Writing Yu-Gi-Oh!: Wizards, Warriors, & Warlords!

[Jagan]

This is my first story and it's not finished yet so bear with me.

CHAPTER 1: Whiplash
James sat down at the battle booth. The new dueling rules came with new ways of dueling. The CCG rules were still followed, onlly you sat at a booth ans had an electric table you played on, and you were seperated from your opponent by a tinted tempered glass window. James Hill was new to the game. His first opponent was Jin Tekton(The main character).
Jin started by playing two magic cards down and sonic Bird in defense mode. "I'll use his effect tyo bring a ritual card into my hand." Jin bringfs up the Black Illusion Ritual card into his hand. "End my turn make your last move."
"Cocky for someone who just put up a wall." James bragged. "I place one monster face down in defense position. Go." Jin giggled as he drew his card. "Time for your defeat. I place two cards face down in my magic/trap card zones and play Lord of Dragons. Activate Flute of summoning Dragon and Black Illusion Ritual. I summon Toon Blue Eyes and Red Eyes Black Dragon from the Lord of D. and sacrifice sonic Bird to bring out Relinquished. I will now attack with my dragons, wiping out all of your 5000 Life Points."
"Your good. I lost. I'm new though. I will beat you again. Watch yourself." James threatened.
"Yeah. I'll do that." Jin looked at the window seeming to study his beaten opponent.
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What do you think? Critizing encouraged.

[Shinryuu(GP)]

Where's the Toon World required to summon the Toon Blue Eyes?

[EMU]

Two words:

Adjectives. Adverbs.

Use them wisely. :)