zerocrisis Posted May 20, 2003 Share Posted May 20, 2003 Ok i had another poetry section but they took it off :( so now im starting a new one and im inviting everyone 2 test themselves 2 writing some cool poems and having them critizied Here's my first: "Untitled" Silver clouds Blood red sky shrieks fill the dusk A spinning barrel "Click" One messenger of death, life to some, left Closed eyes, one final prayer crosses the lips of the damned One final breath drawn "sigh" Life no more [center]...[/center] Sometimes i look at the night sky The starry sky, bright and pure I think to myself I wish i had someone special to share it with Then i remember you How we used to gaze at the sky, and each other for hours I feel a tug in my heart, a warm feeling It feels good on a cold, lonely nite like to nite [center]...[/center] Life is an illusion for the coming death which is the destiny promised to all life. Fearlessly we stand to face the impending wrath of ultimate destruction. Fear and Hatred rule the day, and pride clouds our minds the long road of freedom is ahead of us and our journey has only begun The Mind of a disconnected soul He looks up with dead eyes at the droplets of water streaming down the glass pane. Slowly he feels his grip on sanity and reality slipping away. He cries out but on one hears his screams. The cold creeps all over his body and his head slips below the water surface, watching the world from another place..............another perspective, placed here by forces unseen but never belonging Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KittyLynn Posted June 1, 2003 Share Posted June 1, 2003 [SIZE=1][COLOR=dodgerblue]Ok. I' not a moderator.But since none of them has caught this yet.I'll say it: You should read the rules because there can't be double posts. And certainly not 5 posts in a row...*wonders why a mod isn't here* This is scary to be saying all this...:nervous: Well, nice poems. Some of them were...I can't place it, but there's something..irrgular. Well keep it up! *wants a mod to come* Toodles. CL And we aren't ungrateful people, like you said. People just haven't had the chance to read/post anything yet. I think I'm sounding mean...-_-[/COLOR][/SIZE] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
zerocrisis Posted June 2, 2003 Author Share Posted June 2, 2003 Hey thanks alot for the heads up its greatly appreciated, and sorry if anyone got scared, i was feeling a bit frustrated i dont like being stressed cuz i cant do my best work when im stressed, but if u guys like i'll post my first ever poem that i wrote, i think that you'll like it, so if u guy want it then just request it. (and for u KittyLynn i'll do a special poem jus for u) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
T man Posted June 13, 2003 Share Posted June 13, 2003 The poem Untitled is cool and it reminds me spyke in cowboy bebop.:demon: :ball: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
zerocrisis Posted June 13, 2003 Author Share Posted June 13, 2003 thanks alot, and it really does seem like Bebop but the funny thing is i was thing about trigun when i wrote it, weird huh Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted June 17, 2003 Share Posted June 17, 2003 Go ahead an put up your first poem. I want to read it. If you want here are a few suggestions for your poem's names. Poem 1: Sounds(kinda because you have a lot of sounds going on in it) Poem 2: The Sky Remembers You(I have no clue where I got this from, it just popped up) Poem 3: Destiny (I dpn't know where I got this from either):confused: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
zerocrisis Posted June 17, 2003 Author Share Posted June 17, 2003 hey thanks alot i'll put them up went i get the chance and 2morrow i'll post another poem, and i gurantee that u ppl will like it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mitch Posted June 17, 2003 Share Posted June 17, 2003 [size=1] Double posting, as pointed out, is not allowed. I have merged the posts for you. I hope that you won't do it again.[/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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