DarK DeatH Posted May 14, 2003 Share Posted May 14, 2003 OK, ok... Here is something that a friend of mine has made, and I thought it was amazing, so take a look at it... -- Watch the blood run down the knife Steely puddles on the floor Watch the tears well up inside And splatter down just like before Screams that shatter corrupted souls Pain twisting the being within Acidic words corroding the mind Slicing it down to nerve endings so thin Riddles that have not an answer Questions that never should have been asked They kill you like a pointless cancer And bury you in the glory you basked But when the day's all over and done You find that the darkness closes in You find the game cannot be won And trying to is now a sin The task is now regaining control And getting back what once was yours Your mind and soul, need be a whole And closing the world out with those doors For once the mind and body are one You'll be able to relish sanity The guilt on you should weigh a ton For all of that profanity Upon that other being you bestowed Your angry wrath, your senseless hurt That simple message you did encode Into insults that you did blurt Without thinking of the consequences And now you're stuck for life Bound by the decisions that you made Watch the blood run down the knife Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DarK DeatH Posted May 18, 2003 Author Share Posted May 18, 2003 OK, I'm very sorry for the double posting, but this is just for bumping... I mean, do no one have anything to say about this? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Decadence Posted May 18, 2003 Share Posted May 18, 2003 i think it is very good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaola Su Posted May 19, 2003 Share Posted May 19, 2003 Hiya, I like it! I told you I would find some of yours to reply to! But, yeah I totally like your poem. A little demented kinda, but not in a bad way. I love the rhyming in it, you did a very good job with this! I don't know if you like ratings, but I give them anyways, so here is what I think... 9/10, only b/c I am not feeling the subject Keep it up, I would like to read more! I am glad I told you I would read some of your posts, I really enjoyed reading that! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kitsune_Girl Posted May 19, 2003 Share Posted May 19, 2003 ..........That was....good. 10/10 I can understand what your friend is talking about... It kinda reminds me of a Linkin Park song though... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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