Writing Dragun: Prologue

[Dragon Warrior]

I'm starting a book called [b]Dragun[/b]. It's about the Universe's most powerful and dangerous being (Dragun Lefur) being reincarnated into a human named Falkner McCloud. Now, at the age of 22, the story revolves around Falkner and how he atunes to his past life's powers. He meets with a girl named Ro who helps him dodge a rough group of bounty hunters who want to kill the man who was once Dragun Lefur. Here's the prologue to it. It's 3 pages in MIRCOSOFT WORD so it's decently long. I want to get this published, so you know...

[b]Before it all happened...[/b]


He was being chased. He was a convict all over the universe. He was notorious for Universal Planetary Annihilation. His name is Dragun Lefur.

It started at one thing, then grew to another. He was soon destroying worlds with a flick of a finger. It all had to end sometime. That time was now. He just accomplished obliterating Regainor F12, a planet known for it?s vast water quantity, and now he?s out for the next hit which happened to be Lorcasta. Using his ability to zap across space at an implausible speed, he was at Lorcasta within seconds. Lorcasta neighbored Regainor F12, but it was still a great distance away.

Dragun didn?t just devastated any planet, though. Only ones he felt had no purpose. That was mostly all planets he saw, of course. Stopping at Lorcasta and having a look at it?s rich landscape made him wonder if he should spare it. Of course, he wouldn?t. Taking one last look at the curious creatures that inhabited the outlandish alien planet, he shot a dynamic blast down on Lorcasta?s surface, demolishing it.

It gave him glee to watch the planets he destroyed burn to the final crisp of earth until the power of his shot collapsed into itself. As the light of his attack faded, he caught a flash out of the corner of his eye. Turning slightly and letting his head do the rest, he sensed enemies approaching. To be more specific, police.

They advanced at a swift speed, keeping their scent of Dragun on their radar screen. They were closing in. Fortunately for Dragun, the police and their scheme to jump him was not matched by Dragun?s velocity. He zipped past them and landed upon the planet Ziborg T-Core, a lone planet made up of mostly one giant city. It orbits far from other planets, but Dragun made it there in a flash, nonetheless.

Though, Dragun didn?t sense the army of police forces inhabiting that very planet?s landscape. They had him trapped the moment he disembarked. Merely grinning at them, Dragun raised two closed fists out in front of his chest, arms straight. The fists began to glow with an awesome power which caused the police to feel a bit uneasy. Some even backed up a bit to keep distance. When Dragun glowed like that, there was no telling what he had planned in his devious mind for the opponent.

Dragun shot a smirk at one officer who was trembling greatly like a broken down car. With that, Dragun pointed his left fist at the man. The officer yipped and drew back behind the crowd. They all new very well that wouldn?t save him. Dragun rose his fist into the air and fired a blast into the sky at an angle. In dove back down diagonally toward the retreating officer. There was no escaping and he was soon finished off by the attack.
All the police looked at the sizzling spot on the asphalt that was once their companion. Dragun grinned at the sign of fear in them. This is what he lived for. One man made a wild attempt at slaying Dragun alone, but received a blast through his torso as a counterattack. The man fell to the ground, a hole through his chest the size of a volleyball.
Dragun soon was fed up with all the endeavors at defeating him and clamped his hands together into one fist. He then spun in a circle, assailing the group of officers surrounding him. Dust and smoke cascaded into the area as the men?s bodies sputtered into nothingness. Dragun beamed at his victory and blew away the smoke coming from his fists.

He may have celebrated too soon, though, for he was suddenly blown right off the ground by a large missile. Taking a tumble to the right, Dragun regained his stance and noted a helicopter in the sky.

?You?ll have to do better than that!? Dragun shouted in rage. He chucked a fireball-like substance t the helicopter, dissolving it into dust along with the passengers. Taking flight, Dragun winged through the air blasting all the opponents he sensed or saw. He even killed ones that meant no harm to him.

Finally becoming fed up, he pointed two open palms downward at Ziborg T-Core?s surface. He was planning to exterminate the whole planet. Having this plan in mind, he fired a blast vertically downward with fury. Unfortunately for him, it was a trap. A large metal shield of some sort was unfolded out of nowhere and reflected Dragun?s blast right back at him. The blast was strong enough to destroy a planet so it was effective enough on Dragun.

Lefur fell from his position in the sky to the ground below where he was found unconscious by police and scientists. A man approached him, most likely a scientist since he wore a white lab coat. He stroked his gray beard and peered at the lifeless Dragun. ?He?s not dead,? he finally said. ?Just out cold. That?s best anyways. If he were dead, he may be able to return. He have plans for him back at the labs, Officer. You wouldn?t mind us taking him off your hands, would you??

The Chief Officer rubbed the bald spot under his cap. ?Mind? It?d be a life-saver. Can you imagine this? THING waking up and killing us all? I wouldn?t have it.?

?Excellent. Then we must take him right away. We?ll make sure Dragun never bothers anyone again with his recklessness.?

?Make sure you do.? With that, the Chief Officer left the premises as did the bearded man who had a few people load Dragun?s limp body onto a ship to return to Earth.


Comments?

[Kinetic]

It's a good prologue, I just noticed a couple of spelling errors.

As always, I enjoy your stories, comics, and games as well. Good job, I look forward to seeing a book out of this. The story seems good, and pretty original. I like the idea of advanced technology with aliens and the sort along with physical abilities such as Dragun's. Good work :)

Keep the bounties comin'

[Dragon Warrior]

Spelling errors? Where? I didn't pick up any :(

Thanks, though ^^