Biida Posted July 8, 2003 Share Posted July 8, 2003 Silent prayers and whispered music, Raindrops falling upon my soul. A panel of glass seperating Man's subconscious and the dying world. An angel's tears, the wings of a cherub. The light of millions of golden eyes. A flash of lightning, nature's power. Another wingless faerie dies. Raindrops falling, nature singing. The Mother walking upon Her Earth. Children crying, scared of thunder. Not knowing what angels' tears are worth. Here we lay, fallen saviours, Each of us without our wings. Trapped inside our feeble minds. What could happiness ever bring? We lock ourselves into a cheap glass box. Our Soul's own calling we chose to leave. Our Mother weeping her tears of loss. Oh, what webs we weave... ~~~~ I just wrote it as a spur-of-the-moment thing, but I do really like it. ^-^ And by all means, comments and criticism are welcomed! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted July 9, 2003 Share Posted July 9, 2003 I don't really like to give critism unless it's to PoisonTongue. Anyway the poem was great. It was nice to hear a rhyming after all these free verses. Makes me want to write a few more of them myself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ars_magicae Posted July 9, 2003 Share Posted July 9, 2003 man that was a great poem. i love the metaphors in it and its deeper meanings *applaudes much* ;] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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