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[COLOR=firebrick]Author's Note: Hello all! This is my first submission to the OtakuBoards Literature Section and my second finished work that wasn't a school assignment. *chibi tears* I feel so proud. *stops crying* Anywho, the song used in this story is "There Is" by Box Car Racer. Wondeful song! Please review! C-ya on the other side! *flys off on one of her winged monkey soldiers*

There Is

Daemon stared boredly out of the window of the Greyhound bus. Rain pounded against the glass and lightning flashed in the distance. Some adventure this was...He had hoped this would take his mind off of Brandy, but all it did was make him think about the situation more. It had been a whole year since Brandy had left town. One whole, entire year since she had left everything she knew for an adventure. She told Daemon she had needed time to think about things. She told him it would help her become a happier person. All it was doing for him was dishing up a great big helping of angst.
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This vacation's useless
These white pills aren't kind
I've given alot of thought
On this thirteen hour drive
I miss the grinded concrete where we sat past eight or nine
And slowly finished laughing in the glow of our headlights
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The bus came to an abrupt halt in front of a rest area. He didn't feel hungry or anything, but he got off with the others. Anything to get away from that bus. That stupid bus...Full of stupid memories...Okay, maybe they weren't so stupid, but they were useless. Brandy wasn't coming back and that was that.
The rest area was just like any other. Fast food, gift shops, restrooms, vending machines, and...payphones. Maybe he could---no...that was stupid...She wouldn't even pick up. Even if she did, she'd hang up when she found out it was him. But still...It was so tempting.
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I've given alot of thought to
The nights we used to have
The days have come and gone
Our lives went by so fast
I faintly remember breathing, on your bedroom floor
Where I lad and told you but you sweared you loved me more
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He hesitated as he made his way to the phones. What if she didn't pick up? But there was a small voice in the back of his head that asked, "What if she does?" He answered himselft, "I'll have no idea what to say."
He slipped forty-five cents into the coin slot and slowly dialed Brandy's cell phone number. One ring...Two rings...Three rings...Four rings..."Hello, you've reached the voice mail of Brandy Aiken. That's me! Um, I'm not here right now, so leave your name, number, and a short message after the beep. Ciao!" Beep...
"Hi...uh, Brandy? The is Daemon. Remember me? Um...I'm on a trip to San Fransisco. It's pretty boring, but...Um...I'll call back later. Bye!"
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Do you care if I don't know what to say
Will you sleep tonight
Will you think of me
Will I shake this off
Pretend it's all okay
That there's someone out there that feels just like me
There is
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He hung up the receiver and took a deep breath. "That was totally lame..." he thought, "Totally...I guess it's back to the bus."
He exited the rest area and dragged himself back on the bus. He took his seat and began rummaging through his backpack, trying to find something to do. The first thing he cam to was a CD and CD Player. Unfortunately, It was Box Car Racer, Brandy's favorite band. He stuffed it back in the bag. The next thing he pulled out was a group of photos. The first was a picture of him and Brandy. He just growled, shoved them back, and continued his search. The third thing was a bulging envelope.
"What's this?" he asked himself. Upon opening it, he found that it was his collection of notes from Brandy. His jaw dropped. If this wasn't weird, he didn't know what was. He shook himself out of this state of complete disbelif. He closed the envelope and decided he would just sleep. There wasn't much else to do. As he slowly drifted off into dreamland, one question stayed in the back of his mind. Would he ever be able to write her back?
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Those notes you wrote me
I kept them all
I've given alot of thought
On how to write you back this fall
With every single letter, in every single world
There will be a hidden message about a boy that loves a girl
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That night, Daemon sat alone in his hotel room in San Fransisco. Even with the nap he had had on the bus, he was still tired. He kicked off his shoes and eased himself down. He was going to enjoy himself tomorrow. It didn't matter that Brandy wasn't there. And so, for the second time that day, Daemon fell asleep.
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Do you care if I don't know what to say
Will you sleep tonight
Will you think of me
Will I shake this off
Pretend it's all okay
That there's someone out there who feels just like me
There is
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The next morning, Daemon was awakened by a knock at the door. "Who the hell...?" he grumbled groggily. He rubbed his eyes and called out, "Who is it?"
"Room Service!" a feminine voice replied cheerfully. He didn't remember ordering room service, but free food was always good. He pulled on a pair of jeans and opened the door. There stood Brandy.
"B-Brandy?!" he stammered.
"No, it's Madonna, " she replied putting her hands on her hips and smiling. Daemon smiled back and put his arms around her. She hugged him back and whispered, "It's been a long time Daemon. I missed you."
"I missed you to Brandy..." he whispered back.
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Do you care if I don't know what to say
Will you sleep tonight
Will you think of me
Will I shake this off
Pretend it's all okay
That there's someone out there who feels just like me
Do you care if I don't know what to say
Will you sleep tonight
Will you think of me
Will I shake this off
Pretend it's all okay
That there's someone out there who feels just like me
There is
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THE END
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Awww... *grins* That's really sweet. My only critisim is that it started off really strongly, but it faded out towards the end. I know you were using phrases from a song, but "more" should have happened in between them. I mean, she could have missed him at the hotel and he thought someone was stalking him. Something more should have come from the phone call, how did she know where he was? Y'know?

Meh... I'm babbling ^_^ -- I love your writing style, it's emotive, I just get the feeling you were in a hurry to get it finished ^_^()
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[COLOR=firebrick]Thank you for the review Baka! *looks over story* You're right, it did fade out near the end. *looks back* Prolly because I was up till 12:00 A.M. writing it, but time is no excuse...*smiles* To the editing room I go! *tries to march off but runs into wall* Ow...[/COLOR]
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Hey there

Yeah it was sweet, although I'm a romance writer myself so our styles might conflict, know what I mean. Anyway, I think that the ideas were good and it was well written, however, like baka said it did get a bit weak towards the end. Although it did give ya a nice warm feeling at the end.
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[COLOR=firebrick]Thank you too Doukeshi! I love the reviews:love2:! Anywho, I'm thinking about writing a sort of sequel to 'There Is' to explain Brandy's side:idea:. Ya know, how she found out where he was and all...I might use another song, but I'll try to work with it a bit more the next time. C-ya on the other side! *flys off on one of her winged monkey soldiers*[/COLOR]
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