Writing A couple poems. Don't hurt me if there're bad.

[Kitsune_Girl]

[b]White Roses[/b]



I saw them there, in the store today

The white roses? they took my breath away

With their beauty so pure and so proud

Gentle and innocent, but screaming so loud

I could not turn away; for it was you they reminded me of

And how they suited you warmly, like sunshine from above

The two of you inseparable, in my mind and my heart

You belong together, so why should you be apart







[b]A Song Unheard[/b]



I wonder why, and I wonder long

Why no one else can hear my song

Am I a victim, or am I to blame

Baring disappointment, of a soul?s shallow shame

Thru open windows, into hearts I do speak

The response is the same, as if I spoken in Greek

It must be me, with the heart of granite

Looking for home, on a distant planet

I resent life?s way, its pervasive game

No one can change, all remaining the same

Always hoping there?s something more

God help me please, may my heart endure







[b]Pain[/b]



Pain! Leave me be!

Pain! Please let me go!

From your grip is there no escape

In the day and in the night

There is no rest from your weary fight



Pain! Why are you the one?

Chosen to teach, all of life's sum



You drive me mad, with all that is bad

But teach me all that I know, to learn and grow



Now that I know and have learned my folly

Will you please leave, or must I still bereave?



You?ve served your purpose now let me be

Or is it only in death?that one escapes from thee?





[b]The Man In The Mirror[/b]



What?s inside of me, that makes me feel like I do

Wanting to burst out of me, I wish I knew

Like a face with no name am I a man going insane

These feelings within, where do they come from



They?ve always been there even as a child

Vying for my attention they?re driving my wild

Are they just a lie, what if they are true

What do they want I wish I knew



In the late night hours and in my dreams

I hear its voice I hear its screams

In the times of pain and loneliness

It?s voice grows stronger, in the emptiness



Quite! Be still! Please let me be!

What does it want, always haunting me?



Never true peace it?s always there

When I look in the mirror and peel back the layer

It stares at me thru my own two eyes

These feelings inside there is no place to hide






Good? Bad? Should I go jump off a cliff? Am I insane? You tell me.

---Kitsune_Girl

[Sara]

[size=1]They're not bad. Some of the rhymes seem kind of forced...like you're trying to keep rhyming, and are completely at a loss for a word that makes sense. [/size]

[Megami No Yami]

They're pretty good, and like she said, Id have to agree with that that ure forcing them to rhyme, but in other words, I like them, Ilike ur choice of subject

[KittyLynn]

[SIZE=1][COLOR=dodgerblue]I especially likes the first one.And the Song one. But like Sara said about the rhyming,it seemed forced.

Toodles.
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