Writing Dynasty Warriors: The new generation ( Fan Fic. story )

[G/S/B Master]

[i] It's 221 AD, and the 3 dynastys have broken apart. The Wei dynasty was victorious over the other 2. Sadly the hero of chaos is dead. As well as the other heroes from the other dynastys. Now a new eneration of officers and generals have taken over and ruled over their rightful kingdoms. There was no wars going on until one day...

That one day, the dynastys were reunited. That one day, the mighty Warrior Lu Bu came back. This time, Lu Bu have reinforcements so powerful that even 1 soldier have almost the abilities have becoming an officer. Lu bu's forces charged at the Wu kingdom. The other kingdoms immediatly heard the news and took action.

The war began and the 3 kingdom was struggling. The only option they had is to make them retreat. And they did make them retreat. Now the word is clear, Lu Bu must be eliminated....permanentely. [/i]

" Hows our soldier holding up, " said a man.
" Bad my majesty, they can only hold up for so long," said the messenger.
" Send in the officers.... we can't afford to lose this battle..."he replied.

[i] Suddenly a 2nd messenger came in. [/i]

" Sir, a sorcerer summoned a wall of geyser. And thats affecting our march towards the enemy camp," said the 2nd messenger.
" Tell everyone that I'm joining the battle," said the man
" Ok Sir Cao Jin ," replied the 2 messengers.

[i] Cao Jin summoned his 8 elite bodyguard,and they ran into battle. [/i]

How do you think of this story so far?

[Jagan]

So far, it's all right. It's short but it leaves you wondering what's going on.

[Sara]

[size=1]Run it through spellcheck.

After the dialogue begins, you should stop with the italic narrating, and just write what's going on in the same manner you write who's saying what.

It's a kind of short to do say anything else, although maybe you're moving a little fast.[/size]