Sakura Posted June 29, 2003 Share Posted June 29, 2003 As some of you may have seen this is based on an RP I'm making.I made the story first but I've only posted it now. I want feedback here and I'm not a great writer. There are 4 main characters to begin with. [color=indigo]Sakura-Main Character.[/color]-Indigo [color=red]Brendan-Her best friend since children.[/color]-Red [color=blue]Katrina/Kat-Good friend.[/color]-Blue [color=teal]Alex-Just met as they left Vale on their journey.[/color]-Teal If you want more info on the beginning storyline check the Recruitment Section. ---------------------------------------------- [b][SIZE=3]~Chapter One~[/SIZE][/b] Sakura,Brendan,Kat and Alex yawned,stretched and rubbed their eyes from sleep.They groaned and rubbed their backs from the uncomfortable night's sleep on the hard ground.Sakura and her friends grabbed their blades and strapped them onto their backs.All the blades had the same design.(Look at attachment.Minus the gun part of it.Instead it stretches straight out into a hilt without a cross-hilt)Sakura's was a a silver blue color with delicate designs and mystical writing in another language engraved on the blade.She called it the Saturn Blade.Brendan's looked like the Flame Saber in the picture.It was a fiery red color and was named the Inferno Blade.Kat's was like the Water Saber in the picture.It was a deep,rich blue color named the Tsunami Blade.And Alex's was an emerald green color called the Wind Blade. [COLOR=indigo]Let's go guys![/COLOR] Sakura looked in her bag and brought out a roll of parchment and unrolled it.Sakura placed her finger on a spot on the parchment. [COLOR=indigo]We're here...[/COLOR] Sakura dragged her finger in a north-east path on the map and stopped at a small village. [COLOR=indigo]And we need to get to here.Everyone be prepared because it's going to be a long walk.[/COLOR] Sakura said as she rolled up the map and pointed into the direction they would be heading. [COLOR=indigo]I want to get there by nightfall.[/COLOR] Everyone nodded and they began the next section of their journey. --------------------------------------------------- Ok people some feedback please. [img]http://www.rpgplanet.com/ff9/fanart/11.jpg[/img] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JJ Posted June 29, 2003 Share Posted June 29, 2003 When did we start? But good story! :) Keep writing! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sakura Posted June 29, 2003 Author Share Posted June 29, 2003 Oh JJRiddle we haven't started yet. Don't worry.I may be starting soon though. Thanks for the feedback. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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