Writing The howler.

[Vicky]

I have not really finshed the howler. I have to warn you,
!!!WARNING!!!THIS STORY MAY STARE THE PANTS OFF YOU!!!IF YOU HAVE WET THE BED BEFORE...MAKE SHORE YOU WERE A NAPPY!!!:demon:

I'm rad. I have a story or tale about a creature called the holwer, that you should know to prepeare you for the horrible terror!!! Well, listen hard! 'COS this tale will be told only once!...

On earth ther was a legand that ever one feared. The legand says that years ago there was a powerful demon called the howler, that killed everone in his path. But one day a champion arose from the temple and silled the demon in the temple were he came from. But the howler sour that a champion like him set foot in the temple he would arise! But I a couldn't worry about this legand. My parents said that I could chose our holiday this year! And I wanted to go to the temple, to see the howler! So I went to my parents room. I headed up the stairs and when i arived at my parents room my dad looked at me and said "So, were do you want to go this year, wales?" I looked at him and said "ER..can we go to the temple?"
"ABSOLUTELY NOT!!!" He yelled.
"Well then! THAT IT! ME AND YOU...IT'S OVER! I'LL NEVER SPEAK TO YOU AGAIN!" I said. I knew it would work! It would always work!
"NO,,,,er..FINE! WE'll go! But you will do as I say all week! OK?" He said. I walked up to him and shuck his hand and said
"ITS A DONE DEAL!" But I would do anything to take that back...I would do anything to stay away from the temple, if i knew what terror would be waiting for me. Find out what beholds me on the next chapter of the howler!!!

I figured it was really easy to get my parents to go! Can you belive how quick it was??? I began to pack my stuff, i had ever thing! My camera, snacks, a hand TV and all my clothes. The only thing i didn't have was protection. What if there was killer bees or lion??? But i couldn't worry. I was on a island in the middle of the ocaen. I was just finshing stuffing my clothes into my case, when someone called up "Rad! Come on it's time to go!" I rushed down the stairs. I got in the car and my dad said "I really don't see the point in going!" He looked worried.Why was he so worked up??? I only whanted to SEE the temple. When we got to the air port, i looked at my dad. He looked really worried. When we got on the plane, i fell asleep. But after a few hours, my mum woke me up. She had spillt a glass of coke on my lap. She said sorry and wiped it off me. I felt coled on the plane. My dad picked up a small handkerchief and wiped the sweat off his face.:( I sat up the rest of the jornuy. When we arrived, the hole island was misty. I was miststerously strange.

[Lady Asphyxia]

[color=darkred][size=1]Okay. Well. First of all; spelling, punctuation, grammar. Work on them. For instance:[/color][/size]

I'm [color=red]R[/color]ad. I have a story or tale [color=red][Or tale? You're telling it! Decide!][/color] about a creature called [color=red]T[/color]he [color=red]H[/color]olwer, that you should know to [color=red]prepare[/color] you for the horrible terror! Well, listen hard! [color=red]'Cause[/color] this tale will be told only once..

On earth [color=red]there[/color] was a [color=red]legend[/color] that [color=red]everyone[/color] feared. The [color=red]legend[/color] says that [color=red][Actually, it would be better put The legend says this: "Blah blah blah."][/color] years ago there was a powerful demon called [color=red]T[/color]he [color=red]H[/color]owler, that killed [color=red]everyone[/color] in his path. But one day[color=red],[/color] a champion arose from [color=red]T[/color]he [color=red]T[/color]emple [color=red][I'm assuming that it's the name of the place, seeing as you always refer to it as "The Temple"][/color] and [color=red]k[/color]illed the demon in [color=red]T[/color]he [color=red]T[/color]emple [color=red]where[/color] he came from [color=red][Where [i]who[/i] came from?][/color] . But [color=red][Not even going to bother. You already know it should be "The Howler" -.-][/color] the howler sour[color=red][Sour? Saw? Said?][/color]

[color=darkred][size=1]You should see the formatting. Please, [i]please[/i] use [i]something[/i] to check the spelling, and pucntuation!

You need to be able to spell and punctuate, and grammar would help. For goodness sake.[/color][/size]

[Vicky]

Soz. And any way, it my first time writer this story! There a load of info, plus I'm a krap speller! And were you put 'cause my story is informal and 'cos would look a lot better. But thanks for filling me in on my mistakes, would you please help me write the other parts of the story? I think we would be a great pair for writing storys.

Here the better 2nd chapter...

I walked with my parents to the hotel. A small old guy was waiting for us. "Or, yes! You booked a room I belive!" My dad nodded his head. "Please come this way. I will show to your rooms." We followed the guy until he stopped. "Here. This is your room." He said to me.
"No way! I get my own room!" I dived though the door. I looked around at the moldy room. I was not very inpressed! I unpacked my stuff. I didn't bother to but them in the draw, I just laded them on the bed.

I have to go. I will do the rest later.

I looked about for a while. I was so boreing! But tomormw were where gonna go to the temple! I peared out side my room. There was a long hall way. I went out side my room and went for a tour by myself. I walked down the long hall way. I came to a door at the end. It was open a bit. I peared inside the door. There was a cheast there. I slowly walked to it. I noticed a small hand print on it.
"Whooa! That way cool!" I saw the hand print glow. Without any other thoughts, I placed my hand over the print. I felt a stronge ray of light blow my black hair to one side. I closed my eyes as the light got stronger. When the light cleared, I opened my eyes to find the cheast open.
"What...happen.??" I asked myself. I saw three gold spheres in the cheast. One had a small red light in it, one had a blue light in it and the other had a green light. I like them. They looked like a nice preasent for one of my friends. I picked them out of the cheast, one by one. As I picked out the last one, the cheast shut...
I ran out and back to my room. I took out the spheres and put them on the table. I walked to the window and peered outside. I could see the tip of The Temple. I stared at it. I had asked my dad over and over to go today, but he refused. I dicided to go by myself. I picked up the spheres and got the covers off the bed and made a rope. I hung the rope out of the wiondow and climbed down. I carefully placed my hands on the ground and shot off though the trees. I ran swiftly though the jungle and came to a sign. The sign read;
'Temple straight ahead'. I ran straight into the deepths of the jungle. I crossed over the leaves. I gained speed. I ran faster and faster. I then felt my feet come off the ground. I fell flat on my face. I got back up and kept running. I was nearly there!

[Mitch]

[color=black][size=1][font=rockwell] [i][b]Quit[/b][/i] double posting; I've already sent you a PM warning you of this. Instead, simply click the 'edit' button located near the bottom of your first post.

I'm not going to warn you again.[/color][/size][/font]

[Vicky]

Sorry. I don't really know about double posting.

[Mitch]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by vicky [/i]
[B]Sorry. I don't really know about double posting. [/B][/QUOTE]

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[color=black][size=1][font=rockwell] Double posting is [i]exactly[/i] what it sounds like. It's posting twice in a row, without any other member posting in between. Is it that hard? All you have to do is simply click the 'edit' button in the lower right hand corner of your post before and simply add it, then submit the edited post.[/color][/size][/font]