plenty?

Oh, he who holds my heart,
Here you stand, a wild horse watching from a distance,
A mourner in black, grieving for the children you never knew.
Before you whisk yourself off once again,
Into the mist and the dawn of a new day, a new life.

And this I call to mind,
As the sun sets on an old day:
Oh, he who holds my heard,
Oh, father of my children,
My lover, my life,
Where are you?

~~~

C&C is more than welcome. :)[/color]

[Braidless Baka]

The first one reminds me of some Dinsey song... what was it... "Drip drip drop little April showers..." *starts humming it* I think it was from Bambi or something O_o Neeways that one was nice, kinda mellow, even though it's describing a storm... And "time and Loss" is very thought-provoking. Nice, very nice indeed ^_^

[KittyLynn]

[COLOR=deeppink]I liked them a lot! :) Awsome. Really!! But thet weren't your best. I have heard better from you. :) Wanting to hear more, Me[/COLOR]

[Mitch]

[color=black][size=1] [font=rockwell] Melancholy is a wonderful emotion. It is indeed. They seem like they could be songs it seems. The way they are written sort of conveys that to me. You have talent, as always. Good job.[/color][/font][/size]

[Tsukasa/Squall]

I like the first one it made me feel happy.The second one whoa.That one was deep.But I love them both.

[Juu]

[color=ff00cc] [size=1]The first one was my favorite. ^_^

You're very talented, Britty. Your poem sounded really, really nice, even when it didn't rhyme. ^^

*hands you a lolli*[/color] [/size]