Evil Pancakes Posted May 21, 2003 Share Posted May 21, 2003 Hope you don't mind longish... it's untitled It?s incredible what one can do with something so small It?s tiny Look at that I can?t breathe Walls are closing Getting smaller Am I claustro? It?s not even Worth saying the word Don?t continue No strength To keep writing That one word How do I keep going? It just goes on And on Continues Sick of you Sick of me Can?t get me To shut up Banging on the walls Of my head Turning over Twitching In my bed Where?s the light It doesn?t blind Why won?t it blind me Blow across my face I need a cool wind To? Stand in I need Time Time Give me time To do nothing Nothing Won?t stand for it Can?t stand it Can?t sit down Won?t watch it Mesmerized by it By the thought Drifting Drifting Drift and die Sing a song Sing me a song To hum through the hours of dying All of them It won?t go Why Why won?t it leave me Alone Darkness In the corner Tiny crack A corner Stupid Useless Always so useless Rid me of it Get rid of me Dump me in there Kick me out Leave me to rot Rot in my invisible grave In the cold In the rain The rain that beats Mercilessly Against the skin The peel of my soul Rip it open Rest in peace Open Open your eyes Shut them Idiot Never open them Be safe Safe Bottles Caps Needles and pins Sew it up Break the glass Open the cut Splinters Wasting my time I know it Why do I do it If I know it Always do it Again And again Screw up You?re a screw up Accept it and shut up Busy Busy and loud Out of touch Thought you were a natural Silly child Lord only knows you?ll survive God? What god Didn?t really think you?d make it Did you Animal mind down the drain The trashcan of the universe Paranoid What?s behind you? Scared? Better be Watch out They?re always out to get you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sara Posted May 25, 2003 Share Posted May 25, 2003 [size=1]Good job. That's very..well, I'm not sure what the word is, but it's very that, I assure you. ^_~ It might be easier to take if you broke it up...there are some likely places. Nice.[/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Evil Pancakes Posted May 25, 2003 Author Share Posted May 25, 2003 That is the point exactly... thoughts and feelings coming together at once in a nonmelodic panic high... breaking it up, though I'm sure you mean string some sentences back together would defeat its vibe. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KittyLynn Posted May 25, 2003 Share Posted May 25, 2003 [SIZE=1][COLOR=dodgerblue]Nice. But you ramble...I mean you begin with something and completely go into something else. I lost my train of thought, and it looks as though you did too. I think you could break it up and fix it up so at least people know when you start..rambling with things that don't make sense.. Whoa now I'm starting to ramble and not make sense. ^^;; OOps. Toodles. CL:)[/COLOR] [/SIZE] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Evil Pancakes Posted May 25, 2003 Author Share Posted May 25, 2003 Not many things do make sense, when you break them down. Who knows what dreamlike illusion is really before us? I merely allow it to be interpreted freely. Jumbled up is the way everything is... What we think is unorganized and uncaged. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Evil Pancakes Posted May 25, 2003 Author Share Posted May 25, 2003 Adorable avatar, btw. XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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