Writing Poem by Weh

[Break]

[size=1][color=CC0000]I wrote this one because I've been feeling down as of the start of this week, just to get my mind off of things really.. Here it is.

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dark crows cackled overhead,
as wind whispered through twisted trees.
the trail is long forgotten, not truly dead,
yet has been unlocked once more with ease.

through this wasteland, the boy must tread,
and erase all evil with a couragous face.
finally, he lies slumbering in his bed,
and must save the remaining grace.

the journey he takes is a fearful one,
thankfully guidance has been given,
and he, in that place must trust none.
by the wise man's words he is driven:

'take heed to my words, boy.
you must listen.
destroy the evil and stop its ploy,
then save the thing that does glisten.

a door to that thing is rare,
I am sure, it must be certain,
but a riddle I will leave you to bear:
"eyes on the wall are but a curtain."

now come along, you must leave,
for you, I've opened the gate.
remember the riddle, and always believe,
that a little courage can make you great.'

the boy stepped into the trail,
and gasped at the twisted darkness.
'a latern', he thought, 'that will not fail.'
he lit it quickly and saw a mess.

it covered the cobbled path,
a thick crimson stream.
'this may be the aftermath.'
he said, hearing a scream.

quickly, he turned and glimpsed evil.
pure evil, purest it ever was.
fear began to burrow, like a hungry weevle.
frozen, he fell onto the ground's moss.

this was to be the end.
the boy was very sure.
now he understood the riddle,
it now was completely clear.

as evil stood over him,
and the boy succumbed to pain,
its eyes opened like a curtain,
and he saw the glistening rain.[/center][/color][/size]

[Epitome]

Not bad. I like the tone of it. Nice poem.

[Mitch]

[size=1][font=century gothic][color=gray] This is definitely your best poem I've seen from you so far; it's a little iffy in some places, and it doesn't have as much flow [i]for my taste[/i], but it's great. I think the ending is kind of uncertain, though. You could've went on!

Ah, anyways, I told you anyone can write poetry; all it takes is time and will and want.[/size][/font][/color]

[Solo Tremaine]

I really like this style, and poem ^_^ It reminds me a lot of Link for some reason.

I think the uncertainty at the end is good. It feels deep and symbolic in some way, although as to what I'm not too sure ^_^; It's still very good.

[KittyLynn]

[SIZE=1][COLOR=dodgerblue]*takes a deep breath* This is definately one of the bestest thing I have ever read. I think that the flow was iffy in some spots, but you wuickly came back to a nice rhythem. I loved it. *saves*[/COLOR][/SIZE]