Guest dayday Posted June 15, 2003 Share Posted June 15, 2003 I kind of do poems for no particular reason but can you still tell me if it's good or not? Sometimes I feel like crying But the tears won't come I'm fed up with always hiding myself Never revealing who I really am Never letting out my true self But always keeping it with me I don't qant to change To me it makes no sense To change yourself just to fit in I'll sit in the corner All my life if I have to Crouched into a ball crying But why won't my tears flow They do for everything else Now when I finally want to cry THe tears won't flow from my eyes Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 Wow...your good at writing! I love the feel to it. Keep writting, your good at it dayday!!! Hope to see more of your writtings later on. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 Thanks that really helps me out a lot. If you want here's another one. Oh and by the way I do a lot of freeverse. The rain softly beats on my face Telling me to stay calm and not worry I listen to the rushing wind Its song rings high The rain keeps coming Whispering to me all its secrets I can feel the heat of it It's that now It doesn't burn I stand looking into the sky Envying its work It can cover thw whole world In just the blink of an eye Doing different things at the same time The sky holds the rain as it falls Beating softly on my face Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 Ohhh, that one is better then the first one! I love it...rain lalalaa. Love those freeverse poems. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Night Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 Hey dayday, when did you start writing poems. Keep it up, I view it as an art, not everyone can write poems and youve obviously got great talent. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 I think I started like 2 or 3 years ago. It's only when I don't have anything else to do I write them. Or when I get mad at somebody I might write something. Nothing much though. What do you think of this one? It?s those kind you see everyday The ones that pass by Leaving you behind Never really caring Always let you go first Without despair or hate Just putting you away in the closet Then leaving you there forever Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 That one is just like what happens every day to every one. People just pass by with no consuren. It's great one, because it symbolizes the world!!! Your going into my buddy list.:toothy: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 Thanks again, just for that I'll do a little something for you. The next one I write is dedicated to you.:D Sorry about using the same word over a lot. People think they know what pain is They think it's when you're hurt Getting shot or stabbed or kicked They think that's what pain iall about To tell you the truth I always feel pain But what other people think is pain is not Pain is all inside When you feel you don't belong anywhere Feeling like the world is against you I feel it all the time My heart hurts because it's crying Whenever I ask it to stop It just cries more Please someone save me from this world Somebody save me from the nothing I've become Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 *clapps* Thanks dayday!!! :blush:I'm gonna make something dedicated to you too. Wheee, love every thing dayday writes!!!:D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 Here's my next one. I think you'll like this one too since everyone else did. "Crying FLowers" Flowers that cry All through the night Hold in their pain Til no one's in sight The tears will flow And no one can say That flowers don't cry During the day ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Oh and thanks for the dedication. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 Your welcome...and your right! I did like the poem "Crying Flowers",it's great! Anyone who reads it will never think of flowers in the same way. People will think more and care about the world. Wheee, I know another persons who's is really cool. Heheee, daydays cool. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 You're cool too Ruby, thanks. I hope you don't mind I'm runnig out of things to say. So here's the next one. Oh and this is a 'Tanka'. The light brings me back All the times I've felt real pain The day I was born Took most of my life I know Now I'm born again and free Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 I love that "Tanka" it's much better then mine. And it means things that people can relate to. I don't care if you run out of things to say. I run out of things alot when I'm writing books. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 You write books? That's interesting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 Yeah, but I'm in the middle of two books right now. I run out of things to write some times between the two of them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 I just usually write sories but not necisarilly books. If I'm not interested in the part I'm writing I'll just fall out of it. But if I get a idea for later on in it, I'll try to hurry and get to that part before I forget. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 Alright, Thanks I'll keep that in mind and try to remember that. That is a good thing to try, I think I'll carry around a mini note book just in case. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 You're welcome and here i sthe next poem, an alphabet one. As I was on my way home By all the things around Calling me I heard a voice Down by the bench aching Except he wasn?t crying Falling it looked like instead Gone in just a moment Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted June 16, 2003 Share Posted June 16, 2003 That's a great poem too, I've never heard of one done with the alphabet before. Very cool! Keep writing!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted June 17, 2003 Share Posted June 17, 2003 This is what I hear Those little voices ringing in my head Telling me to run Run away from all my troubles Leaving them behind As they did me Forever done with it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted June 17, 2003 Share Posted June 17, 2003 Ohhhh, *clapps* I love it!!! Everyone has voices in their head...some just want to say it though.:D I like your Sonfic too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted June 17, 2003 Share Posted June 17, 2003 Thanks, I'll try to have my next one up soon. My poem I mean. And thanks for reading my songfic. That's the only story I ever finished. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted June 17, 2003 Share Posted June 17, 2003 Well the Songic is a good one you should try to write more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted June 17, 2003 Share Posted June 17, 2003 And next up: When the tears flow All the pain dissapears Life starts to lose all meaing Nothing happens for the time It seems to stop and quake You never thought it could end this way The suffering just keeps coming Nothing can stop it from this point Just think of it all Life slowly drains form you And nothing will ever stop See through all the pain And let the tears flow Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted June 17, 2003 Share Posted June 17, 2003 And let the tears flow...I love this one too. I love all your poems, and stories of what I've seen so far. Your really are one of the best writers I know. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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