GreenEyedDragon Posted July 12, 2003 Share Posted July 12, 2003 This is a poem i wrote that is based on the Jesus films, where He is protrayed as more of a human, rather than this disconnected super-human guy... Still Human A little cross is our symbol so that we always remember and what does that cross do, but resemble the place that He died for us he buried our mistakes cleaned up our future and he eternally continues to do that ...as long as we keep messing up... He is our idol someone to look up to but he was just a person too Incredilbe, indeed never to sin but still, He was a human within He loved his family he loved his friends but he could not love a woman ...but who says he didn't want to?... ~alex Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Terpischore Posted July 12, 2003 Share Posted July 12, 2003 Nice poem! I like the rhyming, hah.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Taylor Hewitt Posted July 12, 2003 Share Posted July 12, 2003 Great job I love it. I am a jesus fan (well I'm christian :p). Awesome keep up the good work. 8/10 :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OtakuSennen Posted July 12, 2003 Share Posted July 12, 2003 It is extremely well written and extremely poetic. I especially like the line "...As long as we keep messing up.." That was the only sort of out-of-place line, and still that gave the poem an ounce of humor. 9.5/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GreenEyedDragon Posted July 13, 2003 Author Share Posted July 13, 2003 wow...thanks to all. i really apprecaite that, my last poem that i posted didn't get many responses...i got like...two...this one is one better! well, i hope more people respond to it, or atleast read it, i haven't done much poetry so i was posting to see if i should drop it, or keep it up... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eclectic Posted July 13, 2003 Share Posted July 13, 2003 Definitely keep it up. You have a lot of talent and could go very far with it. I like this poem, even though I don't believe in religion and most of it's symbolism, this makes me want to try and look past all the hypocrits again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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