Shinken Posted May 19, 2003 Share Posted May 19, 2003 This is my first haiku, so, here it goes... *inhales* To see love elsewhere, A painful experience, May be for better. *whoo* So, whaddya think? Hitokiri Battosai Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epitome Posted May 19, 2003 Share Posted May 19, 2003 I like it. Has alot of emotion in the words. I can see it in your eyes or ......uh.......hear it in thw words. lol. :) But I like it. Post some more when you write some. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LostProphet Posted May 19, 2003 Share Posted May 19, 2003 hmmm....thats pretty good for a first. I'm dont really write Haiku, so it's not too big a deal for me however. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaola Su Posted May 20, 2003 Share Posted May 20, 2003 I agree with Agatio a lot for this Haiku, I can feel the emotion in your words! I give it 8/10, I just don't know what it is, it really isn't that interesting to me, not to say I don't like it b/c I do like it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Corey Posted May 20, 2003 Share Posted May 20, 2003 Let's see.... I do like the Haiku, so please don't take the following statement the wrong way. Traditionally, Haiku's are not written about love, metaphorical items, religion, or anything else that could be considered human. Usually Haiku's are written about nature or about natural things. Such as: [center]The wind blows harshly Whipping the clouds into a Cone of destruction[/center] A tornado if you haven't already guessed. Just a brief lesson in history. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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