Writing Unfinished fragment

[garnet]

Cold dark steel parades that
flow like water
Icicles that form within my mind-
"yeah we run so fast, but we're left behind"

Missiles for a country bent on slaughter
Weapons for a foreign crazy man
Yeah we'll slap his face, while we lend a hand

One day the Wave will wake us
Blinding light , electrons take us
Home again, and make us whole again

Cold dark steel parades that flow like water
Marchers bearing banners from the war
"If victory is near, why is peace so far?"
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This is a piece of an old song a band of mine once(The Fragments) messed around with, thought I would post it unfinished.It was a scene from a May Day parade with the red flags and the river of tanks that spurred this bit.Alot of my writing can be found on alt.surrealism from 1998 on under my last name, "sgouros", which you can google on and find some pieces, if you care to.

Hello there ladies and gentlemen, care to add to it or modify it?

[OtakuSennen]

Heh. That reminds me of "The Epitaph of the Twilight" from .hack//SIGN.. Considering the overall theme of doom and a "wave.."

Hm.. Well, if I may make a comment, I'd change it from "Marchers bearing banners from the war" to "Marchers bearing banners of the war".. I mean, if you say "from" the war, it sorta sounds like the war is over...

But overall, I love the lyrics! ^_^

[garnet]

The idea for the tune was water.
The equipment came like a stream, tanks and artillery pieces and rocket forces trucks, they (the cold war russians) would have a squad of bombers fly over and over to make it look like they had more of them.Waves.
:-)
So yeah, a wave is relevant.All that steel, all that running to nowhere....
Thanks for the nice comment.

garnet