Epitome Posted May 21, 2003 Share Posted May 21, 2003 I wake up Get in the shower and rrush my teeth later that hour Walk down stairs Eat my breakfast nothing to do doing nothing Go up to my room wipe off the mirror Its what I see Its what I dont see Im not there Im. Not. There Thats what Im saying Im. not there Having nothing to do Later that night My life is over Over with a knife My first one, go easy on me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted May 21, 2003 Share Posted May 21, 2003 Its really interesting because when I dont detect ryhme I look for a deeper meaning. When I cannot detect a deeper meaning I look for some theme. I found your theme. It was suicide. I didnt understand your message though. If I was to depict it, it might be a suicide letter, but the way it is wrote, it shows no pain. No reasons, even if there are good reasons. Its intrigueing, to say the least. *Looks at it more* , you know I am missing something. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epitome Posted May 21, 2003 Author Share Posted May 21, 2003 Its about someone who kills himslef because no one ever bothers to even notice him. Thats where I got Im not there from. The beggining supposed to be a regular day of his parents not even saying hello or anything. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted May 21, 2003 Share Posted May 21, 2003 Depression has hit me pretty hard recently. I'm sorry I didnt notice that..It was pretty obvious. *smacks self* I'm sorry. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epitome Posted May 21, 2003 Author Share Posted May 21, 2003 No its okay, It was my first one, probably was hard to understand. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sara Posted May 21, 2003 Share Posted May 21, 2003 [size=1]Nah, it was okay. Eff... You conveyed pretty well what you were going for. Sort of a dull, empty, bored feeling about it, too.[/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epitome Posted May 21, 2003 Author Share Posted May 21, 2003 Yea it was supposed to be like that. I wanted to make it feel like he was like nothing in the world. And if it was bad it was my first one so be nice please. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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