Writing a poem

[Guest darkrequiemX99]

this is a poem i made in my free time.i making this up as i go so bear with me.

pale shades of grey fills his face
he always walks everyday
to the same place
only walking one way

he always stares at the ground
muttering that hes bound
to an evil demented soul
he doesnt seem real he looks like a doll

police suspect he is a drug addict
he isnt but they suspect
they ask him questions
his name is Bestion

he pulls out a gun
he shoots one down
hes on the run
with his hand on the gun

he goes to his masters house
he locks the doors
he wont come out

the cops dont care
they break in
theres a man in his underwear
bleeding to death
hanging by chains

Bestion says meet Daddy
Daddy viciously tears Lt.Saddy
the cops run and Bestion leaves
quietly laughing but eagerly pleased

[Eve]

wow!!!
thats really good
i'm try'n to write a
poem but i'm lost ^.^
what will you do next?=)

[darkrequeimX98]

thank you!oh yeah i got banned because i offended some dungeons and dragonds people.sorry again!thus i changed my name to darkrequiemX98!original isnt it?anyways i was lost too so i pretty much just wrote things down that kinda rhymed but made little or no sense.i dunno what i'll do next.

[Vicky]

That well better than any poem that I can write! I tried to write one, but it was rubish! can you help?

[Sara]

[size=1]People aren't banned pointlessly here. Watch your step.

COuld be better, could be worse. You said you were just writing [i]things down that kinda rhymed but made little or no sense[/i], so I won't get technical on you. ^_~[/size]