Guest dayday Posted July 10, 2003 Share Posted July 10, 2003 I guess I'll go ahead and start my new thread now. I don't really have anything else to do now. I thought of this one yesterday when my last one was closed. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~ You took it away from me The one thing I really loved How could you do it You took away my hope And acted like it was nothing Taking from the place That was called my home Broken down finally I thought I would never break But then I realized that there was That one thing I thought would never go Is now gone away from me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted July 10, 2003 Share Posted July 10, 2003 Realizing one of the best things you had going is always hard. Espicalyl when not being able to get it back. I like the thought in this cause of the meaning of something dear to you being gone. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted July 10, 2003 Share Posted July 10, 2003 Sometimes I'll copy some from my old thread if my mind is blank. ~~~~~~~~~~~ Living in this world Is so hard Just trying to face it Everyday it's not right I can't stand putting up with it It treats so bad Like I'm nothing to it But I have to bear The things that it does Or I'll be gone forever Without ever returning Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted July 10, 2003 Share Posted July 10, 2003 O_o Would that be considered spamming? Anyways I like the poem, although if it's one from the other thread then you know what I think of it. But I'm staying my opinon again. I like it, not being able to stand the way life treats you. Yet not wanting to give up and leave this place never to return. So having to bare it just from shill (sp) will power to go. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted July 10, 2003 Share Posted July 10, 2003 That wasn't from the other one, it was off the top of my head. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I need somebody Not just somebody Someone to love To be close to If you're never there I'll never breathe again If I'm never held by you again I'll just stop my life Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OtakuSennen Posted July 10, 2003 Share Posted July 10, 2003 Dayday, I like all your poems very much.. Are they based on real experiences of your own, like most poems? I feel I can relate to them somehow.. But I'd like to see new work. ^_^' If you're gonna take your ones that have already been posted somewhere else, please put in new ones as well... That's sort of repeating, which is sort of spam... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted July 10, 2003 Share Posted July 10, 2003 I'm happy someone else finally posted. But I haven't copied any yet. If that's spamming then I won't do it. And some are based on real life experiences but not all. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I stare into space Not seeing anything Then I see things around me They keep getting closer I can feel the heat around me It keeps burning I wait for my home to find me Until then I sit and watch the things Moving in closer on me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted July 10, 2003 Share Posted July 10, 2003 Sounds as if the person is zoning out, and imaging things. O_o See things get closer yet the sky stay the same. Feeling your heart burning too much to move, then just waiting for the home to come near along with same lines of everything else. ^^ That's a good one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted July 10, 2003 Share Posted July 10, 2003 This is about what the poem was about. Actually that was when I was in dark places and stared for a while, shadows started to get closer to me. It was hot where I was and I was waiting for someone to come and get me. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I can't see why I can't see the sky It seems so far away Yet it makes me sway I can almost feels it's touch But it's that much That I want to see it So much to see it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted July 11, 2003 Share Posted July 11, 2003 The rhyming...anyways some how I like the rhyming. It makes you think really, not being able to see the sky, having something so far away yet it changes your dirctions. Feeling it touch and longing to see something relates very well to the topic. ^^ Good poem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Taylor Hewitt Posted July 11, 2003 Share Posted July 11, 2003 These are very beautiful. I think you are a very good poem writer and should consider getting a few of your poems published. GOOD JOB! :D Best wishes Taylor Hewitt Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted July 12, 2003 Share Posted July 12, 2003 I'm happy other people are responding to these. Even though one of them I asked to, still makes me happier. ~~~~~~~~~~ Lost in the sea Being pulled deep out Trying to find my way back To the distant shore I can no longer see The waves keep pulling over top of me Dragging me down below Me gasping for air Trying to be freed Then I am finally pulled under I still there yet not There's no life left in me I no longer exist in this world I'm just a lonely body Being dragged through the sea Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted July 18, 2003 Share Posted July 18, 2003 ^^ Being dragged through the sea. Tossed and turned over till you just don't know if your there or not. Trying to get back to shore, it seems so close and so far away. I like it. ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted July 18, 2003 Share Posted July 18, 2003 Okay, this next one everyone should know where I got it from ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I'm slipping into my past That place that destroyed me It tortured me to no end So that's why I pull myself forward I don't want to be taken to that place It was never right when I needed it I will fight to stay here I want to keep moving forward To get away from my past Of all those hatred things that happened That tore me apart So I will stay here still fighting Never giving up to be free from my past Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest XBebop Posted July 22, 2003 Share Posted July 22, 2003 Beautiful, Dayday. Your choice of words are great, wish i could write like that.. lol ^_^' Yeah, i know where you got that from. My past haunts me also, everything bad that has ever happened to me, or bad things that i myself have done. I can't store those memories away and fprget them, like a haunting dream that never ends, an eternal nightmare, a nightmare i will never wake from, a shame that takes over me, Nothing has changed... well, i don't know where i got the idea from for that second paragraph, maybe it's my split personality.. lol ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spikey Posted July 22, 2003 Share Posted July 22, 2003 Good job. You are getting better by every poem. Keep it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Epsilon Posted July 22, 2003 Share Posted July 22, 2003 Good choice in words dayday. It's a great poem, with the hunting and the past trying to bring you back. Yet fighting to stay in the prestent time, and keep going forwards. ^^ It's great dayday! keep up the good work! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shinmaru Posted July 22, 2003 Share Posted July 22, 2003 Wow, these are some very good poems. I wish I could get my point across with such short poetry (all my stuff has to be long or it doesn't make sense lol). But your poems were all a great read. I'm glad I took the time to look at them! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted August 8, 2003 Share Posted August 8, 2003 *cries* I don't want my thread to die. LIVE!! LIVE!! ~~~~~~~~~~~ I can now see it I can see the way For the light and path Are far behind They slowed me down Tried to turn me around I always thought someone would stop me Try and keep me here But now I see There's only place left for me One place left to turn Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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